Sit on a Cloud
A love poem to my departed wife.72 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Sweet honest emotions...
Nothing more essential than to continue your "conversation" with your beloved wife.
Quietly contemplative and moving poem.
Sorry you got three starred...
Here's a six to offset that!
Karenina
Sweet honest emotions...
Nothing more essential than to continue your "conversation" with your beloved wife.
Quietly contemplative and moving poem.
Sorry you got three starred...
Here's a six to offset that!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
Comment from Brian Craycroft
solid rhymes, nice constancy of image, this poems creates a cloudy, sunlit lovescape where romantics dance through the sky to the sunset horizon.
in my opinion, too many cliches. take out: climb the mountain high, ride the wind, as far as the eye can see. those have been used to death, to DEATH. make something new instead.
overall, nice work
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solid rhymes, nice constancy of image, this poems creates a cloudy, sunlit lovescape where romantics dance through the sky to the sunset horizon.
in my opinion, too many cliches. take out: climb the mountain high, ride the wind, as far as the eye can see. those have been used to death, to DEATH. make something new instead.
overall, nice work
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from susand3022
Hi Willie,
This is a lovely poem, I'm quite sure you know that already though.
I do have one suggestion.
Your line, "See as far as the eye can see." makes the tongue stumble a bit as it catches you off rhythm. You can fix this by simply eliminating the first "as" from the line.
Again, a simply beautiful poem.
Susan :)
Hi Willie,
This is a lovely poem, I'm quite sure you know that already though.
I do have one suggestion.
Your line, "See as far as the eye can see." makes the tongue stumble a bit as it catches you off rhythm. You can fix this by simply eliminating the first "as" from the line.
Again, a simply beautiful poem.
Susan :)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, clear, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the place the author describes in these words. It made
think of peace and comfort. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments these words.
The author's words are heartfelt, clear, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the place the author describes in these words. It made
think of peace and comfort. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments these words.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from MissMerri
What a truly delightful, and creative entry into this contest, Willie. I found it touching and sweet, like most of the other ones I've read to your wife. You two must have had such a beautiful relationship. Thank you for sharing this tender love poem with us and I wish you much luck in the contest. MM
What a truly delightful, and creative entry into this contest, Willie. I found it touching and sweet, like most of the other ones I've read to your wife. You two must have had such a beautiful relationship. Thank you for sharing this tender love poem with us and I wish you much luck in the contest. MM
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from CATHERINE ROCHESTER
I also love rhyming poetry. As you said, if it doesn't rhyme it's a story.
Your poem is beautiful and evokes real feel-good emotions. Thank you. And also thank you for serving our country!
I also love rhyming poetry. As you said, if it doesn't rhyme it's a story.
Your poem is beautiful and evokes real feel-good emotions. Thank you. And also thank you for serving our country!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from JoannaN
This is a lovely poem. You can be really proud of yourself. This is a very good piece of writing, and many of us can find a piece of our lives in it.
This is a lovely poem. You can be really proud of yourself. This is a very good piece of writing, and many of us can find a piece of our lives in it.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from newilk
What a lovely poem. I love the imagery as well as the art piece you've paired with your poem! It's so wistful yes simultaneously sure and full of hope!
What a lovely poem. I love the imagery as well as the art piece you've paired with your poem! It's so wistful yes simultaneously sure and full of hope!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Simplicity is sometime best.
What you have written herein is proof positive.
Readers need no thesaurus or dictionary only
the ability to place themselves where you have been poetically.
Simplicity is sometime best.
What you have written herein is proof positive.
Readers need no thesaurus or dictionary only
the ability to place themselves where you have been poetically.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely poem of all your dreams you shared with your wife. I hope you have put them all together so she can read them whenever she wants to. It's such a lovely thing to do, and I'm sure she loves them. Very well done, Willie, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
What a lovely poem of all your dreams you shared with your wife. I hope you have put them all together so she can read them whenever she wants to. It's such a lovely thing to do, and I'm sure she loves them. Very well done, Willie, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022