Chasing of the Wind.
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Comment from Shirley McLain
Hello, I liked your story but I do have a few suggestions, Check your spacing between paragraphs, and dialogue from each person should be separated. I am thinking you are using semicolons in place of commas and some periods. Check on the use of the semicolon to see if you are doing it correctly. I hope my suggestions make sense. Have a good evening. Shirley
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Hello, I liked your story but I do have a few suggestions, Check your spacing between paragraphs, and dialogue from each person should be separated. I am thinking you are using semicolons in place of commas and some periods. Check on the use of the semicolon to see if you are doing it correctly. I hope my suggestions make sense. Have a good evening. Shirley
shelved or even archived?"
Unconsciously Pascue went in to replenish
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I am aware of these issues. I just can't get fanstory to fix the uploading problems. This is my second attempt to upload. First one produced worst results. Lines got distorted and I had to delete the file to start it again. I am just tired of it and going to stop posting my works. After loading, complete page is not seen to ensure spacing etc.,and one has to scroll up and down to read. That is the reason this gap issue came. My earlier chapters were loaded properly. Thanks for the comment. It made sense how it must have looked to a reader. I wish you had made comments on the story and writing style etc. Esthetic stuff gets fixed in the editing stage as was done in case of my published Novel, "Samsara-A Complete Circle" by Lulu Publishers.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like that idea of the man opening the vault where Yesterdays issues were filed. Sounds like an interesting book with a lot of complex family issues going on at the same time. Good job intermingling the issues in a way that is believable. I like that the family agrees to take in the grandfather.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I like that idea of the man opening the vault where Yesterdays issues were filed. Sounds like an interesting book with a lot of complex family issues going on at the same time. Good job intermingling the issues in a way that is believable. I like that the family agrees to take in the grandfather.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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I appreciate your encouraging comments. Had tough time up loading the chapter and it did not fit in properly on the page. I have to wind up the story now. I hope next chapter will be the final one. Please read the novel, "Chasing of the Wind" from beginning. Best regards.
Arun
