To Japan
Leaves you to carry on with the trip3 total reviews
Comment from Yvon
Although this story mentions the translator and translated a few words wrong I found it bit lacking in humor. But because you're from Ladner and I grew up in North Delta, I'll go easy on you. I know a Ruth Baron who Lives out that way. This is a long shot but you wouldn't be her would you?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Although this story mentions the translator and translated a few words wrong I found it bit lacking in humor. But because you're from Ladner and I grew up in North Delta, I'll go easy on you. I know a Ruth Baron who Lives out that way. This is a long shot but you wouldn't be her would you?
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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lol no not Ruth but thxs for going easy on me. I must have edited this piece ten times to get it to 500 words. I grew up in Richmond, 35 yrs in Ladner and now I'm in Chilliwack. and you? thxs for your review
lulube
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Chilliwack is kind of cool. I like the down town area.
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oh you know it well, I live in a subd. behind the big mall that rubs beside the hwy 1. takes 4 min. to beer and wine and safeway. lol actually I'm in Sardis
lulube
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Out by Cultas Lake. Nice
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lol
about `10 mins. Do you live near by still?
lulube
Comment from JudyE
A clever and interesting story thanks.
I did have a few suggestions if that's okay. The following: 'Eddie and Ruth, lived in a small town, Ladner, on the Pacific west coast of British Columbia' I would have written as 'Eddie and Ruth lived in Ladner, a small town on the Pacific west coast of British Columbia.
'Today was the result of, ten years of savings, they're off to Japan.' Delete comma after 'of'. Period after 'savings'.
"Yes, I told you that already. Add speech marks at the end of 'that already'.
'the force of the turn flew the little black box out of the pocket and smashed into the wall.' I might have written the ending 'out of the pocket, smashing it into the wall'.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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A clever and interesting story thanks.
I did have a few suggestions if that's okay. The following: 'Eddie and Ruth, lived in a small town, Ladner, on the Pacific west coast of British Columbia' I would have written as 'Eddie and Ruth lived in Ladner, a small town on the Pacific west coast of British Columbia.
'Today was the result of, ten years of savings, they're off to Japan.' Delete comma after 'of'. Period after 'savings'.
"Yes, I told you that already. Add speech marks at the end of 'that already'.
'the force of the turn flew the little black box out of the pocket and smashed into the wall.' I might have written the ending 'out of the pocket, smashing it into the wall'.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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thxs for your comments and awesome tips. I will use them. English and I are not all that friendly. lol
lulube
Comment from LisaMay
You have depicted this confused communication well and it is quite amusing. I have had an encounter with sake and it really did affect my ability to walk! even though I did not drink tooo much.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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You have depicted this confused communication well and it is quite amusing. I have had an encounter with sake and it really did affect my ability to walk! even though I did not drink tooo much.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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thxs for your great comments and review. glad you enjoyed it
lulube
