The Power of the Written Word
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Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent, creative use of fire in the 5-7-5 contest.
Many writers will agree about the "fire" that ignites creativity.
Excellent picture to match the theme
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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This is an excellent, creative use of fire in the 5-7-5 contest.
Many writers will agree about the "fire" that ignites creativity.
Excellent picture to match the theme
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you, RS! I hope the voting committee agrees with you!!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
Indeed, your sentiments will resonate with many. Some writing does, indeed, have the effect of inciting "fire" in one's veins. A very apt description and a fine rendering for the 5/7/5 poetic offering. Love the image.
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer,
Indeed, your sentiments will resonate with many. Some writing does, indeed, have the effect of inciting "fire" in one's veins. A very apt description and a fine rendering for the 5/7/5 poetic offering. Love the image.
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your helpful and encouraging response!
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Hi, I love the way your poem gets to the meat of the matter! Words are efficacious and have the ability to push us to the highest and also the opposite.
You may want to revisit the last line though .... The word 'fire' is one syllable.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hi, I love the way your poem gets to the meat of the matter! Words are efficacious and have the ability to push us to the highest and also the opposite.
You may want to revisit the last line though .... The word 'fire' is one syllable.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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You know, I thought about that long and hard, Sandra, as I was composing this, and it made me borderline crazy this morning the longer I contemplated it!!!. This is not me "defending my work"; it is a honest-to-gawd, genuine question: are you positive? Because when I say that word, I hear Fy - er. But you are WAY, WAY more an expert on this, so I will defer to your judgment.
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I understand, I know!
The pronunciation is really as you say, it's in the dictionary, but it is what it is.
How about substitute it with 'bonfire'?
And yes, I'm positive...
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You're so smart, I can't even stand it!! GREAT idea! Thank you.
(But someone else questioned me on fire, and so I Googled it, and according to a guy named Josh Guenter who's their "Pronunciation Editor" [that's eight syllables...] (I really did try to resist, I swear..) it could be either/or. HOWEVER, since I'm not a risk-taker, I'm taking your suggestion and editing post haste! (two syllables there...) [Yes, I'm going to stop now.] I am so appreciative of your follow-up here, Sandra.
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LoL... You're a riot!
And..."Pronunciation Editor" [that's eight syllables...]", oh maan, I can't stop laughing. As a poet do you notice that even in reading other materials you keep counting syllables for everything?!
The hazard of poetry writing.
Best wishes though Mystery Writer.
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Yes, I do (3)
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LoL... LoL!!!
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I like you because you laugh at my jokes. Usually once people are out of pre-school, that doesn't happen.
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LoL... I love to laugh...I appreciate you because you did not get offended.
:-)
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Never!!! When someone is trying to HELP me? That's the ultimate form of ingratitude! Plus you were very nice about it - not pedantic and officious. So I will always welcome whatever feedback you offer.
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Thank you. :-)
Comment from rama devi
Smoldering is such a great descriptive word, thus giving the cliche of 'fire in my veins' new oomph. Fine presentaiton too. True to form. I recommend not capping every line since it flows as one sentence:
I love the way your
smoldering writings feel like
fire in my veins.
Fine subtle assonance of W and F plus consonance of L and R and Y.
Good work. Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Smoldering is such a great descriptive word, thus giving the cliche of 'fire in my veins' new oomph. Fine presentaiton too. True to form. I recommend not capping every line since it flows as one sentence:
I love the way your
smoldering writings feel like
fire in my veins.
Fine subtle assonance of W and F plus consonance of L and R and Y.
Good work. Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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You are completely right, Rama. I will get right to that edit. Thank you for having my back! I totally appreciate it.
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Happy to help! :-))) Thanks.
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And you're really good at it!
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Aw, thanks. I do this professionally, actually.
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I can see why!
I have a quick question, if you have a second: do you consider 'fire' one syllable or two? I've gotten feedback from two reviewers now, and was curious what you, a professional editor, thinks.
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Thanks. It is one, officially. But many readers might read it as two. Prayer is also one, even though it sounds like two. You can always google for a syllable counter when unsure!
Warm Smiles, rd
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Thank you, Rava. I changed it to "bonfire" on advice from another reviewer, which I thought it was the perfect choice there.
This is why I love this site. Everyone is so HELPFUL, and really wants the other writers to succeed. xo
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That works well! Glad you love the site and the helpful ones! By the way, some readers will read fire as two syllables, which is why I did not mention it in my review. But one syllable is the really correct way. :)
Comment from Colin John
I do like this and it has a good chance in the competition I fill , it does the job in hand when you connect the smoldering the writing . Good luck
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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I do like this and it has a good chance in the competition I fill , it does the job in hand when you connect the smoldering the writing . Good luck
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hmm. Are you trying to be naughty there, John Mason? If so, tsk, tsk. If not, thank you for the review.
Comment from LG Wolfe
I know exactly that feeling, when you read or hear something that causes your cells to move, to tingle Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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I know exactly that feeling, when you read or hear something that causes your cells to move, to tingle Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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You DO understand!! That's because you're a writer, too. Thanks for this really nice review, LG Wolfe. I appreciate it.
Comment from coffeeandink
Would have been wiser, better, free in my verse. But then, that could be deleted. Lol cute poem. I like the way, you left the last line, morbid, sounds like, a vampire, is the way they sang, Judas, or something. Any way, she beat, Harry, and tomorrow, skater chicks. Once again.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Would have been wiser, better, free in my verse. But then, that could be deleted. Lol cute poem. I like the way, you left the last line, morbid, sounds like, a vampire, is the way they sang, Judas, or something. Any way, she beat, Harry, and tomorrow, skater chicks. Once again.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Forgive me, coffeeandink, but I never understand your reviews.
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That's because you didn't grow up, la la la could of been wiser, this buds for you, now your high. Lol
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Must be that.
Comment from 24chas
This was a great write. I love the imagery you used in this piece. The poems must be really fiery to get this kind of reaction. This was also a very sexy write now that I read it again. Well done to put so much emotion and feeling into just a few words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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This was a great write. I love the imagery you used in this piece. The poems must be really fiery to get this kind of reaction. This was also a very sexy write now that I read it again. Well done to put so much emotion and feeling into just a few words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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That is high praise from the master of the art form, 24chas!
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You're too kind.
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Oh, I guarantee I have NEVER been accused of THAT! But it's a nice thought anyway, and I appreciate it.
