Batten down the hatches
Hell hath no fury like a cyclone scorned12 total reviews
Comment from Scarbrems
I enjoyed this. It's pacey, with great rhyme and rhythm to it. We don't really get cyclones here, though we do have storms which get friendly names. Like Brian. You've taken that personification of the cyclone and run with it, giving Trev a personality. 'But for the moment we've dodged a bullet
But that trigger he can always pull it' - here, he sounds like a gangster.
'Trevor' keeps us on our feet
Cyclones never are discreet' As long as he doesn't lift you off your feet! Hope your friends get through OK
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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I enjoyed this. It's pacey, with great rhyme and rhythm to it. We don't really get cyclones here, though we do have storms which get friendly names. Like Brian. You've taken that personification of the cyclone and run with it, giving Trev a personality. 'But for the moment we've dodged a bullet
But that trigger he can always pull it' - here, he sounds like a gangster.
'Trevor' keeps us on our feet
Cyclones never are discreet' As long as he doesn't lift you off your feet! Hope your friends get through OK
Comment Written 24-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much Emma much appreciated.
dip
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, descriptive poem vividly presents nature at its most unpredictable and, therefore, its scariest. The characterizing of the cyclone
as human is very effective.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Your well-written, descriptive poem vividly presents nature at its most unpredictable and, therefore, its scariest. The characterizing of the cyclone
as human is very effective.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2019
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Thank you Emma. I really appreciate your comments and review
dip
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Dip. I hope you all weather the fierce storms without too much havoc. They are frightful. Your poem stresses the destruction each one poses. It pays to be vigilant. Good rhyming throughout. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Hi Dip. I hope you all weather the fierce storms without too much havoc. They are frightful. Your poem stresses the destruction each one poses. It pays to be vigilant. Good rhyming throughout. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much Marilyn much appreciated
dip
Comment from Heather Knight
Oops! This is quite scary. I hope your friend is okay.
I had never heard the expression batten down the hatches, so I have learned something new.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Oops! This is quite scary. I hope your friend is okay.
I had never heard the expression batten down the hatches, so I have learned something new.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Its an old saying not specific to a cyclone but very appropriate Thank you for reviewing Maria always appreciated
dip
Comment from djsaxon
A good write mate. I really like your social commentary observations as opposed to your romantic "gooz". When you choose to raise it, you have a really strong pen. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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A good write mate. I really like your social commentary observations as opposed to your romantic "gooz". When you choose to raise it, you have a really strong pen. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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haha romantic "gooz"..but I always wash my hands afterwards!
xdip
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So you should
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Cute and catchy. Great rhyme and flow and a cyclone is something we never hear about unless it unleashes a fury that devastates the peace of nature. Nicely done
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Cute and catchy. Great rhyme and flow and a cyclone is something we never hear about unless it unleashes a fury that devastates the peace of nature. Nicely done
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much Barb always appreciate your comments
dip
Comment from Michele Harber
I enjoyed your taking me into a world that I hope I'll never see personally, the eye not of the cyclone itself but of an area where such storms can and do hit quickly and unpredictably. You make the tension and uncertainty palpable, from your opening line (and title), to "fury" and "tempest" and "strike us like no other." I hope you and your friend in the danger zone (and everyone else, of course) stay safe, and that the constant vigil you keep helps to keep you protected.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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I enjoyed your taking me into a world that I hope I'll never see personally, the eye not of the cyclone itself but of an area where such storms can and do hit quickly and unpredictably. You make the tension and uncertainty palpable, from your opening line (and title), to "fury" and "tempest" and "strike us like no other." I hope you and your friend in the danger zone (and everyone else, of course) stay safe, and that the constant vigil you keep helps to keep you protected.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much Michele much appreciated
dip
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You're welcome. Stay safe!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Good writing about the dangers of mother nature. When I first read your title, I was thinking you were going to write about a woman. Good twist of the pen.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Good writing about the dangers of mother nature. When I first read your title, I was thinking you were going to write about a woman. Good twist of the pen.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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haha yeah a woman scorned is just like a cyclone I think that is why they normally name cyclones after females lol
thanks for the review
dip
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the cyclone that seems to be lurking to bring destruction in its path once again. We can do very little to stop them we can only take precautions to stay out of its way.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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A very well-written poem about the cyclone that seems to be lurking to bring destruction in its path once again. We can do very little to stop them we can only take precautions to stay out of its way.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much Sandra
dip
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Friend!
"Batten down the hatches!" is a phrase heard throughout northern Michigan throughout the winter months, especially, when blizzards and northern winds howl. I can only begin to fathom what it would be like to endure a cyclone! Your poem is filled with wonderful rhyme but also keen visual and emotive imagery. Fingers crossed for your friend and all in Trevor's path...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Hello Friend!
"Batten down the hatches!" is a phrase heard throughout northern Michigan throughout the winter months, especially, when blizzards and northern winds howl. I can only begin to fathom what it would be like to endure a cyclone! Your poem is filled with wonderful rhyme but also keen visual and emotive imagery. Fingers crossed for your friend and all in Trevor's path...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much Diane much appreciated.
dip
