Listen to the Ferns
Be in touch with nature.61 total reviews
Comment from Bichon
A very lovely poem. I like how you got the inspiration from a painting, it makes it even more special and creative. Great job I really liked this one!!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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A very lovely poem. I like how you got the inspiration from a painting, it makes it even more special and creative. Great job I really liked this one!!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Bichon. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this poem. livelylinda
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I enjoyed the read. A bit of Yoga through poetry. Interesting use of both third person limited and omniscient perspective. I like that the piece allows the reader to decide who "she" is - the Cupid? The earth? The poet? - Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed the read. A bit of Yoga through poetry. Interesting use of both third person limited and omniscient perspective. I like that the piece allows the reader to decide who "she" is - the Cupid? The earth? The poet? - Wendy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Wendy. livelylinda
Comment from pome lover
Though you never say who "she" is, I'm assuming you mean the winged one in the picture. Also, you describe things she is not doing, instead of what she is doing. I don't mean to be cruel, it's just that I'm trying to understand your association - words to picture, and I'm afraid I don't.
Are they her thoughts? That may be what you mean. Please forgive me for not being more positive. The picture is lovely and I'd like to understand your message as it relates to it.
pome lover
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Though you never say who "she" is, I'm assuming you mean the winged one in the picture. Also, you describe things she is not doing, instead of what she is doing. I don't mean to be cruel, it's just that I'm trying to understand your association - words to picture, and I'm afraid I don't.
Are they her thoughts? That may be what you mean. Please forgive me for not being more positive. The picture is lovely and I'd like to understand your message as it relates to it.
pome lover
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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pome lover: you are over-thinking this. When, in search for a lovely picture of ferns, I could not find one. This was a lovely picture with a bit of greenery in it, so I used it. There is no real connection of the picture to the poem. When I say she or they, etc., it can mean anyone or maybe even myself. Quit thinking so much . . . just enjoy the movement of the ferns. livelylinda
Comment from Coco Jane
What a wholesome image. I especially like "satisfy our rainwater thirst."
"Hustle and bustle" seems cliched. Consider a different pair of rhyming or alliterative words to connote life's busy-ness--frenzy and frazzle, perhaps.
"She does arise" could maybe be "can arise" or "will arise." Consider a stronger helping verb than "does."
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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What a wholesome image. I especially like "satisfy our rainwater thirst."
"Hustle and bustle" seems cliched. Consider a different pair of rhyming or alliterative words to connote life's busy-ness--frenzy and frazzle, perhaps.
"She does arise" could maybe be "can arise" or "will arise." Consider a stronger helping verb than "does."
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading. Linda
Comment from mancub
This is a beautiful poem, it has a warm feeling and flows nicely. the story you tell within this has a powerful feel and sends a good message filled with nature and strength, You have a wonderful gift and a true heart for writing with feeling and sincere thoughts, the impact here is strong and gracious very great read I have enjoyed this, Thank you for sharing.
Remember..Believe in yourself always, Mancub Smith
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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This is a beautiful poem, it has a warm feeling and flows nicely. the story you tell within this has a powerful feel and sends a good message filled with nature and strength, You have a wonderful gift and a true heart for writing with feeling and sincere thoughts, the impact here is strong and gracious very great read I have enjoyed this, Thank you for sharing.
Remember..Believe in yourself always, Mancub Smith
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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mancub: thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate your kind thoughts about this poem. Linda
Comment from karenina
Such a quietly serene poem! Ever since I was a small child I loved the delicate beauty of ferns... (My Grandmom used to tell me that is where the fairies hid!) Your phrasing is beautiful, the image selected just perfect!--Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Such a quietly serene poem! Ever since I was a small child I loved the delicate beauty of ferns... (My Grandmom used to tell me that is where the fairies hid!) Your phrasing is beautiful, the image selected just perfect!--Karenina
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and for your kind words, Karenina. Linda
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Welcome. :)
Comment from esacony
This is a poem describing the trancelike magic of the ferns.
"Let us reach for the sun, heighten our green while you satisfy our rainwater thirst."
When viewed and not just looked at the tender life in the forest needs as we do. So perfectly insinuated here.
"They waved to her those leafy greens softly perfect in early morning sun beams awakening her to sleepy consciousness but feeling calm and peaceful content to let the breeze guide her day."
There is a release, nicely expressed, that takes one to the awareness of being_____ nicely projected analogy.
"Here where her heart lies she does arise from all hustle and bustle just easy movements with lazy thoughts, deep breaths of fresh air as she dances with the ferns....... see how they take you away....... listen to the ferns."
It is a great depiction and narrative dedicated to a life that fills the woods with mystery. Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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This is a poem describing the trancelike magic of the ferns.
"Let us reach for the sun, heighten our green while you satisfy our rainwater thirst."
When viewed and not just looked at the tender life in the forest needs as we do. So perfectly insinuated here.
"They waved to her those leafy greens softly perfect in early morning sun beams awakening her to sleepy consciousness but feeling calm and peaceful content to let the breeze guide her day."
There is a release, nicely expressed, that takes one to the awareness of being_____ nicely projected analogy.
"Here where her heart lies she does arise from all hustle and bustle just easy movements with lazy thoughts, deep breaths of fresh air as she dances with the ferns....... see how they take you away....... listen to the ferns."
It is a great depiction and narrative dedicated to a life that fills the woods with mystery. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you, esacony, for reading and sharing your thoughts. livelylinda
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Oatmeal
livelylinda,
Chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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livelylinda,
Chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Oatmeal. Linda
Comment from victor 66
Yes, ". . . listen to the ferns". I wish this tranquility for everyone, especially for myself. This poem is like a relaxation exercise to find inner peace. Your poem is very soothing and relaxing. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Yes, ". . . listen to the ferns". I wish this tranquility for everyone, especially for myself. This poem is like a relaxation exercise to find inner peace. Your poem is very soothing and relaxing. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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victor66: the tranquility is where I was aiming! So happy you enjoyed it. Linda
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Your poem worked for me.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Linda, This is a nice Free Verse. It's simple and I felt a sway with it like the breeze blowing through the ferns... You used a good succession of word choices; sleepy, calm, peaceful, easy, deep breaths... it all was nice and soothing. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Hi Linda, This is a nice Free Verse. It's simple and I felt a sway with it like the breeze blowing through the ferns... You used a good succession of word choices; sleepy, calm, peaceful, easy, deep breaths... it all was nice and soothing. Well done. :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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susand3022: so happy that you enjoyed this little poem. Thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
