Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This is very well-written! In the one hundred words you were allowed, you
wisely chose to give the background for an upcoming case, since you
obviously couldn't give a detailed account of the investigation. Excellent

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019

Thank you.

Comment from RodG

Good

I like how you set the scene and describe what happens to the victim.
But Emmett is barely introduced to the reader and the story ends. I'd like to know what happens next as I write mysteries, too. Too bad there was a word limit.
Rod

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019

I plan to add chapters. Stay tuned!! Thank you for the review.

reply by RodG on 23-Apr-2019

I?ll stay tuned. Rod

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This sounds like a case for Emmett Gunn alright! He he he, an interesting flash fiction and I'm sorry you missed the deadline, but you entertained us here anyway Lance, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019

Thanks so much.

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

Oh, I love a good mystery! This could be the beginning of a great crime novel.
Your short story held natural flow; excellent writing skills.
Love the artwork.
I'm so sad you missed the deadline by just a few minutes; I think we've all done that a time or two, and it sucks.
Next time, go get'em!

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you so much for the review and your kind comments.

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

What a shame you missed the deadline. Being 'down under' I find occasionally a contest finishes in the early morning hours but I don't see it till I'm about to go to bed. Them's the breaks I guess. I enjoyed this and didn't have any suggestions. Maybe you could change it around a bit and enter it for the next flash fiction. I don't think you're supposed to enter anything you've already put up.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you for the review and no it cannot be entered once published.

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Lance,

Awww, What a shame you missed the deadline. This is a great flash write which you could use as a springboard into an intriguing mystery.

One offering:

"He enjoyed work and was good at it."

I think if you add "his" before work it would read more fluidly.

Thanks for sharing.

Jan :-)

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Hi Jan that does sound better. Thank you for the review.