Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Bill,

This is a great ending to a book I am sorry I missed reviewing. Very well written with nothing for me to suggest revising. Thanks for an interesting read. Jan

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019

Thanks, HM

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Excellent descriptive writing That appears pretty real in a fictional context. Nothing like being shot with a crossbow with an enclosed hand grenade. That should get the job done pretty well.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019

Thank you, Bill, for the excellent review. That was the final chapter which brings all of the key players to this explosive end. I am now working on a back story for the antagonist, C.C. Connor.

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Exceptional

An amazing conclusion to the story! It is a bit gruesome, but I guess it's the way it should turn out. If not, these altered people would just suffer for years to come, with or without Conner. All in all, great story!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019

Thanks, Brenda.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 13-Mar-2019

You're welcome, Bill.

Comment from coffeeandink

Excellent

I wrote a book set during a time of war, although I have never been to war myself. A line, a soldier sees things bigger, and as the last line of st. Louis chapter two part 2. I don't have a car, and i can't thank you enough. God Bless.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019

Thanks, CnD

Comment from Earl Corp

Exceptional

Having Bends show up with the crossbow was a helluva twist that I did not see coming. I hope this isn't the end because Connor was killed and took the two heroes with him. Very nice job.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019

Thanks, Earl. I?m thinking of spinning off a couple back stories.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

So, that's it? After all that....it just ends? Wow, so I would say without a doubt that you certainly chose the right title: termination! :) Thanx for the entire story over the past few months, Sir Bill! :) Yvette

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019

I may play around with spin off short stories and subplots. Thanks, Yvette.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Scary stuff and when you train men to kill and send them to war anything can happen as life has little meaning on the battlefield and rules are bent just like in offices, but it's different lives are lost, a poignant write Bill, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019

Thanks, Dolly

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

You my friend have a diabolical and devious mind. You are dangerous. Anyone who can devise a twisted and convoluted plot twist after plot twist the way that you did and keep it all straight, is a danger to us all. I am suddenly afraid, very much afraid.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2019

Thanks, nomi, for following this through. Bill

Comment from Liam Love-Lewis

Excellent

What an explosive chapter-- literally! I really like your description of the whole scene, the imagery is very clear and engaging. I especially like the "eye peering out like a diamond in a ghastly statue of coal" image. It is very imaginative. Overall, really enjoyed it-- definitely five stars.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019

Thanks, Liam

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

Well, though it's definitely not my choice of reading material, you did a great job with all the details and the plot was extraordinarily imaginative and the characters well, not easy to relate to but could really be film personas for sure. Great job.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019

Thanks, lyenochka, for the terrific review. Bill