A Child Crying
War the destruction of life.12 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Very powerful images described in your poem. It really does show us the horror of war. You focus on a family with a young child and that personalizes the face of war and you end with the child's crying - something that moves every parent's heart. Well done and congrats on your 2nd place finish!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
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Very powerful images described in your poem. It really does show us the horror of war. You focus on a family with a young child and that personalizes the face of war and you end with the child's crying - something that moves every parent's heart. Well done and congrats on your 2nd place finish!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
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Thank you Iyenochka. I'm glad you can see.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is good, really good. You've described the horrors of war vividly and in great detail. Bombs indeed don't discriminate. You've done a superb job with this category. I enjoyed reading this. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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This is good, really good. You've described the horrors of war vividly and in great detail. Bombs indeed don't discriminate. You've done a superb job with this category. I enjoyed reading this. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you Jeffrey. I'm glad you understood it.
Comment from WryWriter
Why indeed? I think this poem does justice to mankind's crime against each other. Tragically, it is not viewed as such. Odd how a minority drags the majority into this insanity. Children deserve better, and our best efforts to avoid this evil. Good artwork choice for theme.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Why indeed? I think this poem does justice to mankind's crime against each other. Tragically, it is not viewed as such. Odd how a minority drags the majority into this insanity. Children deserve better, and our best efforts to avoid this evil. Good artwork choice for theme.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you WryWriter. Children do deserve better.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear POETWATCH,
Your well-written poem shocks the reader into the truth and realities of war. Nothing angers and saddens people more than a child's of war cry! Your versus strike home when a family is hurt and killed for war.
My best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Dear POETWATCH,
Your well-written poem shocks the reader into the truth and realities of war. Nothing angers and saddens people more than a child's of war cry! Your versus strike home when a family is hurt and killed for war.
My best,
Deborah
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Thank you Deborah. War is only good for the undertaker.
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Yes I agree!
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the Rhyming Story Poem contest Jose. This definitely met the required criteria. It produces various feelings or emotion, such as disgust, frustration, anger, pain, despair and so on. Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Good luck in the Rhyming Story Poem contest Jose. This definitely met the required criteria. It produces various feelings or emotion, such as disgust, frustration, anger, pain, despair and so on. Very well done.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you Alie. I glad you understood it. Where r u? In the middle of the storm? :) Voting starts today.
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You are so welcome Jose, me- here in northern Louisianna. We have had horrible weather for the past week. Voting- Where? oh for the contest?
Comment from patcelaw
Wars happen because of the depravity of man. He goes to war becasue of greed or wanting control of what others have.
Patricia
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Wars happen because of the depravity of man. He goes to war becasue of greed or wanting control of what others have.
Patricia
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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That is so right Patricia and the children are the ones that suffer. I'm glad you understand.
Comment from kiwijenny
This gave me chills for the child... we all have been one...to be caught in war like this is horrifying
Well penned poem that made me think
God bless
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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This gave me chills for the child... we all have been one...to be caught in war like this is horrifying
Well penned poem that made me think
God bless
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you kiwijenny. I wrote it so people will see that war is not glorious.
Comment from JudyE
War is just so senseless yet it keeps on occurring. No-one ever seems able to learn from the mistakes of previous generations. You have put 'I hear a child crying' at the beginning and end of your piece. I think this works well and it brings us back full circle. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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War is just so senseless yet it keeps on occurring. No-one ever seems able to learn from the mistakes of previous generations. You have put 'I hear a child crying' at the beginning and end of your piece. I think this works well and it brings us back full circle. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Yes JudyE war is an endless cycle. It keeps coming back.
Comment from Sally Law
A sad but true poem you have here. Children seem to suffer the most in times of war. Life is so valuable--we want it to go past the younger years and into full maturity. After the loss of my granddaughter, I see even more the value of life.
My best to you and in the contest.
Sally
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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A sad but true poem you have here. Children seem to suffer the most in times of war. Life is so valuable--we want it to go past the younger years and into full maturity. After the loss of my granddaughter, I see even more the value of life.
My best to you and in the contest.
Sally
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sally. I've seen war and it is not nice.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, Jose, so that is one heart-wrenching and thought-provoking write - the visuals are disturbing, to say the least, yet the applicability to certain cultural and community crises and struggles really breaks the reader's heart. The 'beast' needs to be defeated rather than fed more blood .... a perfect entry for this contest, sir! Best of luck at the polls (you've got my vote). :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Okay, Jose, so that is one heart-wrenching and thought-provoking write - the visuals are disturbing, to say the least, yet the applicability to certain cultural and community crises and struggles really breaks the reader's heart. The 'beast' needs to be defeated rather than fed more blood .... a perfect entry for this contest, sir! Best of luck at the polls (you've got my vote). :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Thank you Yvette. I'm glad it moved you.
