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Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Scene at a St. Patricks Day Party "Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from brenda faye curtis
This one reminds me of a few scenes in bars I have had in the past, and like many of your stories, they leave behind a lot of good memories. Thanks again for the Ned and Pons!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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This one reminds me of a few scenes in bars I have had in the past, and like many of your stories, they leave behind a lot of good memories. Thanks again for the Ned and Pons!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Tahnks, Brenda.
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Artasylum
Again I enjoy your choice of language and I reck'in that is because I grew up in the South Bill Schott.. thanks so much and looking forward. yours, diana
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Again I enjoy your choice of language and I reck'in that is because I grew up in the South Bill Schott.. thanks so much and looking forward. yours, diana
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Art
Comment from Y. M. Roger
And even when he's not around, Ned is causing a raucous! :) ;) Ya just gotta love that guy! ;) :) A really fun paddy party write, Sir Bill ... I was wondering if there would be a "Fa" or "So" ....or maybe Fat-So....but that would be terribly politically incorrect! :) ;) Thanx for sharing the smile! ;) Yvette ;)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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And even when he's not around, Ned is causing a raucous! :) ;) Ya just gotta love that guy! ;) :) A really fun paddy party write, Sir Bill ... I was wondering if there would be a "Fa" or "So" ....or maybe Fat-So....but that would be terribly politically incorrect! :) ;) Thanx for sharing the smile! ;) Yvette ;)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Yvette, for giving this a look.
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm kind of confused,Was it supposed to be Ramona asking Pons where his moron cousin is instead of Ray? Kind of cool there was a catfight over Ned though.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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I'm kind of confused,Was it supposed to be Ramona asking Pons where his moron cousin is instead of Ray? Kind of cool there was a catfight over Ned though.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Ray is Ramona.
Comment from lyenochka
Though I've never experienced it, I have heard about that kind of St. Patty's day celebration -- beer and brawls. Alas, poor St. Patrick - he's probably just shaking his head about how his day is celebrated.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Though I've never experienced it, I have heard about that kind of St. Patty's day celebration -- beer and brawls. Alas, poor St. Patrick - he's probably just shaking his head about how his day is celebrated.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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He?d think it a snake pit.
Comment from judiverse
Ned's attire is a bit over the top, but he has a great explanation that his other things are in the wash. Any insults seem to roll off of Ned. Pons has a great toast! Funny that the two girls are fighting over Ned, that great prize! You might show them making over him even more and develop their arguing more. Glad to see you are introducing more characters in this. You might identify them at the beginning, since you have more than the two this time. judi
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Ned's attire is a bit over the top, but he has a great explanation that his other things are in the wash. Any insults seem to roll off of Ned. Pons has a great toast! Funny that the two girls are fighting over Ned, that great prize! You might show them making over him even more and develop their arguing more. Glad to see you are introducing more characters in this. You might identify them at the beginning, since you have more than the two this time. judi
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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You?re right. I?ve gotten off the proper script set up with these guys and typically let the reader, rather than the introduction create the visuals and character motivations. Most readers don?t care as much as someone who might want to stage the scene and inform actors.
Comment from susand3022
Okay Bill... I'm laughing... but only because it's so pathetically true! Two girls interested in an idiot man who doesn't even notice either of them, and certainly doesn't notice that they're fighting OVER him... physically fighting! They're such idiots!!! Dumber than he is and that's saying something! (The accents are a trip!) lol
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Okay Bill... I'm laughing... but only because it's so pathetically true! Two girls interested in an idiot man who doesn't even notice either of them, and certainly doesn't notice that they're fighting OVER him... physically fighting! They're such idiots!!! Dumber than he is and that's saying something! (The accents are a trip!) lol
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Susan, for the great review.
Comment from nomi338
This story brings back so many memories. I used to share a ride with a guy who's farts a able to peel paint off the walls. He warned me and I did not believe him. One day while riding inside his truck with the windows rolled up he let one go. I tried to be a brave soldier, but after about a minute I had to roll down the window and gasp for breath for some few minutes. I don't know what this guy eats, but when it gets rotten, it gets really, really rotten.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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This story brings back so many memories. I used to share a ride with a guy who's farts a able to peel paint off the walls. He warned me and I did not believe him. One day while riding inside his truck with the windows rolled up he let one go. I tried to be a brave soldier, but after about a minute I had to roll down the window and gasp for breath for some few minutes. I don't know what this guy eats, but when it gets rotten, it gets really, really rotten.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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I think when the proteins override the carbs you get that bile smell that can gag a maggot on a gut wagon.
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EXACTLY!!!!
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Bill. Love the dialogue and the humor you used, especially the line about being in heaven for an hour. That one cracked me up. I can definitely see something like this happening in a bar. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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This was a good read, Bill. Love the dialogue and the humor you used, especially the line about being in heaven for an hour. That one cracked me up. I can definitely see something like this happening in a bar. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Chas
Comment from F. Wehr3
Fun post, Bill. I enjoy these two characters. but it was nice to see other characters as well. Maybe an awkward romance is in store for Ned. On St. Patrick's Day, I always say, "Drink me, I'm Scotch."
Take care,
Russell
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Fun post, Bill. I enjoy these two characters. but it was nice to see other characters as well. Maybe an awkward romance is in store for Ned. On St. Patrick's Day, I always say, "Drink me, I'm Scotch."
Take care,
Russell
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Russell.
