One day
A cinquan18 total reviews
Comment from Debra White
Hi Christine :)
This is a really lovely cinquain...it made me stop to think for a moment.
Time has a way of reversing or just plain altering our role in life...One day we are cared for, the next we are the care giver. It's strange to look at my children and think that maybe one day I will be dependant on them.
Good luck in this contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Christine :)
This is a really lovely cinquain...it made me stop to think for a moment.
Time has a way of reversing or just plain altering our role in life...One day we are cared for, the next we are the care giver. It's strange to look at my children and think that maybe one day I will be dependant on them.
Good luck in this contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Debra, Thanks for reading my poem for this contest and yes this thought came to me while thinking about the syllables required and yes we do alter the roles often in aging Cheers for your best wishes Cheers Christine
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am sure she will when the time comes, we reap what we sow in life and I am thankfully very close to my girls, this is a warm and caring write Christine, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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I am sure she will when the time comes, we reap what we sow in life and I am thankfully very close to my girls, this is a warm and caring write Christine, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Dolly, Thanks for your review and yes ai am very close to my mum and my daughter is very close to me so what goes round comes around I believe Cheers Christinex
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Cinquain poem. We love and take care of our children until they can take care of themselves and we can only hope that they will one day take our hand too when we need some guidance.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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A very well-written Cinquain poem. We love and take care of our children until they can take care of themselves and we can only hope that they will one day take our hand too when we need some guidance.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Sandra, Thanks so much and yes roles reverse in aging My mum needs a hand in busy roads and footpaths scared of falling so I hold her hand often Well she held mine when I was small .Cheers Christine
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem that poses a question. I do believe that if we raise our children with respect and love, they will do their best to 'be there' for us when the time comes,
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem that poses a question. I do believe that if we raise our children with respect and love, they will do their best to 'be there' for us when the time comes,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Patty, Thank you for reviewing my poem for thos comtest and one day it may be my turn ( hopefully not fpr a good while LOL Cheers Christine
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, thought-provoking cinquain about caring for children asks
a question that many must silently ask, even those with confidence that they're
loved: Will the one I'm caring for someday care for me?
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Your well-written, thought-provoking cinquain about caring for children asks
a question that many must silently ask, even those with confidence that they're
loved: Will the one I'm caring for someday care for me?
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Janice, Thanks for your review and yes lets hope our children care for us when needed. What goes round come around I hope Cheers Christine
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good choice of artwork, Christine.
-Your notes are appreciated.
Hope your mother is doing okay.
-The syllable count is good.
-You effectively show your
concern about your mother
and your daughter in the poem.
-I like how you divided it
in half-the image of taking
your mother's hand, and
the question about your daughter.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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-Good choice of artwork, Christine.
-Your notes are appreciated.
Hope your mother is doing okay.
-The syllable count is good.
-You effectively show your
concern about your mother
and your daughter in the poem.
-I like how you divided it
in half-the image of taking
your mother's hand, and
the question about your daughter.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hi Pam, Thank so much for review and thoughtful comments and yes my Mum is OK but often takes my hand when crossing roads etc. It is better than falling and I love her Cheers Christine
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You are very welcome, Christine, and thanks for sharing. Your mother is a smart woman- you have to pay attention to possible falls. I include myself in that category, too🙂
Comment from Heather Knight
I'm sure she will. We all love our mothers, don't we? Having said this, I also wonder. My daughter is loving but very independent.
Lovely poem and artwork.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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I'm sure she will. We all love our mothers, don't we? Having said this, I also wonder. My daughter is loving but very independent.
Lovely poem and artwork.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank Maria for your review I hope she will one day Not ready yet though LOL This thought just came when I was contemplating this contest requirement . Cheers Christne
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Didn't notice it was a contest...
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Chrissy, this is a lovely Cinquain, written true to form. Your words are so moving. Just a perfect question - 'Will my daughter take my hand too one day' - that is so moving. I'm sure she will. You managed to get the perfect message into this difficult form that looks easy till we attempt it. Good Luck - a contender I would say. Warm regards an good to read your work. Warm regards Dorothy x
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Hi Chrissy, this is a lovely Cinquain, written true to form. Your words are so moving. Just a perfect question - 'Will my daughter take my hand too one day' - that is so moving. I'm sure she will. You managed to get the perfect message into this difficult form that looks easy till we attempt it. Good Luck - a contender I would say. Warm regards an good to read your work. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Hi Dorothy, Many thanks for a lovely review and yes one day I hope she will, Not quite ready yet LOL. But I do take Mums hand often. i enjoy these challenges and will wait and see Cheers Christine
