C.C. Dodge
Vengeance has no expiration date...9 total reviews
Comment from Candace Nola
Chip, well done! This was an incredible story. Well written, detailed, well developed characters. Just the right amount of tension and intrigue to keep the reader engaged. Perfectly written and well suited to CC's character. I could visualize the characters, their place in the town's life, their roles. I absolutely loved this. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2019
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Chip, well done! This was an incredible story. Well written, detailed, well developed characters. Just the right amount of tension and intrigue to keep the reader engaged. Perfectly written and well suited to CC's character. I could visualize the characters, their place in the town's life, their roles. I absolutely loved this. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Candace, much appreciated! I have been away from this site for a couple weeks, nice to come back to such a kind review and rating. I hope to get back to reading and submitting here soon! (I have some catching up to do on Breach- want to finish it before it's optioned for a major horror movie;^)
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Lolol. You are too kind. But I may possibly have a publisher on the hook. So that?s exciting. I can?t wait for more of your work as well. Keep it coming!
Comment from WryWriter
Bravo! This is one great story you've written. I enjoyed it from the first word to the twisted ending word. Got to say I have a grin on my face as big as your CC Dodge character. Wish I had a six star to give.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Bravo! This is one great story you've written. I enjoyed it from the first word to the twisted ending word. Got to say I have a grin on my face as big as your CC Dodge character. Wish I had a six star to give.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Many thanks, Wry!
Comment from Scarbrems
I liked the small-town premise of this, you set it up nicely. Small-towns may seem low-crime, but the reality often is the folk there are better at hiding stuff. Your lead character was strong, likeable for all his 'bad boy' persona, and his losses instil sympathy in the reader, so that when the end comes, Bud Buxton's death seems like almost just deserts.
This is excellently crafted to show secrets, and what they are, and how they interlink, in the connection between Will's wife's fall, and the night Harley Dodge saw her body, and the obvious inference.
An excellent entry, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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I liked the small-town premise of this, you set it up nicely. Small-towns may seem low-crime, but the reality often is the folk there are better at hiding stuff. Your lead character was strong, likeable for all his 'bad boy' persona, and his losses instil sympathy in the reader, so that when the end comes, Bud Buxton's death seems like almost just deserts.
This is excellently crafted to show secrets, and what they are, and how they interlink, in the connection between Will's wife's fall, and the night Harley Dodge saw her body, and the obvious inference.
An excellent entry, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much for the kind review!
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
This is a well-told story. In fact, its like reading a novel; full of history and the right Amount of juice to keep one glued to the page. I liked that there was some amount of cheating involved, it always makes for good drama.
The end was a gory one but saw all bits and pieces coming together.
Great job!
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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This is a well-told story. In fact, its like reading a novel; full of history and the right Amount of juice to keep one glued to the page. I liked that there was some amount of cheating involved, it always makes for good drama.
The end was a gory one but saw all bits and pieces coming together.
Great job!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Sandra, I appreciate the kind review!
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You're welcome!
Comment from shaffer40
Here we have a little of everything--love, hate, and loss experienced by colorful characters--and eventually murder--in this almost typical American small town. I could see this story in America's Best of 20__ (whatever year), so well-written and compelling.
I noticed just a couple things you might want to correct:
In paragraphs one and four there should be a comma after "VT" as well as before.
Misplaced only in a couple places:
Rather than "only charged with reckless driving " it's "charged only with reckless
driving"
"He tolerated the business only because"
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Here we have a little of everything--love, hate, and loss experienced by colorful characters--and eventually murder--in this almost typical American small town. I could see this story in America's Best of 20__ (whatever year), so well-written and compelling.
I noticed just a couple things you might want to correct:
In paragraphs one and four there should be a comma after "VT" as well as before.
Misplaced only in a couple places:
Rather than "only charged with reckless driving " it's "charged only with reckless
driving"
"He tolerated the business only because"
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for the generous rating and detailed review! It was a fun one to write. I actually changed VT to Vermont last night, but will add the comma right now, as address the "onlys." These pesky punctuation and grammar rules;^) So glad I have an amazing group of quality editors weighing in regularly!
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Now on to the contest. You should do well.
Comment from Randa Dayle
Wow!! Wonderful! Nice descriptions, I would probably spell out VT, my opinion.
My favorite line... because I live in a small town too....
Funny thing about secrets in small, rural New England. They could either skip across town like a thin stone on a calm pond or remain entombed in perpetuity.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Wow!! Wonderful! Nice descriptions, I would probably spell out VT, my opinion.
My favorite line... because I live in a small town too....
Funny thing about secrets in small, rural New England. They could either skip across town like a thin stone on a calm pond or remain entombed in perpetuity.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hi Randa, thanks for the kind review! Vermont has been spelled out. That type of error was recently pointed out to me in another story, guess I'm a slow learner;^)
Comment from Vicki Ziemer
I love this story. The first paragraph captured me immediately. It is well written, the characters were well rounded, and The mystery of the favor owed to Will was not spelled out, but it was fairly obvious. I really love this story.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I love this story. The first paragraph captured me immediately. It is well written, the characters were well rounded, and The mystery of the favor owed to Will was not spelled out, but it was fairly obvious. I really love this story.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Vicki!
Comment from JudyE
A well-written story which documents how tough life can be for some people, especially in small towns.
I did pick up a few things. In the following passage, it seems Ellie didn't believe her father. She wouldn't want to go back next morning to check on a tree branch but that's how I read it.
'CC hit a deer once, causing enough impact to wake Ellie. She cried out and asked what he had hit. "Just a tree branch, sweetheart." She looked back to see for herself but it was too dark, so she asked if they could drive back in the morning to make sure it was OK.'
'He was only going only fifty-five in a fifty zone'. Delete one 'only'.
'She ambled about in abject dysfunctional for years' - should that be 'dysfunction'?
'so that CC could be near his family' - there is no mention previously that CC has any family.
'With all his foibles, he was a humble man and did not want Will to feel obligated to him for anything.' Do you mean CC didn't want to be obligated to Will?
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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A well-written story which documents how tough life can be for some people, especially in small towns.
I did pick up a few things. In the following passage, it seems Ellie didn't believe her father. She wouldn't want to go back next morning to check on a tree branch but that's how I read it.
'CC hit a deer once, causing enough impact to wake Ellie. She cried out and asked what he had hit. "Just a tree branch, sweetheart." She looked back to see for herself but it was too dark, so she asked if they could drive back in the morning to make sure it was OK.'
'He was only going only fifty-five in a fifty zone'. Delete one 'only'.
'She ambled about in abject dysfunctional for years' - should that be 'dysfunction'?
'so that CC could be near his family' - there is no mention previously that CC has any family.
'With all his foibles, he was a humble man and did not want Will to feel obligated to him for anything.' Do you mean CC didn't want to be obligated to Will?
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Thanks for the thorough read and review, Judy! A couple of changes made accordingly.
>it seems Ellie didn't believe her father. She wouldn't want to go back next morning to check on a tree branch but that's how I read it.<
- just a little animal lover wanted to be sure;^)
>'With all his foibles, he was a humble man and did not want Will to feel obligated to him for anything.' Do you mean CC didn't want to be obligated to Will?<
- no, CC didn't want Will to be burdened with the unfulfilled favor Will felt he owed CC
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi C.C.,
Wow! This is quite an intricate tale youhave woven here. It is a great contest entry and should be a strong contender.
I love the ending and it is exceptionally well written without typos or grammatical errors.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Jan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hi C.C.,
Wow! This is quite an intricate tale youhave woven here. It is a great contest entry and should be a strong contender.
I love the ending and it is exceptionally well written without typos or grammatical errors.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Jan
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Jan, I appreciate it!
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You are most welcome. (Sorry, I inadvertently picked up your name as "C.C.") Jan :-)
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No worries, I thought you were just riffing on the story!
