A Dream?
A Sevenelle poem for Potlatch Poetry18 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely presentation Yvonne as you take us sailing across the milky way in your wonderfully written Sevenelle. Lovely rhyming and a great refrain couplet, skidding round the seven rings with the angels. Delightful,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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A lovely presentation Yvonne as you take us sailing across the milky way in your wonderfully written Sevenelle. Lovely rhyming and a great refrain couplet, skidding round the seven rings with the angels. Delightful,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much. I'm just a kid at heart. lol
Comment from LIJ Red
There are some weird, unreal photos published about sights in deep space...I wonder what kind of lenses and filters they use, or would they look like that to the naked eye...excellent Sevenelle
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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There are some weird, unreal photos published about sights in deep space...I wonder what kind of lenses and filters they use, or would they look like that to the naked eye...excellent Sevenelle
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I wonder that, too.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is excellent, Yvonne. I LOVE the picture you chose to pair with your words. It is beautiful. You did a super job with the style of the sevenelle. Your dreamy lines float down the page as you take readers on this imaginary flight through the universe. I love all the references of s'[ace' things you included. The personification of Old Mam Moon is great and the 7 rings mention makes me think of the Pleiades (7 sisters). Your imagination served well for this fantastic poem. The font fits with all, too. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2019
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This is excellent, Yvonne. I LOVE the picture you chose to pair with your words. It is beautiful. You did a super job with the style of the sevenelle. Your dreamy lines float down the page as you take readers on this imaginary flight through the universe. I love all the references of s'[ace' things you included. The personification of Old Mam Moon is great and the 7 rings mention makes me think of the Pleiades (7 sisters). Your imagination served well for this fantastic poem. The font fits with all, too. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2019
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Thank you for such a wonderful review.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow this sevenelle is perfectly done and I love the imagination of the wording that you used making it easy to read and yet a great picture book material.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Oh wow this sevenelle is perfectly done and I love the imagination of the wording that you used making it easy to read and yet a great picture book material.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Barb. I really appreciate that.
Comment from Treischel
You definitely caught your Muse in this lovely second Sevenelle formatted poem. Here, your flights of fancy carry us on a whimsical journey past the moon, to Saturn's rings. A delightful read.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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You definitely caught your Muse in this lovely second Sevenelle formatted poem. Here, your flights of fancy carry us on a whimsical journey past the moon, to Saturn's rings. A delightful read.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Thank you. I'm so happy you think so.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Whimsy, beauty, and majesty are all skillfully woven together in this GREAT poem.
Though it's fantasy, it has a cohesive flow. This one really made me smile.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Whimsy, beauty, and majesty are all skillfully woven together in this GREAT poem.
Though it's fantasy, it has a cohesive flow. This one really made me smile.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I'm so glad I made you smile. That makes me feel so good. Thank you so much.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
> Thank you for this awesome written format salutation of a Sevenelle and created by Virginia Noble.
>I like the flow of the poetic format And you do it justice with your contingent rhyming words that are particularly formatted to work with each contextual understanding of each line.
>I can piicture the Angels dipping their snowy wings.
> Thank you for sharing and posting, my friend, take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Cheers, Damommy;
> Thank you for this awesome written format salutation of a Sevenelle and created by Virginia Noble.
>I like the flow of the poetic format And you do it justice with your contingent rhyming words that are particularly formatted to work with each contextual understanding of each line.
>I can piicture the Angels dipping their snowy wings.
> Thank you for sharing and posting, my friend, take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you. I'm so glad you like the angels and their snowy wings.
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The Angels were exceptional and you're welcome.
Alx
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Yvonne Deserves a six but havent received my next weeks quota. Loved this muscial Sevenelle.Met requiremnt and thymed nicely
(Just asking was the topic supposed to be about either shoes or gates I thought that was the two theme choice set in this challenge? )
However Iloved your topic a magical post
Well done Cheers Christine Good image too
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Hi Yvonne Deserves a six but havent received my next weeks quota. Loved this muscial Sevenelle.Met requiremnt and thymed nicely
(Just asking was the topic supposed to be about either shoes or gates I thought that was the two theme choice set in this challenge? )
However Iloved your topic a magical post
Well done Cheers Christine Good image too
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I was being silly and used them both. Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from lyenochka
I sense euphoria more than a dream can bring. And your meter is so perfect, Yvonne! I loved the space flight and the traveling through the Milky Way (would suggest to capitalize). Loved this sevenelle which even includes the number 'seven' in the 'seven rings' of Saturn.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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I sense euphoria more than a dream can bring. And your meter is so perfect, Yvonne! I loved the space flight and the traveling through the Milky Way (would suggest to capitalize). Loved this sevenelle which even includes the number 'seven' in the 'seven rings' of Saturn.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you for noticing the seven rings.
Comment from Sally Law
This was such a beautiful, starlight poem. I would make one suggestion though. It was very difficult to read. Maybe it was just me. The advanced editor sits lines too close together in my opinion. I always space them apart for easier reading. Just a suggestion. It may be nothing more than my poor eyesight.
All my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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This was such a beautiful, starlight poem. I would make one suggestion though. It was very difficult to read. Maybe it was just me. The advanced editor sits lines too close together in my opinion. I always space them apart for easier reading. Just a suggestion. It may be nothing more than my poor eyesight.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Sally. I'm so happy you like it. Sorry that it was hard for you to read. I'll remember that the next time I used those colors.
