Comment from Six-Star Writer

Excellent

Again, as in the "mosaics" poem I just read: your obsession with the components that make up the whole of something. This is definitely your forte. And you seem to have an attraction to stained glass.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments on the piece. Stained glass is beautiful; also a great metaphor for transfiguration, for the spiritual, the illuminated. What I like about stained glass is that is a whole made up of individual shapes, individual colors correlated within a theme. estory

Comment from LG Wolfe

Excellent

Your metaphor for humanity is so descriptive it makes me wonder if you saw the literal figurines. Regardless, you've painted them so beautifully that I can see them clearly, along with their human versions. Wonderful work.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging comments about the poem. I'm glad you felt that the image worked so well; I'm not sure if this is one of my better ones. I like the beginning and the end, but I think it could use some cohesion. estory

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was a good write, estory. I really liked the imagery you used in it to make your point until the end of the piece. It had a good flow as well. Nice job.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your supportive comments. I'm glad you thought it was so well crafted. I still have some issues with it, i'd like it to have a little cohesion. I think I like the beginning and the end. estory

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hello Estory, Isn't it funny the way writers can write things one way and the readers always bring their own interpretations? I didn't see this poem the way you wrote it. I saw it more in line with all of the dreams I had growing up that were taken from me one by one, for one reason or another. Then, when you have it all, everything is perfect and everyone is happy... for about 5 minutes... the rug is pulled out from under and the whole thing comes crashing to the ground and the world as we know it, shatters into a million pieces... never to be put back together again... kind of like Humpty Dumpty.
Yup... that's about right... well said.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the poem. Sometimes poems surprise me the way they are perceived, but in the end, the poem has to become many different things to many different readers and it is a testament to see that this poem became this image for you. To me, its a success when a poem means something to someone else. estory

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a complex poem, estory. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery. You give readers much to think about in life from birth to death. I like the use of the figurines. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I don't know if its the smoothest poem I've written. Some of the imagery I'm happy with, but there are things about the cohesion of it that i'm still not happy with and might end up changing. estory

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is lovely.
Everything will eventually fall
out of our hands, as broken porcelain,
with the light of grace blessing the jagged
edges...revealing our true beauty.
Wonderful...that the beauty was always there,
but we only see it as it lies useless.
I like this.
I am sorry, I am out of sixes...
I just used my last!!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for this poetic review of my poem. I think the review might be better than the poem, in some ways actually. I liked the broken porcelain image. Why didn't I think of that? LOL estory

reply by Irish Rain on 12-Apr-2019

Well wow!! Stars for both of us! You can have those words...happy weekend!!

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Estory,

Oooh, I really like your abstract form of poetry here. Our lives are sort of a fragmented abstraction, in a way. As akways, your writing is flawless. Thanks for sharing your work. Jan :-)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I don't know about flawless. I'm still not really with the cohesion of the imagery, and the musical flow of this piece, and probably will edit it at some point. But I'm glad there are things about it that seem to resonate with readers. I have another one coming soon that is similar to this, we'll see how it fares....estory

Comment from Tina Crute

Excellent

This is really really deep and I loved it! I'm going to go back up and read it again because I liked it so much! I don't know that I've read your work before but I do love this! Only the dreams are left...so moving!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I don't know if its one of my better ones... I liked the beginning and the end of it, and some of the listing part in the middle, but I'm still not happy with the overall cohesion of it. Check out the book Patterns in my portfolio. That seems to be the most popular poetry I've written on this site. estory

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

This is a well-written interesting piece. Very descriptive, leaving vivid images in the reader's mind. Life does sometimes shatter dreams, but we have to pick up the pieces and try again.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your perspective on the poem. Some of the reviews seem more poetic than the poem, to me. I may rework it at some point. But I am glad it seems to be resonating with lots of readers. estory

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Interesting...still life...a poem and art entwined.
I see a Salvador Dali painting.... in my mind as I read...or Cezanne.
We render life into pieces to look it over...that's what creatives do
God bless

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your perspective on the poem. Salvador Dali...yes I see that. Cezanne certainly. I love Cezanne, Derraine, Matisse, Picasso...and I think that abstract expressionist style is probably a part of my construction of this poem. estory

reply by kiwijenny on 12-Apr-2019

:-)