Broken Pieces
comparing lives to glass in one line6 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I think this is an exceptional monostich poem. You've managed to say so much in one sentence, which fits neatly and perfectly across the presentation.
The words hold emotion and makes one deeply connect. Who of us has not felt like this before? Very eloquently stated. A beautiful poem.
I wish you the very best in the contest :)
Gale
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
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I think this is an exceptional monostich poem. You've managed to say so much in one sentence, which fits neatly and perfectly across the presentation.
The words hold emotion and makes one deeply connect. Who of us has not felt like this before? Very eloquently stated. A beautiful poem.
I wish you the very best in the contest :)
Gale
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
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Thank you ever so much for the rating , review and wishes! All are greatly appreciated!
Comment from Bill Schott
This monostich poem, Broken Pieces, makes a simile of difficulty comparing people's brokenness to that of impossibly destroyed glass. Even trying to help is tricky.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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This monostich poem, Broken Pieces, makes a simile of difficulty comparing people's brokenness to that of impossibly destroyed glass. Even trying to help is tricky.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
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Thank you! Both the rating and your review are much appreciated!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Agreed. It's one of the greatest challenges we are ever given. You've done a beautiful and very effective job conveying the pain with this shards-of-glass image. It's impressive and memorable, and I get it gets you a high standing in this competition. Good luck to you, Mystery Writer. xo
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Agreed. It's one of the greatest challenges we are ever given. You've done a beautiful and very effective job conveying the pain with this shards-of-glass image. It's impressive and memorable, and I get it gets you a high standing in this competition. Good luck to you, Mystery Writer. xo
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you ever so much for your reading and review. Your comments and the stars are very much appreciated!
Comment from Scarbrems
Well-written, and I totally agree with the sentiment. Great image, too. And yes, I think glass would be easier to repair than a broken heart. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Well-written, and I totally agree with the sentiment. Great image, too. And yes, I think glass would be easier to repair than a broken heart. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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I so greatly appreciate your thoughts on this piece, along with the stars and the good luck wishes. Thanks!
Comment from humpwhistle
I know what you mean. Be shattered, that is.
Poetically speaking, I'd look for a way to tie the second part to the first part.
something about shards, or being cut, or sharp edges.
Complete your thought poetically.
Just a suggestion.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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I know what you mean. Be shattered, that is.
Poetically speaking, I'd look for a way to tie the second part to the first part.
something about shards, or being cut, or sharp edges.
Complete your thought poetically.
Just a suggestion.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the review and I shall try and do as you suggest.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with this write having suffered loss, and the word 'shattered' is so appropriate here, I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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I can identify with this write having suffered loss, and the word 'shattered' is so appropriate here, I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, the stars and the kind wishes!
