My Frisky Kitten
(Thank you to Anna Breaux for her photo)12 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
Here on the hill it has been a tradition for cats to burrow at high speed through piles of raked leaves...looks like a proper five seven five about a witty animal...
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Here on the hill it has been a tradition for cats to burrow at high speed through piles of raked leaves...looks like a proper five seven five about a witty animal...
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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They do have fun, don't they! Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from JudyE
A great poem. Skittish fits with kittenish and I love the thought of more bounce per pounce. Some kittens so seem spring-loaded too. All in all, I thought this was a great poem.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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A great poem. Skittish fits with kittenish and I love the thought of more bounce per pounce. Some kittens so seem spring-loaded too. All in all, I thought this was a great poem.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Lovely review, thank you so much, Judy. The inspiration was my older cat suddenly getting in touch with her 'inner kitten' and doing a dance.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Excellent color and photo combination. While the kitten is frisky there was not any depiction of witty personality or actions which was a core requirement. Good syllable count.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Excellent color and photo combination. While the kitten is frisky there was not any depiction of witty personality or actions which was a core requirement. Good syllable count.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Hi Lance
thanks for your honesty... it is refreshing on this site.
I thought the 'bounce per pounce' and 'spring-loaded' aspects were rather witty behaviour for my kitty (definition of witty: amusingly clever in perception and expression)... but there you go, perception and wit are of course variable from person to person.
Your parrot is being witty (if mocking is witty)... he is blessed with the gift of speech, but some might think the parrot is being cheeky rather than witty. Or being offensive to 'crackers' because he doesn't want one!
It does say somewhere on site rules that writers shouldn't defend their work, but I find discussing language, ideas, and comprehension and how we express ourselves personally is surely why we are on this site?
So thank you for putting your point to me, which is exactly what I need to hear, to see how people react to what I have written, whether they think it works or is a fail.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, LisaMay.
-It is a very pretty cat.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good,
and the imagery and internal
rhyme is effective.
-You capture the spirit
of the kitten well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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-Very nice image and
presentation, LisaMay.
-It is a very pretty cat.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good,
and the imagery and internal
rhyme is effective.
-You capture the spirit
of the kitten well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much for reviewing, Pam. My older cat inspired me, when she burst into a series of prancing and dancing as she chased a leaf.
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You are very welcome. It sounds like an energetic cat!
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She was having an 'inner kitten' moment then needed a lie down for the next 3 hours!
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I like that description, "an inner kitten moment." Cats usually do need a lot of sleep!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I would love to see your kitten in action but your wild imagination brought the scene to life here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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He he he, I would love to see your kitten in action but your wild imagination brought the scene to life here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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I don't have a kitten... my older cat had a moment of tapping into her 'inner kitten' and started to chase leaves.
Thanks for reviewing and your good wishes, Dolly.
Comment from Sugarray77
What a cute, kitty poem. I like the entire presentation and cuteness. You used great descriptive choices when you said " bounce per pounce" adorable!!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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What a cute, kitty poem. I like the entire presentation and cuteness. You used great descriptive choices when you said " bounce per pounce" adorable!!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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My older cat displayed her 'inner kitten' to me, changing from a sedately plodding puss to an energised prancer and dancer when a leaf swirled past.
Comment from kiwijenny
more bounce per pounce spring-loaded
chasing skittish leaves
Love more ..bounce per pounce...spring-loaded ...love the bounce of this...spring loaded I see that kitten bounce like Winnie the Pooh's tigger
God bless
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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more bounce per pounce spring-loaded
chasing skittish leaves
Love more ..bounce per pounce...spring-loaded ...love the bounce of this...spring loaded I see that kitten bounce like Winnie the Pooh's tigger
God bless
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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The actual inspiration was my older cat who was just plodding along when she suddenly burst into action chasing a leaf... I guess animals have an 'inner child' too.
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Lol
Comment from meeshu
this short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, the rhythm is as bouncy as the little kitty. good luck in the contest..
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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this short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, the rhythm is as bouncy as the little kitty. good luck in the contest..
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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I am glad you enjoyed this. My older cat actually inspired it... she was plodding along when suddenly her inner kitten came to the fore and she chased a leaf.
Comment from QC Poet
Clever incorporation of the changing seasons, I'm look forward to spring. Too cold outside lately. Good submission and Good Luck in the 5-7-5 contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Clever incorporation of the changing seasons, I'm look forward to spring. Too cold outside lately. Good submission and Good Luck in the 5-7-5 contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Thanks for reviewing and for your good wishes. I think we are all ready for nicer weather.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a fun poem, Mystery Author. I like the bounce/pounce internal rhyme. The picture I a good pairing with your well-chosen words. I like the play on the word 'spring' and the reference to autumn leaves. Good job and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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This is a fun poem, Mystery Author. I like the bounce/pounce internal rhyme. The picture I a good pairing with your well-chosen words. I like the play on the word 'spring' and the reference to autumn leaves. Good job and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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I was watching my 11-yr old cat plodding through the backyard when she suddenly leapt into action and started chasing a leaf... she is just like me, when something catches her attention it is playtime!... like writing poetry.
