Silk Pyjamas
Ships meet in the night3 total reviews
Comment from Janilou
Fabulous descriptions. Loved this line: 'Her look could have frozen hydrogen.' And the unexpected twist at the end! Wow. Just brilliant. I was not expecting that. Well written. I didn't see any errors or edits needed.
Thanks for the enjoyable read. :-)
Jan
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Fabulous descriptions. Loved this line: 'Her look could have frozen hydrogen.' And the unexpected twist at the end! Wow. Just brilliant. I was not expecting that. Well written. I didn't see any errors or edits needed.
Thanks for the enjoyable read. :-)
Jan
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Ypou're very kind, thank you
Comment from Shirley McLain
Like the story. Everything was set up so nicely for that surprise ending. Are you planning on taking this story further? I didn't see a thing to suggest changing. Have a great day. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Like the story. Everything was set up so nicely for that surprise ending. Are you planning on taking this story further? I didn't see a thing to suggest changing. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you. I wasn't planning on taking it further, it was just a piece of whimsy to entertain my friend after she told friends I had chosen her silk pyjamas for her. The truth was much more mundane. She wanted pyjamas of a certain colour and style, and I found an online shop that sold them
Comment from 24chas
I really wish I had a six left for you. This is my kind of story, very noirish. And the narration was perfection. Great dialogue as well. Nice job and I look forward to more from you.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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I really wish I had a six left for you. This is my kind of story, very noirish. And the narration was perfection. Great dialogue as well. Nice job and I look forward to more from you.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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You're very kind, thank you
