Be Wee With Bea Part2
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Something Slinking"Continuation of Bea's Strollings
14 total reviews
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Why does this write have the stamp of "All Time Best"?
I mean, not only is it hot, but it also has 228 views
Nevertheless, you always do your thing, as this shows.
Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk. For,
there is always something refreshing and new on deck.
Stay Connected
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Why does this write have the stamp of "All Time Best"?
I mean, not only is it hot, but it also has 228 views
Nevertheless, you always do your thing, as this shows.
Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk. For,
there is always something refreshing and new on deck.
Stay Connected
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your very complimentary review. I think we grow by staying connected. This book Part 2 you are reading is an autobiographical allegory. Reading it will give you more insight into me. Part one is more spiritual. That one shows how Bea changed her view of the meaning of being wee. At first it was physical then it became spiritual.
Comment from lyenochka
I went back to this book and found I didn't start reviewing until the third chapter so I'll review the ones I missed. I love this sweet little bear and the little brain exercises she does!
Great use of personification in "a new storm bullied its way in."
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I went back to this book and found I didn't start reviewing until the third chapter so I'll review the ones I missed. I love this sweet little bear and the little brain exercises she does!
Great use of personification in "a new storm bullied its way in."
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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cool. Thank you for your extra review. I'm also working on part 3. All kinds of new chatacters as EVERYONE except Tim (Timothy) & I have gone on to the Rainbow Bridge. Doolie aka Maureen is joining all her pups. My former partner passed 3 days after I was 'let go' from work. Then 6 months later Bea aka Sweet Puppy passed. Everyone else had already passed.
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Ah. Sigh. But they are still alive in your heart, memories and your book! 💖
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They are all memorialized in my books.
Comment from Mabaker
Hi Sweetness, At last I can have a moment for myself to enjoy my favorite Bear. I like the way Bea works our. I mean sometimes things a a tad fuzzy, but she persists and niggles at whatever and an answer comes to the surface. Thank you Liz, Love Anne
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Hi Sweetness, At last I can have a moment for myself to enjoy my favorite Bear. I like the way Bea works our. I mean sometimes things a a tad fuzzy, but she persists and niggles at whatever and an answer comes to the surface. Thank you Liz, Love Anne
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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I'm glad you enjoy Bea as much as I enjoy Mugs. It is so glad to have you back. Even though you are hysically far away it feel like you are closer when you are writing on here. Thank you for taking time to review too.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a great beginning to a very promising book. I love how you showed Bea's fears, thoughts, actions that really brought her to life. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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This is a great beginning to a very promising book. I love how you showed Bea's fears, thoughts, actions that really brought her to life. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your support. It is nice to see someone show appreciation for my reviews. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Tedd Turton
Hi, I just did a review on the above, and then lost it...into syberspace. Oh well...I wanted to say how imaginative it was. Beautiful writing, and I loved your characters, and your descriptive passages. Thanks for posting.
Best Wishes, Tedd Turton
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hi, I just did a review on the above, and then lost it...into syberspace. Oh well...I wanted to say how imaginative it was. Beautiful writing, and I loved your characters, and your descriptive passages. Thanks for posting.
Best Wishes, Tedd Turton
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for your persistence in writing this review. I too have lost my long review. Then so frustrated, ended up writing a shorter review. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from PriscillaAdelleCordell
Hello Liz O'Neill, I enjoyed reading your story, and even though I have not seen all the other chapters, your initial sentence about that strange exercising made me curious, so I read on. I do have a couple of suggestions for making this better.
This for example:
Once more her strolling exercise had to come to a halt. ('had to come' is passive and clunky, writing traits usually frowned upon by publishers.) Try: her strolling exercise must come to a halt.
As she strolled (slowly and pensively) toward home, she did her brain exercise.
I think the words in brackets could be removed to quicken the story and remove the excess word baggage. Words like 'really', 'just', etc should be deleted also. And it would be beneficial to do an edit for words like these.
I hope that helps, and thanks for letting me review your story, it is a work that is definitely worth the effort to improve.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hello Liz O'Neill, I enjoyed reading your story, and even though I have not seen all the other chapters, your initial sentence about that strange exercising made me curious, so I read on. I do have a couple of suggestions for making this better.
This for example:
Once more her strolling exercise had to come to a halt. ('had to come' is passive and clunky, writing traits usually frowned upon by publishers.) Try: her strolling exercise must come to a halt.
As she strolled (slowly and pensively) toward home, she did her brain exercise.
I think the words in brackets could be removed to quicken the story and remove the excess word baggage. Words like 'really', 'just', etc should be deleted also. And it would be beneficial to do an edit for words like these.
I hope that helps, and thanks for letting me review your story, it is a work that is definitely worth the effort to improve.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for your involved review. I will copy these notations to work on. Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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It was my pleasure and thank you for your gracious reply, you are a rarity here - a person who will take instruction, and that trait will serve you well. Far better than a bloated ego that won't be told. I wish you all the best with your writing aspirations and if there is anything you would like to know, as a professional writer, I would be glad to help you.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I hear over and over about Bee's brain exercises, but I am unclear as to what these exercises are or entail.
The mystery is set and now I am left to wonder what was the creature Bee saw in the distance?
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I hear over and over about Bee's brain exercises, but I am unclear as to what these exercises are or entail.
The mystery is set and now I am left to wonder what was the creature Bee saw in the distance?
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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This concept was addressed in Part 1 at some point. Maybe I should review it from time to time. It means "Serious thinking and/or meditation" Thank you for your involved review
Comment from Badger_29
Simply captivating and 11 legged creature. Your descriptions in the sensory plugs that you use in here are very effective. You build your characters nicely giving an intro leaving in two and then including their interaction with their environment and with each other during times of conflict. This is very well written easy to read just the right length. I look forward to going back and reading some of the previous month's, as this is not only inspirational to me but it's also a way of interacting with other authors here who have been I have enjoyed the pleasure of meeting I knew of commented interviewed my works.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Simply captivating and 11 legged creature. Your descriptions in the sensory plugs that you use in here are very effective. You build your characters nicely giving an intro leaving in two and then including their interaction with their environment and with each other during times of conflict. This is very well written easy to read just the right length. I look forward to going back and reading some of the previous month's, as this is not only inspirational to me but it's also a way of interacting with other authors here who have been I have enjoyed the pleasure of meeting I knew of commented interviewed my works.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment Written 24-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Darren, thank you so much for the well thought out review. I hope you do look back at Chap1, 2, & 7 at least. They really give you a sense of the meaning of the story.
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Will do, you have woven a masterful tail with a lot of characters applaud you for being able to develop so many characters and have them interact with each other and keep track of them. Like your own will fantasy world no?
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Darren, they are all pets I have had and some of the same experiences i.e. thunderstorms. The characters introduced are my former deceased partner's dogs too. Ironically, everyone had passed except me, aka Bea...lol The Part 2 is going to be much more imagination for the adventures. But very fun.
Comment from Shirley McLain
A well-written story. I didn't find anything to recommend changes. Your dialogue was very good and you wrote scene descriptions very well. Good job. Shirley
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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A well-written story. I didn't find anything to recommend changes. Your dialogue was very good and you wrote scene descriptions very well. Good job. Shirley
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Liz. I'm pleased to see another chapter of "Bea." Very well done as always. I'm glad you're continuing with your story.
Suggestions:
Check out line spacing after "safe" in paragraph four or continue with same paragraph.
Check out paragraphs nine and ten--"eleven legged/fifteen legged."
Best,
Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Hi Liz. I'm pleased to see another chapter of "Bea." Very well done as always. I'm glad you're continuing with your story.
Suggestions:
Check out line spacing after "safe" in paragraph four or continue with same paragraph.
Check out paragraphs nine and ten--"eleven legged/fifteen legged."
Best,
Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the helpful review I will look at the points you brought out. Thank you for being a supporter of Bea's strollings.
