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Woman Sees her Future in a Mirror

Projection of One's Life

4 total reviews 
Comment from Lordinajamjar
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Brilliant!. What a wonderful picture you found to showcase your three reflective verses.

A contest winner here for sure. A very apt and clever little gem. Good luck

John


 Comment Written 29-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
    Thanks for your super endorsement of this effort. Since I did not achieve any success in my Physics classes, I am unsure if it is possible that the older woman facing us is actually sitting immediately to the right of the woman with our head to us. So what we 'see' is the older woman's reflection in the mirror and not the younger woman's projection/perception! This idea is too deep for me since my intent was not a physics lesson. LOL

    So pleased the selected picture captured your attention.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
    John,

    I am Avis. I tried harder. Second place winner for this mirror contest entry. But your (previous rating of) six stars gave me that number one feeling.

    Mark
Comment from Michele Harber
Excellent
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This works well, Mark. I like the juxtaposition of "present" and "future," and I very much enjoyed the pun on " 'wrinkle' in time." The image works very well, as you can't tell, from the back, whether it's a young woman looking in the mirror and seeing her older self reflected back, or if it's simply an older woman seeing her reflection.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
    Michele,

    Methinks the best part of the effort is its picture. Of course, help from the 'peanut gallery' makes this a good one. I think it is a young woman seeing into her future, but your 'wrinkle'of whom is looking may indeed be correct.

    Thank you, for your support of my attempts at short verse.

    Anonymous!
reply by Michele Harber on 27-Mar-2019
    Dear Mr. Anonymous:

    I'm glad you were happy with my suggestions. My first impression was a younger woman seeing her older reflection, but it's designed to keep you guessing. My suggestion is to not even worry about it. As long as it works well for your poem, let the readers decide for themselves.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
    I wish I was good in my
    Physics class to know if it was possible that the reflection we see in the mirror is the same person sitting next to the woman whose head we only see. LOL
reply by Michele Harber on 27-Mar-2019
    Are you trying to confuse me? Have you not realized I'm confused enough without any help???
Comment from LG Wolfe
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I enjoyed this. I don't think you need to put the word 'wrinkled' in quotation marks, as I got the double entendre without it. But it doesn't change the poem. Still a nice compact moment which the reader could interpret in a few different ways.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
    LG,

    The quote marks are my intent to make reviewers really think of the woman's wrinkles in their own personal ways. Pleased for your thoughts. Your spin on the samemay indeed be correct. Thanks for your compliment.
reply by LG Wolfe on 27-Mar-2019
    Ah, that makes sense. A lovely poem.
Comment from kiwijenny
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Ooooo yes that's so good...a wrinkle in time
THAT IS IT!!!! DEFINITELY BANNING ALL MIRRORS. Now I've realized that they are to blame...sheesh I thought it was me growing old or something.
God bless...I'm scared to look..

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2019

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
    Jenny,

    The future for this young woman doesn't look THAT bad. Some mirrors just ain't what they are cracked up to be. There's the old joke: when you are dating the woman you want to marry, if your future mother in law looks ugly, beware of your future. LOL