Loosen up
just a night off5 total reviews
Comment from Randa Dayle
Well Mr. Rooky poet or Ms. Rooky poet I think your poem is very interesting, and good. I just don't know what monkey-fart means... and maybe I don't want to! Good job!
Well Mr. Rooky poet or Ms. Rooky poet I think your poem is very interesting, and good. I just don't know what monkey-fart means... and maybe I don't want to! Good job!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, this is just plain fun...sounds like you might have even had a little help in the 'encouragement' department...LOL! :) :) But, if not, this gives a great impression of such with those short, humorous rhyming couplets and that's a great accomplishment. Thanx for sharing! ;) Be sure to pop back in there and remove the 'space' in McCoy. :)
Okay, this is just plain fun...sounds like you might have even had a little help in the 'encouragement' department...LOL! :) :) But, if not, this gives a great impression of such with those short, humorous rhyming couplets and that's a great accomplishment. Thanx for sharing! ;) Be sure to pop back in there and remove the 'space' in McCoy. :)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
Comment from moongirlwriter
This is absolutely a crazy way to live but okay. . .whatever rocks your boat. Even when I was in my early twenties. . .getting drunk was never appealing to me. Don't worry though, tomorrow is another day and hopefully you'll see that life is much better without waking up to a hangover. :) The writing though is well-executed, so there is hope. :)
This is absolutely a crazy way to live but okay. . .whatever rocks your boat. Even when I was in my early twenties. . .getting drunk was never appealing to me. Don't worry though, tomorrow is another day and hopefully you'll see that life is much better without waking up to a hangover. :) The writing though is well-executed, so there is hope. :)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
Comment from 24chas
I liked this piece, Astyanax. It had a great flow to it and had the feel and emotion of letting off some steam. You pretty much covered all the angles on letting loose. Good job.
I liked this piece, Astyanax. It had a great flow to it and had the feel and emotion of letting off some steam. You pretty much covered all the angles on letting loose. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
Comment from Earl Corp
Your first stanza read like Jabberwocky to me. I'm not a poet but if it were me I would look for rhymes that make sense. As I said I'm not a poet, but I've written some. If you're writing this for fun under no contest restrictions then you don't have to worry about meters or syllables. You've got rhymes but a lot of them are nonsense. Simpleton that I am I had to look up what bacchanalian meant up, .
Your first stanza read like Jabberwocky to me. I'm not a poet but if it were me I would look for rhymes that make sense. As I said I'm not a poet, but I've written some. If you're writing this for fun under no contest restrictions then you don't have to worry about meters or syllables. You've got rhymes but a lot of them are nonsense. Simpleton that I am I had to look up what bacchanalian meant up, .
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019