A Train of Thought
Free Verse22 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
>The description being P&C is a very definitive and descriptive work With a concentrated choices that deliver the best alternative.
>Somewhat a melancholy piece of poetry where as any outcome is still a tedious and dire one wrether it be, otherwise.
> a train of thought's purpose is much like your premise in your poem, ["Is it a string of idea brought aboutby a planned endeavor,"].
>And I heard of a train of thought being like a sleuth's adding up the clues In a logical procession and linear theory.
>You did a wonderful job looking outside the box and taking the words many other meanings and displaying one and a philosophical commentary.
> Wonderfully done and I truly enjoyed.
> Take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Cheers, Damommy;
>The description being P&C is a very definitive and descriptive work With a concentrated choices that deliver the best alternative.
>Somewhat a melancholy piece of poetry where as any outcome is still a tedious and dire one wrether it be, otherwise.
> a train of thought's purpose is much like your premise in your poem, ["Is it a string of idea brought aboutby a planned endeavor,"].
>And I heard of a train of thought being like a sleuth's adding up the clues In a logical procession and linear theory.
>You did a wonderful job looking outside the box and taking the words many other meanings and displaying one and a philosophical commentary.
> Wonderfully done and I truly enjoyed.
> Take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much. I'm so happy you enjoyed reading it.
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You're very welcome, Damommy.
Alx
Comment from BeasPeas
Good job with this interesting free verse poem. I believe most of our thinking is tangential, where we drift from one thing to another. On the other hand, when we hone in on a specific problem, we get a headache trying to figure out a solution. That's why sleeping on things usually brings a satisfactory solution. Marilyn
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Good job with this interesting free verse poem. I believe most of our thinking is tangential, where we drift from one thing to another. On the other hand, when we hone in on a specific problem, we get a headache trying to figure out a solution. That's why sleeping on things usually brings a satisfactory solution. Marilyn
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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That's very interesting, Marilyn. Thank you.
Comment from Gloria ....
Well a train of thought is pretty organized so this is a wonderfully unique interpretation of the challenge.
Thinking is such a pleasure, if it works properly. lol
Great job Yvonne and a pleasure to read. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Well a train of thought is pretty organized so this is a wonderfully unique interpretation of the challenge.
Thinking is such a pleasure, if it works properly. lol
Great job Yvonne and a pleasure to read. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Gloria. I try not to think too much. I'm not equipped for it. lol
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LOL, me too Yvonne, me too. :)
Comment from Ross E Silke
This flows well and the presentation is very good with the bolded font, font style, and colours, and picture to accompany it. I think separating it into two stanzas might help to put space between the poem and to help separate the thoughts; start a new paragraph/stanza after "Thinking?" (space) and then begin with "Maybe" to start a new stanza. The thought train in this poem is quite complex and requires deep thought but I think that's the poem's intent. It's a bit of a puzzle to crack but it fits the title well. An intelligent and clever read. Best,
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This flows well and the presentation is very good with the bolded font, font style, and colours, and picture to accompany it. I think separating it into two stanzas might help to put space between the poem and to help separate the thoughts; start a new paragraph/stanza after "Thinking?" (space) and then begin with "Maybe" to start a new stanza. The thought train in this poem is quite complex and requires deep thought but I think that's the poem's intent. It's a bit of a puzzle to crack but it fits the title well. An intelligent and clever read. Best,
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for reviewing.
Comment from judiverse
Love the subject for this challenge. Trains fascinate me, and I often think of taking a train across the country, or maybe traveling by train in Canada. It sounds so exciting. That's where my train of thought took me! We want to catch that train of thought before what's on board gets away from us. Sometimes one thought can trigger a whole load of ideas. I like your analogy here. Great free verse. judi
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Love the subject for this challenge. Trains fascinate me, and I often think of taking a train across the country, or maybe traveling by train in Canada. It sounds so exciting. That's where my train of thought took me! We want to catch that train of thought before what's on board gets away from us. Sometimes one thought can trigger a whole load of ideas. I like your analogy here. Great free verse. judi
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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I'm glad you did. Thank you so much.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from l.raven
Hi Yvonne, LOL...if I don't tell someone what is on my mind right away..my train of thought runs right off the track...LOL...I love your poem sweet girl...and love this picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Hi Yvonne, LOL...if I don't tell someone what is on my mind right away..my train of thought runs right off the track...LOL...I love your poem sweet girl...and love this picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Mine does, too. lol. Thank you for reviewing.
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LOL...your sooooo very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
If I don't write my train of thought down on paper immediately . . It is gone! Just like you say blown away in a breeze! I can identify with your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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If I don't write my train of thought down on paper immediately . . It is gone! Just like you say blown away in a breeze! I can identify with your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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I lose my train of thought easily. I guess it's age. lol. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem on what it is that constitutes a train of thought is in itself a train of thought, where your ideas flow from one idea 'carriage' to another, the engine being the thought in the first place. I liked how you used abstraction and distraction.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Your poem on what it is that constitutes a train of thought is in itself a train of thought, where your ideas flow from one idea 'carriage' to another, the engine being the thought in the first place. I liked how you used abstraction and distraction.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you. I appreciate you noticing that.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
Your free verse poem is phenomenal! I share the questions you raised in your verses, which are similar to my own. I loved your ending and one needs to capture it before: "distraction" and "abstraction"--"blows it away". Brilliant!
My best,
Deborah
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Dear Author,
Your free verse poem is phenomenal! I share the questions you raised in your verses, which are similar to my own. I loved your ending and one needs to capture it before: "distraction" and "abstraction"--"blows it away". Brilliant!
My best,
Deborah
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned about train of thoughts. Your words of explaining what it meant was very true. You used very good imagery for the art work. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned about train of thoughts. Your words of explaining what it meant was very true. You used very good imagery for the art work. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much.
