Comment from LovnPeace

Excellent

ly. Her(e) eyes were filling with tears. Suzanne came to where we were standing in her nightgown wondering where ---Her. Good luck in the contest. A great entry. Blessings, Barbara

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019

Thank you so much for the excellent review and critique. I fixed her. So glad you liked my story.
All my best,
Sal xo

Comment from poetwatch

Exceptional

Now I see where you got your responsibility, Sally. You learned that the world doesn't revolve around you for there are others in life that matter more than oneself. Well at least you thought about one day at a time. :) This is a good entry for the share Your Story contest.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019

Thank you so much, dear Poet. Yes, I grew up having great responsibilities at a young age. I remember be left alone with Suzanne at the age of five. Can you even imagine? God is good and obviously all around me. I have many stories to tell. I am so appreciative of the honoring six and encouragement of my contest entry.
Thank you, thank you!
All my best,
Sal :+)

Comment from dmt1967

Good

I hoped Rob would be home before I left. My older brother (oftentimes) worked late. You can have (sometimes) or (often) or (often, at times,) but, what you have written does not make sense.

After supper, I helped with the dishes as (I always had.) (usual)

Great story. Very heartfelt. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.


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 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019

Thank you for the review and comments. I appreciate you stopping by.
All my best,
Sally :+)

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

What a lovely story to share and what a sympathetic yet clever mother you had to appear to be going along with your plans.

Two tiny things I picked up:
Where ya off to this late in the day?" My mother inquired. - I think 'my' should be lower case.

Here eyes were filling with tears. - should be 'her' eyes.

Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019

Thank you so much, Judy. I fixed the two little nits. My word processor kept defaulting to the capital after a question mark. I repaired it and the her that was spelled here. I am so glad you enjoyed my true story.
All my best,
Sal :+)