Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is well written with a nice coupling style.
It read and flowed well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it! estory

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi estory, I had to read this free verse poem several times and I must say it's growing on me. First off, I didn't like it much, but now I've changed my mind. It's different, and it certainly challenges my imagination. Yeah, I like it. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019

Yes, this may take a little getting used to, it does not have the traditional poetic concepts of rhyme and regular meter. This is more about pared images, but there are some alliterations I tried to create to make more music in the language. Thanks for the excellent review and all your wonderful continued support of my work. estory

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This ultra-concise free-verse poem describes that awe-inspiring scenario in which
we look as far as we can see, noting subtle changes--yet sameness over the ages--
and know the landscape by far exceeds our vision.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem, and your perspective on it. It is a poem about the experience of space, the significance of space in our lives. estory

Comment from Yvon

Excellent

Okay! kind of ethereal. Pretty good. I enjoyed it. On the last line I was wondering where would the jumping off point of a sphere be? Seems to me if there is one it would be anywhere. Something to stretch the mind. Thanks

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem and giving me your perspective on it. I do a lot of ethereal stuff, abstract expressionist stuff. The jumping off point of a sphere is an image more of leaping beyond the confines of what we know, into the unknown, on faith. It's a complicated poetic image I guess, but that was the intent. estory

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

I liked your poem for its linking of the familiar with the imaginary... things seen and unseen, from nature (hills, fields) to human impact (city silhouette, events) to space and imagination (jumping off point).

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and all your comments supporting the poem. Yes, this is a poem of our experience of place, our spiritual experience of space, how it interacts with our experience of space and place. estory

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Estory,

This is very nicely done. I like your format. Thanks for explaining in your notes. A very creative exploration of horizons. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem. Glad you thought this rather experimental format worked. It is a bit of a stretch, but not maybe that radical. estory

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

This is interesting, very interesting. I've never seen this kind of poetry. I've been trying to write different kinds of poetry myself. Perhaps I'll try this sometime. It's definately different and I like it. Great job and well done. Keep them coming.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem and the design and imagination that went into it. Yes, I like to explore new concepts of making music in language, and poetics. If you want you can check out my book Patterns in my portfolio that has several experimental pieces that I have played around with, like Curvature, Connections, Garble, Rewind, Scintillation. This one is really about images. estory

reply by Jeffrey L. Michaux on 14-Mar-2019

I will check it out sometime. Thank you!

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This shows the several meanings of the word horizon. It could be a limit or a option to expand your choices. A boundary can keep you in are impel you to span it.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your comments supporting this poem. you got exactly what I tried to get across, and I am glad this somewhat experimental form seemed to work. estory

reply by dragonpoet on 14-Mar-2019

You are most kindly welcome. Have a great weekend

dp

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Estory... Wow... I'm really glad I read the Author's notes before I even read one word of the poem. I don't even know why I did, I usually don't. Perhaps it was the "unrhymed" couplets remark.
This is really unique and thought provoking. I love the way it's put together and I wish my mind worked the way yours did when you put this down. Your exploration has been totally worth the effort. If I had any 6's left I'd give you one! :)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the five star review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. Everyone has their own imagination, I guess, and their own way of testing the waters, but I think its really important to think out of the box and try and stretch the mechanics and forms in making poetry, that's what keeps it dynamic and changing. You cant' stay in one spot forever. estory

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem with unrhymed couplets but brings to the reader a new outlook on the horizons we see around us on a daily basis, we get so used to each horizon image that we do not notice it any more in all the detail.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad that the somewhat experimental format seemed to work for most people. estory