Favorite Short Stories, Vol. 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "A Drop of Magenta"an eclectic fiction collection, old and new
17 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
And the writer is so right, Dawn. It's a great start to a new book and as I understand it, you're actually writing it? Although, you appeared reluctant doing so. Great flash story. I liked it. All best.Ulla:)))
  |
And the writer is so right, Dawn. It's a great start to a new book and as I understand it, you're actually writing it? Although, you appeared reluctant doing so. Great flash story. I liked it. All best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Dawn. The lines flow smoothly, the message is clear, and readers should understand the implications perhaps some in their own lives. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
|
You did a good job with your contest entry, Dawn. The lines flow smoothly, the message is clear, and readers should understand the implications perhaps some in their own lives. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This could be the beginning of a new book Dawn.It is a very interesting look into the life of an unhappy lady who laid it all on the line too many years only to finally give up. I love the line Twenty-plus years of false claims, of neglect and belittling, of looking the other way when others would claim an intimacy they did not own" Well done.
Nancy:)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
|
This could be the beginning of a new book Dawn.It is a very interesting look into the life of an unhappy lady who laid it all on the line too many years only to finally give up. I love the line Twenty-plus years of false claims, of neglect and belittling, of looking the other way when others would claim an intimacy they did not own" Well done.
Nancy:)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
-
Ah, Nancy -- I'm busted! (LOL) I have too many novels 'on the go' but... This is actually intended as a companion piece to the poem, "Shades of Grey":
Shades of Grey
by Dawn Munro
If you should ask me how I am today,
I'd tell you that I'm fine; I'm doing well.
But you should know that since you went away,
I've been assigned a special kind of hell.
I cannot breathe, still feeling you so near...
I see you everywhere; I call your name.
There's no clear danger, though at times I fear.
My days, and nights will never be the same.
As if you're close, I rush to point them out
when simple things are lovely; then I cry.
'No closure' makes me desperate to shout -
to scream at you to simply tell me why...?
There's always colour somewhere seeping through,
but you were mostly right, and I was wrong.
How many times we argued points of view,
though you would not concede, unless a throng
would back me; saying you should listen well,
that I appealed to plain, old, common sense.
Instead, consigned to unjust, living hell,
I'd be the one to drop all my defence.
There's no such thing as only black and white!
Now I will lie - you don't believe the truth.
And leaving as you did just wasn't right;
at least you could have left me my own youth,
not stayed with me to rob us both of love,
when you were never satisfied with us.
You thought I didn't care, and God above
knows I created more than one small fuss
when you would not protect me - take my side.
Why do you think I did that, anyway?
But cowards always find a way to hide
their black and white behind a peaceful grey.
I don't deserve to suffer as I am.
You should have made me know there was no hope.
But then, perhaps, you didn't give a damn,
and all I spoke was never more than trope...
~~~ Thanks, friend, Nancy. I'm glad you liked it. :)
-
I didn't know! I am sorry.
-
Oh dear, nothing to be sorry for! I am complimented, my friend. XX
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written two hundred word flash fiction. We often have secrets that only we know and that is the very best way to keep them safe. As soon as we tell someone those secrets it is no longer a secret.
|
A very well-written two hundred word flash fiction. We often have secrets that only we know and that is the very best way to keep them safe. As soon as we tell someone those secrets it is no longer a secret.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Once we allow ourselves to be abused in any way, it gets easier with every concession.
You stated a perfect idea in this line alone. Well written and true?
|
Once we allow ourselves to be abused in any way, it gets easier with every concession.
You stated a perfect idea in this line alone. Well written and true?
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Dawn, this is a reflective read. It allows the reader to feel the sense of regret, self doubt and second guessing on the decision to move onto higher ground. Staying in hiding is never the answer to being free. I did ponder the title though - A Drop of Magenta - and wondered where that fit in.
Good luck on this thought provoking read. ~DD
|
Dawn, this is a reflective read. It allows the reader to feel the sense of regret, self doubt and second guessing on the decision to move onto higher ground. Staying in hiding is never the answer to being free. I did ponder the title though - A Drop of Magenta - and wondered where that fit in.
Good luck on this thought provoking read. ~DD
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from WryWriter
Just under 200 words...great job! This little slice of life does an excellent job of depicting the traps women (and men) can step into when desiring a relationship. The blinders we wear, the things we ignore to keep the peace and our false worlds of fulfillment. Enjoyed!
|
Just under 200 words...great job! This little slice of life does an excellent job of depicting the traps women (and men) can step into when desiring a relationship. The blinders we wear, the things we ignore to keep the peace and our false worlds of fulfillment. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent flash fiction and so true that giving in to abuse once can be like an addiction and lead down a slippery slope into unacceptable tolerance of an abusive situation.
Nicely written indeed. :)
Gloria
|
Excellent flash fiction and so true that giving in to abuse once can be like an addiction and lead down a slippery slope into unacceptable tolerance of an abusive situation.
Nicely written indeed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from country ranch writer
Anything worth having is worth fighting fit. So never give up th fight to regain it back again stand firm in your beliefs. Anything worth having is worth fighting for over and over again!!
|
Anything worth having is worth fighting fit. So never give up th fight to regain it back again stand firm in your beliefs. Anything worth having is worth fighting for over and over again!!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
Comment from GWinterwin
As usual I enjoyed this short story. Sounds like this guy was a jerk from start to finish. I can see where you had more to lose than to gain. Terrible how some people treat others. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
|
As usual I enjoyed this short story. Sounds like this guy was a jerk from start to finish. I can see where you had more to lose than to gain. Terrible how some people treat others. Thanks for sharing, God bless always.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
