Comment from meeshu

Excellent

You have created some great images of beautiful sunsets here, Your writing is thoughtful and descriptive. this is a very fine piece, Randman58.....................meeshu

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a good job, randman, with your sunset poem. Your words read smoothly with great imagery.

For sure bas (as) night has stolen day

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

This is an awesome 'sunset observation and interpretation' -- that final stanza is one you should look at and maybe make a stand-alone shorter form using that same idea...brilliant! :) ;) Be sure to pop back in there and change "sure bas night" to 'sure as night' . :) ;) Thanx for sharing your cool insights! ;) ;)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from Donka Kristeva

Excellent

Attractive and effective images, this write is well rhymed and paced. You paint a natural and vivid picture of a sunset, somewhat reluctant to be out of sight.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from Ashton Ari Partida

Excellent

Really enjoyed this piece. "the sun again will have his way." My favorite line. Well written and flows smoothly, thank you for sharing!!! Good luck!!!

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Rand,

Very nicely written poem, my friend.

One small offering for your consideration:

"He shines with glee at his earths grasp.
The fields of wheat bow to him at last. "

This might read a bit more smoothly if you add a possessive apostrophre to earths (earth's).

Thanks for sharing.

Jan

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks how natural the sun plays with its dominating role of light upon the wheat fields; poet enjoys the sunlight game but finds his day is stolen in observation; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing Write for Years! -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019