Letters to a Hurricane
Just for fun ABC's of Hurricanes.30 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
Delivered with much thought. Alliteration and resolution in its delivery. The Alliteration, as well the strength in movement were key factors here.
Yes, a poem with strong devices become more noticeable in the direction sought. However, be careful to find a balance so not use too much of the same device because you will have icing on icing, instead of icing on the cake.
Strong write.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Delivered with much thought. Alliteration and resolution in its delivery. The Alliteration, as well the strength in movement were key factors here.
Yes, a poem with strong devices become more noticeable in the direction sought. However, be careful to find a balance so not use too much of the same device because you will have icing on icing, instead of icing on the cake.
Strong write.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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I appreciate your thorough review! Were you a poetry or language arts teacher by chance? Your comments are very helpful. I used some humor because I was thinking it was too strong, so I get your point about too much of a good thing! Hurricanes are strong, so I had a dilemma! You are a great reviewer, I would say!
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Yes, I taught drama, and was in Cyprus with the Primeminster of Cyprus' sister , Theater, a well known actress...she died of cancer to a state funeral. I was her voice in later times. Such a nice compliment from you. Thank you.
Hoping to read more from you in time. It has been a pleasure.
Have a wonderful day.
RG
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Thank you for the
personal note.
It helps me to
who you are.
I cantotally see
you being a
supportive and
loyal friend in
time of
someone's need.
Have a great day
yourself!☺
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You too dear author...be well
Comment from Sanku
WoW! that is fantastic .ABC poem apart, your lines have alliteration all over and the sense of thunder and lightening is echoed -onomatopoeia.
I loved it and there are many lines I can point out as my favourite.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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WoW! that is fantastic .ABC poem apart, your lines have alliteration all over and the sense of thunder and lightening is echoed -onomatopoeia.
I loved it and there are many lines I can point out as my favourite.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review! It means so much that you have favorite lines! I admit I had fun with it! Six stars...I am so happy and humbly overwhelmed by such a gift! Thank you!!!
Comment from ciliverde
Nicely done, although your poem is a bit of a light treatment of hurricanes, which can wreak horrible destruction. Actually it might be a nice way to introduce hurricanes to kids - not too scary but a way to get them familiar with them (always good info - weather safety).
Carol
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Nicely done, although your poem is a bit of a light treatment of hurricanes, which can wreak horrible destruction. Actually it might be a nice way to introduce hurricanes to kids - not too scary but a way to get them familiar with them (always good info - weather safety).
Carol
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Yes, you are correct. While I was writing it I feel guilty because I was making fun of something so destructive, but I did have kids in mind when writing this. Maybe the teacher would have them write their own on another subject. Thank you for your nice review and definitely your input means a lot.
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Yes, you are correct. While I was writing it I feel guilty because I was making fun of something so destructive, but I did have kids in mind when writing this. Maybe the teacher would have them write their own on another subject. Thank you for your nice review and definitely your input means a lot.
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Yes, you are correct. While I was writing it I feel guilty because I was making fun of something so destructive, but I did have kids in mind when writing this. Maybe the teacher would have them write their own on another subject. Thank you for your nice review and definitely your input means a lot.
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Yes, you are correct. While I was writing it I feel guilty because I was making fun of something so destructive, but I did have kids in mind when writing this. Maybe the teacher would have them write their own on another subject. Thank you for your nice review and definitely your input means a lot.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tina. Hurricanes are frightful things. I think a tornado must be worse, though. This form of poetry "A to Z" is called an ABCedarian if it utilizes all 26 letters of the alphabet. (You probably know that already.) The fact that you missed the "X" is pretty darn close, though. This is a descriptive piece. If I may suggest one thing it would be to accentuate the beginning letter of each line either with a larger font or a different color font so your readers would be aware from the start that it's an ABCedarian. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Hi Tina. Hurricanes are frightful things. I think a tornado must be worse, though. This form of poetry "A to Z" is called an ABCedarian if it utilizes all 26 letters of the alphabet. (You probably know that already.) The fact that you missed the "X" is pretty darn close, though. This is a descriptive piece. If I may suggest one thing it would be to accentuate the beginning letter of each line either with a larger font or a different color font so your readers would be aware from the start that it's an ABCedarian. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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That's a great idea, Marilyn!
I will need to play around with the Advanced editing and figure out how to do that. But I appreciate the helpful comment. I might yet think of an ex word that works. Don't give up on me :-) thank you so much for the nice review!
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Advanced editor is easy. When you first open up to post a piece--right after you insert the image--go immediately to "basic editor" and click on it. It will switch you to "advanced editor." Another way to edit your piece is after you save it, go back into the piece--then click on "basic" to change to "advanced." Make your changes and save again.
Marilyn
Comment from WryWriter
I think your poem pretty much covers those monstrous storms. The artwork is intriguing. One edit "Counterclockwise." One X word came to mind: xerophilous (as it does flourish even on dry and hot land, although it soaks it with on arrival). Let's hope we don't see one of these storms this year!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I think your poem pretty much covers those monstrous storms. The artwork is intriguing. One edit "Counterclockwise." One X word came to mind: xerophilous (as it does flourish even on dry and hot land, although it soaks it with on arrival). Let's hope we don't see one of these storms this year!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I will have to look that word up! Thanks for the edit! I will go there now and look over that. Thank you for the review and for your input.Yes, let's have a very mild hurricane season...nothing like an ABC one!
Comment from bob cullen
I think this is absolutely brilliant. You have alliterated superbly using every letter a to z. You have also created the imagery of the storm's ferocity. This is innovation at its best. I wish you well in the contest. This entry will be hard to beat.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I think this is absolutely brilliant. You have alliterated superbly using every letter a to z. You have also created the imagery of the storm's ferocity. This is innovation at its best. I wish you well in the contest. This entry will be hard to beat.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks ever so much! (I responded via messages.)
Comment from Raul1
The Hurricanes have strong gusts winds that can't be controlled. The best thing to do when it approaches land is to stay inside your home. Nice work in this poem!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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The Hurricanes have strong gusts winds that can't be controlled. The best thing to do when it approaches land is to stay inside your home. Nice work in this poem!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I appreciate the nice review and your input! Yes, inside is good!
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You're welcome
Comment from Carla Trinklein
Wow! Your words do conjure up a hurricane, and the way they are centered in the frame they almost take the form of one. I have family in North Carolina and friends in Houston, TX. The past couple of hurricane seasons have been brutal. You have done a nice job of capturing the turmoil and upheaval brought on by one of these massive storms.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Wow! Your words do conjure up a hurricane, and the way they are centered in the frame they almost take the form of one. I have family in North Carolina and friends in Houston, TX. The past couple of hurricane seasons have been brutal. You have done a nice job of capturing the turmoil and upheaval brought on by one of these massive storms.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the nice review but also your personal comments. It was a fun poem to try, but I was writing about a horrible event, so I felt bad for those that had been in one. I hope hurricane season is more timid this year for you! Thanks again!
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I hope so too! You're welcome!
Comment from LG Wolfe
Hi Tina,
This is an impressive feat! You've got poetry that flows well while adhering to strictures. I hope you're submitting this into the acrostic contest I saw on this forum.
Best,
LG
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Hi Tina,
This is an impressive feat! You've got poetry that flows well while adhering to strictures. I hope you're submitting this into the acrostic contest I saw on this forum.
Best,
LG
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I can't submit this because I posted it on my page:( I think it is a blind entry. But...it was my first try, so I will definitely try again with a new one! i truly appreciate the feedback and especially the feedback as I am pretty new on here!
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Tina Crute: I like your karate kick full of ABC's. You added humor
and great alliteration in your clever poem. Victory is violent and
causes great destruction. What a wonderfully written piece.
flylikeaneagle Stars for you. *************************
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Tina Crute: I like your karate kick full of ABC's. You added humor
and great alliteration in your clever poem. Victory is violent and
causes great destruction. What a wonderfully written piece.
flylikeaneagle Stars for you. *************************
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I am blown away! I responded to you via messages, but thanks again! So glad you liked it:)
