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Haiku (rain drop falls)

Haiku Poem - 3rd Place

18 total reviews 
Comment from Sugarray77
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DD, I really liked your Haiku. you did a very good job of capturing the moment. The ripple effect from a droplet of water is indeed a moment caught in time. Well done on verse and presentation.

Melissa

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
    Thank you, Melissa. I appreciate your comments on my haiku poem. ~DD
Comment from Khurram1
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This is meaningful. The metaphor it contains is very aptly use. I wish a rain drop may create a ripple in everyone's stagnant life. A good read! Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
    Khurram1, thank you for reviewing my haiku. Yes, if only one might sit an appreciate drops of rain for all it brings then life with feel more invigorating for taking the time to see it. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Those ripples in a pond or lake are so much more interesting when your illustration and verse promote them.

Just one small drop can create a beautiful moment. But like life, that ripple fades with age (-:

The 5-7-5 - tradional Haiku or not - is my favorite genre.

Good luck in contest

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    I hear you Mark. We are the drop that create the ripples to celebrate our life in the end. Thank you for reviewing my haiku poem. ~DD
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written haiku about the process of the season changes and when the first action is taken the rest following in sequence until we see the results.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thank you Sandra. As always, I appreciate your comments. ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
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I suppose a purist might criticize this on the grounds that it lacks a 'kigo' seasonal reference, but for all I know those inscrutable orientals may well consider 'ripples' to be a kigo. Not winter because the pond is frozen, but perhaps autumn when the falling leaves create the ripples.

Now perhaps I am thinking like a Japanese.

2nd Review.
Perhaps now, you are too. This is a briliant double meaning kigo that also improves the satori line. A good solution.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Hi Jim, yes you got me. I neglected to add a kigo. Thank you for your keen observation and very helpful input. Do you think the tweaked version fixes that? ~DD
reply by Pantygynt on 13-Apr-2019
    Oh, don't we make a great team. I have added a comment to my review. A brilliant solution.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Fantastic! I can breathe a sigh of relief. You are the best Jim.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
    Jim, check out my haiku now. I have tweaked again. I thought of telling you as I know you will appreciated it... I hope :-) ~DD
reply by Pantygynt on 14-Apr-2019
    It gets better with each tweak. Another double ententre springs to life and falls for those ripples anen't they gorgeous?
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
    Jim, I knew you would get it. It is the ones that live across the water that will not. Thank you. Another sigh of relief. ~DD
Comment from Maria Jose Garcia
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Beautifully written and it can be understood in two different ways: literally and metaphorically. A small action or act of kindness can cause a big change.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
BTW, I love the word ripple.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    MJG, thank you for your thoughtful review and for totally understanding the hidden meaning beyond the obvious. ~DD
Comment from lyenochka
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Very well done definition haiku which clearly tells me what the "ripple effect" is. In the two years here, I've been given so much feedback about haiku structure and one of them is that the haiku title should be just the first line as in : haiku (one fluid drop)
I think the readers would still understand meaning without the title.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Thank you Helen for your appreciated review. I posted it waaaay past midnight and forgot about the title requirement. ~DDxx
reply by lyenochka on 12-Apr-2019
    I've done similar things in my late night reviews. Totally understand! ♥
Comment from BeasPeas
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A very nicely composed haiku. Yes, for every action there is a reaction. Whether it be good or not so good, it will ripple out and cause repercussions. Marilyn

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thank you Marilyn for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Have a great weekend. ~DD
Comment from Sally Law
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I love your poetry. So profound and to the point. I always get you. I hate it when I read a poem and I think, what the hell was that? A fine haiku and entry for the contest,
Sal :+))

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thank you so much Sal. I truly appreciate your support and understanding of my ramblings. It is more worthwhile when someone else gets what I am saying without me having to explain it further or for a personal roll of my eyes thinking they took it literally. Blessings to you. ~DDxx
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello PoemsOfDD
Your haiku is great I like how you gave us a clear vision of what a (single fluid drop) note you have only four syllables in your first line
May I suggest instead of
One fluid drop
say sin-gel flu-id drop
Gert

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Hello Gert, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku and for your observation of syllable count. The maximum number of syllables for a haiku is up to 17 so it is not required to have a 5-7-5 format. I appreciate your feedback. ~DD
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Apr-2019
    Hi PoemsOfDD
    You are welcome, good to know that you could use less than 17 syllables. Gert
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
    Thank you Gert ;-)