Pin Cushion
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Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, whatever the format, this appears to me as stunning, both in the presentation and free verse delivery. Unfortunately, the truth rendered in the poem is felt by us all at some time or another, and a wish for salvation is also present at these difficult moments...;
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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In my opinion, whatever the format, this appears to me as stunning, both in the presentation and free verse delivery. Unfortunately, the truth rendered in the poem is felt by us all at some time or another, and a wish for salvation is also present at these difficult moments...;
Comment Written 20-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much for the thorough and encouraging review.
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You are very welcome, Joan, an expressive and thought provoking write. Tank you for sharing...Eve
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Oh my goodness - THANK you for sharing...Eve
Comment from mancub
Your poem is very strong and beautiful, you have a nice flow and good imagery, you share your message it is a bit sad but shows the need for healing, often we must find ways to release the pain by finding within how to except and move on, you have a good heart and it shines here within this sad yet powerful poem, your art choice is beautiful, it captures the pain and feelings shared within your words, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Your poem is very strong and beautiful, you have a nice flow and good imagery, you share your message it is a bit sad but shows the need for healing, often we must find ways to release the pain by finding within how to except and move on, you have a good heart and it shines here within this sad yet powerful poem, your art choice is beautiful, it captures the pain and feelings shared within your words, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
Comment Written 20-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the review and high rating. I appreciate the encouragement.
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written poem is heart-wrenching, conveying the theme of
need--need for a rescuer. The speaker cries out to be healed from
emotional torture.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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This well-written poem is heart-wrenching, conveying the theme of
need--need for a rescuer. The speaker cries out to be healed from
emotional torture.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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I appreciate the comments and high rating. Thank you.
Comment from Blue Hendrix
wonderfully written poem with no mistakes. lovely seamless flow made it very enjoyable to read as well as your word choices and imagery. great job!!!!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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wonderfully written poem with no mistakes. lovely seamless flow made it very enjoyable to read as well as your word choices and imagery. great job!!!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Blue.
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Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Dragon,
Ooooh, this is very well written. A great club entry. I don't see anything here to suggest you improve upon. As for the format, I am not sure which would be better. Whichever pleases your preference. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Hi Dragon,
Ooooh, this is very well written. A great club entry. I don't see anything here to suggest you improve upon. As for the format, I am not sure which would be better. Whichever pleases your preference. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Jan :-)
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the nice review and high rating. I think I'll leave it the way it is. The vote is about even. Except one person said it should be one long poem without line breaks.
Joan
Comment from l.raven
HI Joan, I think we all look for that knight in shinning armor to come and save us...sigh...I love your poem sweet girl...and your picture...perrrrfect...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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HI Joan, I think we all look for that knight in shinning armor to come and save us...sigh...I love your poem sweet girl...and your picture...perrrrfect...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the kind words and high rating, Linda. Glad you liked it.
Joan
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your so welcome Joan...always...love xxoo
Comment from James Upshaw
Great poem! This is an extremely relatable piece. I love the imagery of a dame waiting for her knight in shining armor. We all feel a little abandoned sometimes by a person we look to for comfort.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Great poem! This is an extremely relatable piece. I love the imagery of a dame waiting for her knight in shining armor. We all feel a little abandoned sometimes by a person we look to for comfort.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much for the review.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the picture this challenge and a great interpretation of the stabing swords that make us the pin cushion for others and we wait for our knight to save us.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about the picture this challenge and a great interpretation of the stabing swords that make us the pin cushion for others and we wait for our knight to save us.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Sandra, for the nice words and high rating.
~Joan
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Joan. To answer your question about couplets or quatrains, I think you may want to consider one poem without line breaks because even though both lines of the ending couplet rhyme and can stand alone, the previous line "And I can still" would need to be altered to complete the thought. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Hi Joan. To answer your question about couplets or quatrains, I think you may want to consider one poem without line breaks because even though both lines of the ending couplet rhyme and can stand alone, the previous line "And I can still" would need to be altered to complete the thought. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review and you editing ideas.
Joan
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem is an excellent response to the poem. The young lady doesn't look too troubled or damaged by all those swords in her back, but I could relate to her feeling like a pincushion when others are into backstabbing and loading us up with their own miseries.
I was going to say I might prefer 4-line groupings for better run-ons, but the current breaks that you have here do provide a more staccato feeling that sounds like gasping acknowledgement of pain.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Your poem is an excellent response to the poem. The young lady doesn't look too troubled or damaged by all those swords in her back, but I could relate to her feeling like a pincushion when others are into backstabbing and loading us up with their own miseries.
I was going to say I might prefer 4-line groupings for better run-ons, but the current breaks that you have here do provide a more staccato feeling that sounds like gasping acknowledgement of pain.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments and opinion of the format. It seems most
like the couplets
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