Listen to the Ferns
Be in touch with nature.61 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
This beautiful. Its my last six star. One little change, I would reverse the syntax on the below
"here where is her heart
does depart
from all hustle and bustle
just easy movements with lazy thoughts
deep breaths of fresh air
as she dances with the ferns"
"here, where is her heart" is actually a question if you take it in perspective so just that little bit there is fidgety.
I may reverse with:
"here where her heart is,
does depart
from all hustle and bustle
just easy movements with lazy thoughts
deep breaths of fresh air
as she dances with the ferns"
Regardless, I found this little piece of poetry, exquisite.
Beautifully delivered.
Good to see you are well Linda.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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This beautiful. Its my last six star. One little change, I would reverse the syntax on the below
"here where is her heart
does depart
from all hustle and bustle
just easy movements with lazy thoughts
deep breaths of fresh air
as she dances with the ferns"
"here, where is her heart" is actually a question if you take it in perspective so just that little bit there is fidgety.
I may reverse with:
"here where her heart is,
does depart
from all hustle and bustle
just easy movements with lazy thoughts
deep breaths of fresh air
as she dances with the ferns"
Regardless, I found this little piece of poetry, exquisite.
Beautifully delivered.
Good to see you are well Linda.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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So good hearing from you RG. I debated that one line and have taken your advise and changed it . . . so much for an old woman attempting to be 'fancy'! LOL I changed it to, "here where her heart lies". And, that you for the six stars. I entered a contest yesterday and didn't even get one vote . . . I think I'm losing it! Linda
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Way to go Linda, good to hear from you. My best.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
This is an enjoyable poem of nature and springtime. The artwork is beautiful and very complimentary for your poem. I have no efits or other critique.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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This is an enjoyable poem of nature and springtime. The artwork is beautiful and very complimentary for your poem. I have no efits or other critique.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from PriscillaAdelleCordell
Hello, this is a pretty poem, I enjoyed it. I think the imagery is beautiful. I did find your use of ellipses distracting, and this line is awkward.
here where is her heart
What about: 'here is where her heart'
The artwork is quite inspirational, also.
Thanks for sharing your poem, which is a very good one. If you edit it and are chasing FS stars, get back to me and I'll change the rating.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Hello, this is a pretty poem, I enjoyed it. I think the imagery is beautiful. I did find your use of ellipses distracting, and this line is awkward.
here where is her heart
What about: 'here is where her heart'
The artwork is quite inspirational, also.
Thanks for sharing your poem, which is a very good one. If you edit it and are chasing FS stars, get back to me and I'll change the rating.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. Linda
Comment from royowen
Well done Linda, you've painted an idyllic canvas with your language rich free verse poem, I like the way you express this Ekphrastically generated work in the noble imagery you use as its vehicle, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Well done Linda, you've painted an idyllic canvas with your language rich free verse poem, I like the way you express this Ekphrastically generated work in the noble imagery you use as its vehicle, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you Roy. Have a blessed day. Linda
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Bless you Linda,
Comment from Louise Michelle
I'm not sure if this is about people enjoying nature or a commentary on how plants are enjoying their day.
Well, I just read it again and I think it's about people. 'as she dances with the ferns' is what convinced me. Nicely written, Linda. Hugs, Lou
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I'm not sure if this is about people enjoying nature or a commentary on how plants are enjoying their day.
Well, I just read it again and I think it's about people. 'as she dances with the ferns' is what convinced me. Nicely written, Linda. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Linda,
I love the picture you chose for this post. It is inspiring to get out and enjoy the great outdoors now that the snow has finally gone and all is warming up to take us into Spring. I can't wait to see the cherry blossoms and smell the lilacs. It will be heavenly.
Joy xx
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Hello Linda,
I love the picture you chose for this post. It is inspiring to get out and enjoy the great outdoors now that the snow has finally gone and all is warming up to take us into Spring. I can't wait to see the cherry blossoms and smell the lilacs. It will be heavenly.
Joy xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
Comment from Catmusings
What a sweet and gentle poem with lovely images and a calm feeling about it. I felt calmer just reading it and wanted to be outside listening to the ferns instead of being inside. Ferns are such gentle and ancient plants. Love that image of them you painted and the personification.
Time to get off the computer and go out in Nature. Too early for me to listen to ferns here in Eastern Ontario but still, being in Nature is good for whatever ails you and helps with creativity, too.
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What a sweet and gentle poem with lovely images and a calm feeling about it. I felt calmer just reading it and wanted to be outside listening to the ferns instead of being inside. Ferns are such gentle and ancient plants. Love that image of them you painted and the personification.
Time to get off the computer and go out in Nature. Too early for me to listen to ferns here in Eastern Ontario but still, being in Nature is good for whatever ails you and helps with creativity, too.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's a lovely painting and I can see why you were so inspired to write this poem. To be at one with nature is the nicest place on Earth to be. You are so right. Your poem goes superbly with the painting. Well done. :) Sandra xx
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It's a lovely painting and I can see why you were so inspired to write this poem. To be at one with nature is the nicest place on Earth to be. You are so right. Your poem goes superbly with the painting. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed your lovely poem. Wonderful images that evoke tranquility,
reminding the reader to spend more time in nature - breathing, listening,
all of nature has something to say, right?
In your line "here where is her heart" Did you mean "Here IS where her heart"
Love the art work you included. It's beautiful.
Nancy
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I enjoyed your lovely poem. Wonderful images that evoke tranquility,
reminding the reader to spend more time in nature - breathing, listening,
all of nature has something to say, right?
In your line "here where is her heart" Did you mean "Here IS where her heart"
Love the art work you included. It's beautiful.
Nancy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
Comment from l.raven
HI Dos, wow!!!...this is really beautiful...you can almost
hear the music they sing...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love your picture and the colors...very nicely written...love much...Uno...Linda 2...xxoo
put a smile on my face when I saw you in my pm...how are you doing???...was going to call the other day...but was busy stopping another pipe leak under the house...LOL...otherwise not much has changed...still in the 30's at night...and in the 40's and 50's in the day...but the wind chills are in the 30's...sigh...Kristy said it was cool down there not to long ago...but cool for her now...is 70...that is swimming weather here...LOL...and it won't be long and I will be back down there...Kristy is making their summer vacation plans...and my mother has been asking for me to come...and my brother will need his yearly vacation...so I will call and we can make lunch...talk at you later...love xxoo
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HI Dos, wow!!!...this is really beautiful...you can almost
hear the music they sing...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love your picture and the colors...very nicely written...love much...Uno...Linda 2...xxoo
put a smile on my face when I saw you in my pm...how are you doing???...was going to call the other day...but was busy stopping another pipe leak under the house...LOL...otherwise not much has changed...still in the 30's at night...and in the 40's and 50's in the day...but the wind chills are in the 30's...sigh...Kristy said it was cool down there not to long ago...but cool for her now...is 70...that is swimming weather here...LOL...and it won't be long and I will be back down there...Kristy is making their summer vacation plans...and my mother has been asking for me to come...and my brother will need his yearly vacation...so I will call and we can make lunch...talk at you later...love xxoo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
