If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Memory of Love"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
12 total reviews
Comment from cutie
Hi My Prince :0)
This piece simply and very true
YOU CAN'T GET BEFORE YOU GIVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I wanna kiss your lips because of this PERFECTLY HONEST opinions!!!!!!!!!!!!
I also wrote a poem for ya ! :blush appears on my cheeks ohh:
Well, good on ya my prince!!!
Cheers!!! &:~0) muahhsssssss......
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Hi My Prince :0)
This piece simply and very true
YOU CAN'T GET BEFORE YOU GIVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I wanna kiss your lips because of this PERFECTLY HONEST opinions!!!!!!!!!!!!
I also wrote a poem for ya ! :blush appears on my cheeks ohh:
Well, good on ya my prince!!!
Cheers!!! &:~0) muahhsssssss......
Comment Written 29-Sep-2006
Comment from warpedrevolution
An opening verse leads into a well down masterful piece of writing that sweeps the reader away in only a few lines. Brilliant emotions were contained within here.
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An opening verse leads into a well down masterful piece of writing that sweeps the reader away in only a few lines. Brilliant emotions were contained within here.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2006
Comment from Sheila Bruce
I really liked this piece, partly because we've all been there haven't we? So it spoke to me on a personal level, but I also liked the fact that it didn't feign pretension, it is what it is, and I liked that. Simple and to the point, but poignant at the same time :)
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I really liked this piece, partly because we've all been there haven't we? So it spoke to me on a personal level, but I also liked the fact that it didn't feign pretension, it is what it is, and I liked that. Simple and to the point, but poignant at the same time :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2006
Comment from Beatlegirl61
The onlt thing that 'prevented' me from giving this a four star rating, was you did use puctualtion to pause and stop your thoughts...Really nice job and I liked reading your message that you conveyed through brilliant poetry...Peaxce and happiness to you and yours! Hope to read more of your work and get a feel for your 'technique'...Best regards, Carol ::))
'Bealte' quote today: "You can radiate everything you are..." (Dig a pony)
( I offer a new quote each day with reviews and replies...) ::))
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The onlt thing that 'prevented' me from giving this a four star rating, was you did use puctualtion to pause and stop your thoughts...Really nice job and I liked reading your message that you conveyed through brilliant poetry...Peaxce and happiness to you and yours! Hope to read more of your work and get a feel for your 'technique'...Best regards, Carol ::))
'Bealte' quote today: "You can radiate everything you are..." (Dig a pony)
( I offer a new quote each day with reviews and replies...) ::))
Comment Written 04-Mar-2006
Comment from GRSaine
Hi mrgrunty,
Your poem,"The Memory of Love" has a good message for all who get themselves into a situation like this, and the final outcome isn't too happy for either side. Good ideas packed into a short work. Keep it up.
GRSaine
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Hi mrgrunty,
Your poem,"The Memory of Love" has a good message for all who get themselves into a situation like this, and the final outcome isn't too happy for either side. Good ideas packed into a short work. Keep it up.
GRSaine
Comment Written 04-Mar-2006
Comment from VICTIMEYES
i like the simplicity of this poem, although short and simple i still feel the pain and regret of the fact that this relationship did'nt work out better, the ending summizes it all when you say, now i know, that's a very painful thing to have to say, good poem, yea
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i like the simplicity of this poem, although short and simple i still feel the pain and regret of the fact that this relationship did'nt work out better, the ending summizes it all when you say, now i know, that's a very painful thing to have to say, good poem, yea
Comment Written 04-Mar-2006
Comment from terryangelo
I liked the piece a lot. But the last two verses had a change in the flow. I thought it would sound better if you took out one of the ands. "Because you left me/I waited/and it killed me". And the very last line felt like it needed something more, maybe just one more word.
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I liked the piece a lot. But the last two verses had a change in the flow. I thought it would sound better if you took out one of the ands. "Because you left me/I waited/and it killed me". And the very last line felt like it needed something more, maybe just one more word.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2006
Comment from Lisloh
Never wait too long
it's not fruitful.....
Perfect description of the experience
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Excellent presentation
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Never wait too long
it's not fruitful.....
Perfect description of the experience
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Excellent presentation
Comment Written 03-Mar-2006
Comment from AuroraSky
From writing poems of happiness to something like this holds a tragic touch of its own. The flame dies down, but the pen keeps on writing.
It's nice to see you post again.
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From writing poems of happiness to something like this holds a tragic touch of its own. The flame dies down, but the pen keeps on writing.
It's nice to see you post again.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2006
Comment from diane24
Okay now, mrgrunty, I immediately had a surge of emotion when reading this poem and the content always such a sad commentary on love. So you have fulfilled both of your conditions for judging poetry and you win five stars. It was refreshing for me to read you bio and see your considerations for poetry as they are so much mine. And I thank you for being out there. That comma thing is very disturbing to me. Write some more. Diane
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Okay now, mrgrunty, I immediately had a surge of emotion when reading this poem and the content always such a sad commentary on love. So you have fulfilled both of your conditions for judging poetry and you win five stars. It was refreshing for me to read you bio and see your considerations for poetry as they are so much mine. And I thank you for being out there. That comma thing is very disturbing to me. Write some more. Diane
Comment Written 03-Mar-2006
