haiku (pink rose petals)
haiku contest entry13 total reviews
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Val,
This is a beautiful.poem and a great contest entry. Your lovely verse evokes beautiful imagery. Nothing to suggest improving upon here. Good luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Hi Val,
This is a beautiful.poem and a great contest entry. Your lovely verse evokes beautiful imagery. Nothing to suggest improving upon here. Good luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review. Val
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
I enjoyed your haiku poem (pink rose petals) and your picture is beautiful and matches your poem perfectly! I admire how it tells story regarding pending autumn.
My best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Dear Author,
I enjoyed your haiku poem (pink rose petals) and your picture is beautiful and matches your poem perfectly! I admire how it tells story regarding pending autumn.
My best,
Deborah
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review.
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My pleasure.
Comment from tfawcus
Although I am no expert, your Haiku seems to fulfil all of the requirements of this ancient Japanese form. You have given a wonderful impression of the fading beauty of autumn.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Although I am no expert, your Haiku seems to fulfil all of the requirements of this ancient Japanese form. You have given a wonderful impression of the fading beauty of autumn.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review.
Comment from BrooklynnPreston
The illustration is beautiful and your Haiku is absolutely divine. Such a peaceful feeling for the reader who is going over this work. Your word flow works just amazingly. Worth six stars in my book.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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The illustration is beautiful and your Haiku is absolutely divine. Such a peaceful feeling for the reader who is going over this work. Your word flow works just amazingly. Worth six stars in my book.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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You have made my DAY, with this exceptional as I must admit to being fond of this little haiku myself. Love the words "peaceful feeling"
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I am proud to have stimulated your happiness. God bless your soul.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the pink rose petals that float on a pond while autumn whispers it is her time to reign the season for a while. A beautif ultimate picture to complement your haiku.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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A very well-written haiku about the pink rose petals that float on a pond while autumn whispers it is her time to reign the season for a while. A beautif ultimate picture to complement your haiku.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Once again, thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from TPAC
I found this write exciting, captivating to my interests, suggestive to my mind views.
Suggest;
gently whispers autumn. All in my opinion of this work.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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I found this write exciting, captivating to my interests, suggestive to my mind views.
Suggest;
gently whispers autumn. All in my opinion of this work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review and suggestion. I will ponder it. Val
Comment from Mark D. R.
My go-to writing style is your Haiku or 5-7-5 syllable format.
Like your word images and complementing illustration
Typically, the traditional Japanese Haiku uses a seasonal reference without using the specific word, e.g., 'autumn' that you wrote.
Consider an alternative text for your satori line. Possibly get in the concept of 'wind' into it: "gentle winds whisper" or "gentle wind whispers"?
"rosy pink petals" would give you five syllables for first line
If you really like the Haiku format, check out thehaikufoundation.org website.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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My go-to writing style is your Haiku or 5-7-5 syllable format.
Like your word images and complementing illustration
Typically, the traditional Japanese Haiku uses a seasonal reference without using the specific word, e.g., 'autumn' that you wrote.
Consider an alternative text for your satori line. Possibly get in the concept of 'wind' into it: "gentle winds whisper" or "gentle wind whispers"?
"rosy pink petals" would give you five syllables for first line
If you really like the Haiku format, check out thehaikufoundation.org website.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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I have been writing haiku for many years, so your suggestions just do not work with my style of haiku. Thank you for your in depth review, none the less. This one stands as it is.
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Val,
I value your opinion and your personal Haiku style. You, as the poet, are the master of your words.
Mark
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Thank you for the author notes to clarify or I might have said something as I have written Haiku's in the past and have actually won contests for them. I appreciate you mentioning this one has a slightly lenient 5/7/5 count to allow this 17 syllable count. The only other variation that I was aware of was the 3/5/3, but I guess you will be judged accordingly. I loved the words you used, however, to describe your picture and I felt that it was spot on and your satori line was brilliant. Thank you for sharing again good luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the author notes to clarify or I might have said something as I have written Haiku's in the past and have actually won contests for them. I appreciate you mentioning this one has a slightly lenient 5/7/5 count to allow this 17 syllable count. The only other variation that I was aware of was the 3/5/3, but I guess you will be judged accordingly. I loved the words you used, however, to describe your picture and I felt that it was spot on and your satori line was brilliant. Thank you for sharing again good luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your very in depth review. It was a joy to read. And if you look at my profile, you will see I have won several haiku contests.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
There is a good relation between human and Nature, sense, sentiment or appreciation is related; as rose petals float and autumn comes; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing Write for Years! -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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There is a good relation between human and Nature, sense, sentiment or appreciation is related; as rose petals float and autumn comes; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing Write for Years! -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review, Dr. Alcreator (love this handle or name). I will do my best to keep writing, but at 71...ya know there is just so much time left. Smile. Val
Comment from RodG
This is a haiku in the traditional form the Japanese would appreciate.
It's easy to visualize this scene of pink petals floating in a temple pond.
You also allude to a season (autumn) and your satori is a lovely "ah ha" statement expressing clearly the poet's sentiments.
Very nice! Rod
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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This is a haiku in the traditional form the Japanese would appreciate.
It's easy to visualize this scene of pink petals floating in a temple pond.
You also allude to a season (autumn) and your satori is a lovely "ah ha" statement expressing clearly the poet's sentiments.
Very nice! Rod
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review. Few people on this site really understand haiku, but apparently you do. This review was a joy to read. Val Crisson
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My pleasure, Val. I?m no haiku expert, but I have read all the notes given with every haiku prompt; thus, I have a VAGUE idea of what is acceptable to the traditionalists. Rod
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Well, at least you read the information, that's more than most do. That's why I went into my long winded author's notes. LOL Val
