Comment from Judy Swanson

Excellent

Cass, I enjoyed reading this chapter and it certainly enhances my understanding of Chapter 3. Anne's voice is key to placing it in its proper place in history - and creating the mental visuals to accompany the words and the actions. I feel a movie in the making. Looking forward to more later. Judy

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019

Dear Judy, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes there is merit in reading the whole story as it has been written so far. Anne wasn't the dillygirl History says she was. I believe she had a few more smarts than they gave her credit for. This opinion was what drove me to write this story, so let's see how I go with it. cheers Cass

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi Cass,

I saw you posted a chapter of this story but it has been pulled. What happened? It's a good thing for me because I have only read the first chapter and now have read the second chapter. I will be brave and venture on when the next chapter is available.

Is his King Henry the eighth? Or am I getting mixed up?

Joy xx

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019

Dear Joy, thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes, it is Henry the eighth. I am glad you have read the first two chapters in sequence as there are several more to go and it would have spoilt the story for you to read them out of sequence. Chapter three is a bit raunchy, but nothing all that lurid. There are some "purple patches" further along, but I'll leave them for you to discover.
Cheers Cass
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Comment from JudyE

Excellent

Your writing is descriptive yet never boring and we are given a clear insight into Anne's thoughts on her wedding day.

I did pick up a couple of small points.
"Ho lads! the lady is wise to our prank! - capital letter for 'the'

One of the men in the king's party was tall and fair-haired whose face seemed mask like in its immobility. - I might have written this as: One of the men in the king's party, whose face seemed mask like in its immobility, was tall and fair-haired.

Looking forward to the next episode.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019

Dear Judy, thank you for your review and the five stars. Thank you also for picking up on the capital T. The other comment on the tall, fair haired man I tried. but changed it back again. It doesn't really fit with my mode of speech. Thanks again
Cheers Cass

reply by JudyE on 27-Mar-2019

No problem at all. And you're right - it's Anne that's speaking, isn't it? Have a great day.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Cass. I had looked for a post from you and hadn't seen one. I'm sorry to have missed this super write until now. As you know, I was waiting for it. I'm not disappointed. Wonderful job. My only regret is not having a sixer for you.

You've gotten into Anne's head beautifully to describe her strength and sense of autonomy, even whimsy, playfulness and wit. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Great job. Hugs, Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019

Dear Marilyn, thank you for your review and the five stars. This was hidden in the disabled part of my Portfolio, so don't worry about thinking you'd missed it. By the way, the first chapter was written about a year ago (or more) for a contest of Erotic writing. It quickly grew in size and so I kept it also in the disabled part of my Portfolio until I decided to put it out there. I have written another two chapters, but there will be at least another one after them. I hope you follow and enjoy them too. cheers Cass

reply by BeasPeas on 27-Mar-2019

I most certainly will follow along, Cass. Are you saying that there are some posts on this topic that you have hidden elsewhere in your portfolio. If so, I hope you will repost or tell me where to find them. Hugs, Marilyn

Comment from S.M.E.Schultz

Excellent

Very unusual point of view for a potential queen...except that this will be an interesting story...she lived to see how all the other wives fared Looking forward to the follow-up.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019

Dear Friend, thank you for your review and the five stars. Anne of Cleves was a very interesting person and not the dullard history once made her out to be. May I ask if you have read the first chapter? Feel free to find it in my portfolio and read the story from its start. You need to go back a little way, but it received good reviews and does start the story at the beginning. cheers Cass

reply by S.M.E.Schultz on 28-Mar-2019

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Cass,

This is a a very well written about royalty back in the day. Ha ha! She finally figures it all out at the end. Very nicely done. Nothing here for me to suggest you consider improving upon in your writing, although, a few paragraphs are missing a line space either after the previous paragraph or before the new paragraph, however you choose to look at it. LOL

Thanks for sharing.

Jan

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019

Dear Jan, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes, my main failing is in punctuation and line spacing. I have gone over it again and hopefully corrected the wrong bits. Anne of Cleves was a different person from the one portrayed by history. As I see her she had a lot more fire and spirit than the docile Flemish mouse they said she was. I encourage you to read the first chapter in my portfolio which is the beginning of this story. Cheers Cass

reply by HealingMuse on 27-Mar-2019

Hi Cass, Thanks for explaining. I will try to find time. Lots going on at home this week. Jan :-)