Addicted to Cosmetic Surgery
The foolishness of vanity and celebrity cloning.18 total reviews
Comment from Ross E Silke
Your poem is well constructed and flows well and naturally. It reads smoothly and has much to say, maybe a little too much (lol). With respects to its content, I would think a warning should be applied for sexual content and language as I was surprised to find without the heads up. It is a real-life look at celebrity cosmetics and how fake it is just to get the appearance that often times takes away from our souls to invest in the body for fame and fortune; a terrible compromise I think. It's truthful and real. In terms of writing level, I would give this a five, but because it didn't give the appropriate label to rate it for the younger audience, I feel this to be fair. I'd be happy to turn back and adjust with an appropriate warning attached. Otherwise, it's written at an advanced level that clear and concise, and the message and moral are vivid and taken to heart. Best,
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Your poem is well constructed and flows well and naturally. It reads smoothly and has much to say, maybe a little too much (lol). With respects to its content, I would think a warning should be applied for sexual content and language as I was surprised to find without the heads up. It is a real-life look at celebrity cosmetics and how fake it is just to get the appearance that often times takes away from our souls to invest in the body for fame and fortune; a terrible compromise I think. It's truthful and real. In terms of writing level, I would give this a five, but because it didn't give the appropriate label to rate it for the younger audience, I feel this to be fair. I'd be happy to turn back and adjust with an appropriate warning attached. Otherwise, it's written at an advanced level that clear and concise, and the message and moral are vivid and taken to heart. Best,
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your thorough review Ross. You state your point of view very clearly and I accept your rating. I feel that putting a sexual content warning on it will draw attention to it more, when the premise of the poem was scathing sarcasm rather than anything prurient.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I'm not sure what the contest is for but I'm sure you gave everyone lots of laughs and for that you should win! Thanks for the giggles and the fun word play!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Lol. I'm not sure what the contest is for but I'm sure you gave everyone lots of laughs and for that you should win! Thanks for the giggles and the fun word play!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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The contest prompt was to write a poem about some foolish aspect of modern life. I can't think of anything more foolish than mutilating one's body to try to look like someone else.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, pull-no--punches poem excellently covers the numerous forms
of slash and slice women subject themselves to! What gets me is when some beauty
has cosmetic surgery and hurts her looks--Meg Ryan, for example.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Your well-written, pull-no--punches poem excellently covers the numerous forms
of slash and slice women subject themselves to! What gets me is when some beauty
has cosmetic surgery and hurts her looks--Meg Ryan, for example.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Yes, there are examples of overdoing it, which just seems so utterly pointless. There is a case to be made for the odd useful procedure, but mutilation in the name of fashion or to emulate someone else is just ridiculous.
Comment from patcelaw
All the surgery in the world can't make a person beautiful if their heart is ugly. As they say, beauty is skin deep, but ugly goes all the way to the bone.
Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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All the surgery in the world can't make a person beautiful if their heart is ugly. As they say, beauty is skin deep, but ugly goes all the way to the bone.
Patricia
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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You are so right Patricia. Maybe they should get a heart transplant?
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from PeterRHW
This humorous rant is too close to the bone to be dismissed as fantasy, but the wonderful wording certainly put a smile on my face until I reached the last line.... then I laughed out loud! All those cheeky metaphors and memorable internal rhymes make for a most enjoyable read. A memorable poem LisaMay.
Best regards, Peter
An old cougar who's name I forget
Who thought she'd try Botox - no sweat.
Was plumb out of luck
For now she is stuck
With a face like a marionette.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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This humorous rant is too close to the bone to be dismissed as fantasy, but the wonderful wording certainly put a smile on my face until I reached the last line.... then I laughed out loud! All those cheeky metaphors and memorable internal rhymes make for a most enjoyable read. A memorable poem LisaMay.
Best regards, Peter
An old cougar who's name I forget
Who thought she'd try Botox - no sweat.
Was plumb out of luck
For now she is stuck
With a face like a marionette.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Hey whoopee, thanks for the 6, Peter.
I saved the best till last with that 'designa' bit. I will never get why women willingly allow their bodies to be mutilated.
Your limerick gave me a chuckle. Glad I could make you laugh with my poem.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear LisaMay,
Your poem, "Addicted to Cosmetic Surgery", is factual and well stated. Hollywood is blamed for the demand! I believe people create this in themselves. Excellent description and word choice! I loved how you caught the rhythm and pace!
My best, Deborah
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Dear LisaMay,
Your poem, "Addicted to Cosmetic Surgery", is factual and well stated. Hollywood is blamed for the demand! I believe people create this in themselves. Excellent description and word choice! I loved how you caught the rhythm and pace!
My best, Deborah
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your positive review, Deborah. That whole cult of emulating celebrities seems very damaging to folks who can't think for themselves or have poor self esteem and want to be someone else.
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You are welcome and I agree, LisaMay, my best, Deborah
Comment from poetwatch
Well LISAMAY I don't know all the surgical procedures but I imagine Barbie is looking good under the hood. :) I just wonder how long it will take for all the adjustments to fall apart. Good entry for the April Fools Day contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Well LISAMAY I don't know all the surgical procedures but I imagine Barbie is looking good under the hood. :) I just wonder how long it will take for all the adjustments to fall apart. Good entry for the April Fools Day contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. I like your naughty Barbie comment. Yes, when all the sagging and drooping begins they will look like crones anyway, even more weird.
Comment from LilyJR
I enjoyed this a lot! It has a good deal of humor and the "designa vagina" ending is terrific! The poem captured my own views about elective cosmetic surgery: it rarely looks natural, more like graft, and I always wonder why someone would do that to themselves, even if it were not so expensive. Anyway, thank you for writing this poem. It's fun!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed this a lot! It has a good deal of humor and the "designa vagina" ending is terrific! The poem captured my own views about elective cosmetic surgery: it rarely looks natural, more like graft, and I always wonder why someone would do that to themselves, even if it were not so expensive. Anyway, thank you for writing this poem. It's fun!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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I am so pleased that you enjoyed the humour, albeit with a hard-nosed social comment (maybe I need rhinoplasty!) That so totally won't be happening. I am with you in thinking it is bizarre to pay money to be mutilated.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the vain idea to create ourself better than we are created by God. At the best we end up total freaks that no one like to be around when our souls seem to depart after all the surgery.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about the vain idea to create ourself better than we are created by God. At the best we end up total freaks that no one like to be around when our souls seem to depart after all the surgery.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review, Sandra. The world is turning into a freak show indeed. Our souls are being stolen through manipulation and often just given away through vanity and arrogance.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, LisaMay. You words/lines flow well with a good and true storyline. It is all over the news when these people act this way. Your last line is a bizarre to think it might happen. Good job and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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You did a good job with your contest entry, LisaMay. You words/lines flow well with a good and true storyline. It is all over the news when these people act this way. Your last line is a bizarre to think it might happen. Good job and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your great review. It makes me wince to read of these bizarre operations.
