Hammie & Sarabeth C~3
1,000 words. A Hammie story titled: The Blank Stare.17 total reviews
Comment from diamondbogle
I really liked this. It flowed well and I didnt see any mistakes. I like how I got a clear image in my head of what I believed was happening. Overall very well done.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I really liked this. It flowed well and I didnt see any mistakes. I like how I got a clear image in my head of what I believed was happening. Overall very well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a blast to write. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Winslow
Dear Papa,
A inspirational story. If only the Lord could send angels to help in times of a crisis, but then again He does. It just requires a belief. I am glad that Hammie came to help Josiah. A warm read.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Dear Papa,
A inspirational story. If only the Lord could send angels to help in times of a crisis, but then again He does. It just requires a belief. I am glad that Hammie came to help Josiah. A warm read.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a blast to write. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
I think it's a great story of hope, and you used some great realistic touches to put us there in the hospital room with the little boy frozen in his wheelchair, unable to move or communicate emotion. We feel the frustration in the conversation between the doctor and nurse; again, touches of realism make this seem credible. Then the mysterious face at the window, the symbol of the colorful lily, an image of life, of hope. The conversation with the angel adds to the realism and makes the miracle come alive. A nice uplifting story. estory
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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I think it's a great story of hope, and you used some great realistic touches to put us there in the hospital room with the little boy frozen in his wheelchair, unable to move or communicate emotion. We feel the frustration in the conversation between the doctor and nurse; again, touches of realism make this seem credible. Then the mysterious face at the window, the symbol of the colorful lily, an image of life, of hope. The conversation with the angel adds to the realism and makes the miracle come alive. A nice uplifting story. estory
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a lot of fun to write. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from LisaMay
What a lovely natural read this story was, an effortless telling of a worthy tale that tugged the heartstrings without being an outright tear-jerker. The spiritual aspect was introduced beautifully, and I also enjoyed how the care-workers were thanked... such a difficult job. Your story was wonderfully uplifting on many levels.
(I used a butterfly motif, too, in a recent poem I wrote "My heart Goes Flitter Flutter")
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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What a lovely natural read this story was, an effortless telling of a worthy tale that tugged the heartstrings without being an outright tear-jerker. The spiritual aspect was introduced beautifully, and I also enjoyed how the care-workers were thanked... such a difficult job. Your story was wonderfully uplifting on many levels.
(I used a butterfly motif, too, in a recent poem I wrote "My heart Goes Flitter Flutter")
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a lot of fun to write.
I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Artasylum
This is beautiful and it breaks my heat... my Mom was a paranoid schizophrenic. Still the joy she brought me in her few lucid limits. this broke my heart... yours, di
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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This is beautiful and it breaks my heat... my Mom was a paranoid schizophrenic. Still the joy she brought me in her few lucid limits. this broke my heart... yours, di
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a lot of fun to write. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This was an intriguing and engaging read, Papa55Mike. Your dialogue and descriptions had me right there in the moment with these characters, watching and listening with rapt fascination. I'm so glad I got to read this today. xo
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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This was an intriguing and engaging read, Papa55Mike. Your dialogue and descriptions had me right there in the moment with these characters, watching and listening with rapt fascination. I'm so glad I got to read this today. xo
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. These stories are a lot of fun to write. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from barkingdog
What a touching story.
All of your characters are well-developed. Your dialogue is very natural, even Hammie's rich accent reads smoothly.
Suggestions:
He's dressed in a pair of dirty overalls, white teeshirt ( spelling:T-shirt), and (is) barefooted.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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What a touching story.
All of your characters are well-developed. Your dialogue is very natural, even Hammie's rich accent reads smoothly.
Suggestions:
He's dressed in a pair of dirty overalls, white teeshirt ( spelling:T-shirt), and (is) barefooted.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and help with this story. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Lori S.
Really nice feel good story! A couple of punctuation things but overall very good! I love angel stories, but pretty much any paranormal story will do as well! Look forward to reading more from you!
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Really nice feel good story! A couple of punctuation things but overall very good! I love angel stories, but pretty much any paranormal story will do as well! Look forward to reading more from you!
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kinds words and terrific review. I love the spiritual side too.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from the13thpoet
I enjoyed your story very much, I found it to be quite moving and very touching. Good job! I think that little miracles happen everyday, but nowadays we're all too busy with our face in a screen to notice anything.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed your story very much, I found it to be quite moving and very touching. Good job! I think that little miracles happen everyday, but nowadays we're all too busy with our face in a screen to notice anything.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and terrific review. Miracles are visible every day.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Papa Mike!
Well, I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I kept thinking that something terrible was about to take place, and it was refreshing to note that your story ends on a positive note. Goodness! And I also love the ending with "How have our lives changed?" I'll be looking forward to finding out as well!
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Hello Papa Mike!
Well, I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I kept thinking that something terrible was about to take place, and it was refreshing to note that your story ends on a positive note. Goodness! And I also love the ending with "How have our lives changed?" I'll be looking forward to finding out as well!
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I always end with hope! Many thanks for your kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
