Emily and the Toys
a 150 word story31 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Be afraid, be very much afraid. This little girl knows far too much about politics and warfare. Sleep with one eye open just in case she decides to stage a bloody coup and replace the ruling order in her domestic kingdom where her parents currently rule. You have been warned.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Be afraid, be very much afraid. This little girl knows far too much about politics and warfare. Sleep with one eye open just in case she decides to stage a bloody coup and replace the ruling order in her domestic kingdom where her parents currently rule. You have been warned.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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We watch her pretty close.
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I guess.
Comment from SLMorrical
A wonderful entry for the contest. This story is cute. It made me chuckle. Amazing how children see things, and their imagination is astounding. The story flows very well and it is an easy read to follow. Well done. Good luck in the contest. I think this story should win. I would like to give you 6 stars but my allotment is out.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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A wonderful entry for the contest. This story is cute. It made me chuckle. Amazing how children see things, and their imagination is astounding. The story flows very well and it is an easy read to follow. Well done. Good luck in the contest. I think this story should win. I would like to give you 6 stars but my allotment is out.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thanks, SL
Comment from judiverse
This is great! Sounds like the kid has been watching too much cable news. Grandfather is certainly confused about the names and titles, and then he has to learn about all the machinations going on in the doll world. It would probably dismay Grandpa, but the child has all the makings of a political operative. Excellent and humorous. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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This is great! Sounds like the kid has been watching too much cable news. Grandfather is certainly confused about the names and titles, and then he has to learn about all the machinations going on in the doll world. It would probably dismay Grandpa, but the child has all the makings of a political operative. Excellent and humorous. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Judi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this made me smile Bill and of course kids learn very fast and this sort of conversation would not surprise me these days, but your inventive write got there first! love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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He he he, this made me smile Bill and of course kids learn very fast and this sort of conversation would not surprise me these days, but your inventive write got there first! love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Verrry clever. Gotta love that kid. Where did she learn to "play" like that? Watching 24/7 news too much? Really adorable kid, in her own way. Grandpa better not cross her! :)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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LOL! Verrry clever. Gotta love that kid. Where did she learn to "play" like that? Watching 24/7 news too much? Really adorable kid, in her own way. Grandpa better not cross her! :)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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She is her mother?s daughter.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good 150 word story you have penned about Emily and her toys. As I was reading it I noticed the My Little Ponies which our grandson loves too. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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This is a very good 150 word story you have penned about Emily and her toys. As I was reading it I noticed the My Little Ponies which our grandson loves too. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from pbomar1115
Emily is hilarious. First, it was normal for a little girl to correct an adult on the identity of her dolls, but then she goes on in a heartless uncharacteristic way of a normal little girl about the future of the other dolls. For me this is hilarious.
Phillip
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Emily is hilarious. First, it was normal for a little girl to correct an adult on the identity of her dolls, but then she goes on in a heartless uncharacteristic way of a normal little girl about the future of the other dolls. For me this is hilarious.
Phillip
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Phillip
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You're welcome, Bill.
Phillip
Comment from phill doran
Hi Bill
This is an excellent piece making full and genuinely engaging use of a very small format. The underlying 'sinister' atmosphere creeps like a fungus until the final line obscures all light. This is very good writing indeed.
I am impressed and I wish you well with your continued development as a writer. This is one of your best.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Hi Bill
This is an excellent piece making full and genuinely engaging use of a very small format. The underlying 'sinister' atmosphere creeps like a fungus until the final line obscures all light. This is very good writing indeed.
I am impressed and I wish you well with your continued development as a writer. This is one of your best.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Phill
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Bill,
This is funny.
I don't know if it matters to you, but it does to the little folk.
Celestria should be Celestia and she is a princess.
Kaydon should be Cadence.
Pinky Pie should Pinkie Pie.
(yes, I have a 7 year old daughter... deep sigh)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Hi Bill,
This is funny.
I don't know if it matters to you, but it does to the little folk.
Celestria should be Celestia and she is a princess.
Kaydon should be Cadence.
Pinky Pie should Pinkie Pie.
(yes, I have a 7 year old daughter... deep sigh)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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My research was a verbal identification from my three-year-old. I will revise it for my pre-school followers. :)
Comment from kiwijenny
responabilities...typo ...responsibilities
Ha ha ha kids these days...too much time watching Fox News channel I say...
I loved it Bill.......ask her what she thinks about our real government
God bless
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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responabilities...typo ...responsibilities
Ha ha ha kids these days...too much time watching Fox News channel I say...
I loved it Bill.......ask her what she thinks about our real government
God bless
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Jenny
