Packing Day
It's sometimes hard to move on with life.15 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, I want to offer my most sincere condolences. I am very sorry for your loss.
Your story is extremely moving. I've found myself holding back tears, imagining you going through the motions, wandering an empty house. You describe grief perfectly.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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First, I want to offer my most sincere condolences. I am very sorry for your loss.
Your story is extremely moving. I've found myself holding back tears, imagining you going through the motions, wandering an empty house. You describe grief perfectly.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for your comments and well wishes for the contest.
Jo
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You're very welcome.
Comment from royowen
A close friend of ours lost her husband and a lifetime partner, and friend, a couple of years ago. She said throwing out his old clothing was really tough, so on that level I can relate to your story Jo. Ou kids grew up together, played music and performed concerts together, our kids moved on, but the memories linger. Well done Jo, good work, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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A close friend of ours lost her husband and a lifetime partner, and friend, a couple of years ago. She said throwing out his old clothing was really tough, so on that level I can relate to your story Jo. Ou kids grew up together, played music and performed concerts together, our kids moved on, but the memories linger. Well done Jo, good work, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Roy, for commenting on my story. I appreciate your input.
Jo
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My pleasure
Comment from RodG
You SET THE SCENE vividly in your opening paragraphs, allowing us to see the narrator making her way through but one more day, wearing his clothes, sipping his brand of whiskey. But your ending does not work for me. It's been FIVE years since his passing and it's not clear WHY she's packing his stuff today. I do not sense any closure in her actions and I want to. Rod
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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You SET THE SCENE vividly in your opening paragraphs, allowing us to see the narrator making her way through but one more day, wearing his clothes, sipping his brand of whiskey. But your ending does not work for me. It's been FIVE years since his passing and it's not clear WHY she's packing his stuff today. I do not sense any closure in her actions and I want to. Rod
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Sorry, Rod, you did not get my ending. Perhaps you haven?t experienced the death of a spouse. My dad died 15 years ago and my mom still keeps my dads hat on her hat rack. She says ? it still smells like him?. Sometimes, it takes a very long time to let go. Why I named my story packing day is to emphasize this day my woman is finally packing away his stuff and going on with her life.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Very touching Jo. Something I can relate to. I could feel the emotion in your story. Sometimes it is hard to accept they are gone. The desire to be with them or even just talk to them can be strong. One day at a time is all we can do. Well done my friend. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Very touching Jo. Something I can relate to. I could feel the emotion in your story. Sometimes it is hard to accept they are gone. The desire to be with them or even just talk to them can be strong. One day at a time is all we can do. Well done my friend. Nancy:)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Nancy, thank you so much for the six stars and your kind comments.
Jo
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
So much emotion can be felt in this short piece.
Love, grief, acceptance...
You have a very engaging tone. You make me want to read you.
Great descriptions and you make everything come to life...it isn't just words, it's animated pictures in my mind too.
Altogether lovely.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Hello :)
So much emotion can be felt in this short piece.
Love, grief, acceptance...
You have a very engaging tone. You make me want to read you.
Great descriptions and you make everything come to life...it isn't just words, it's animated pictures in my mind too.
Altogether lovely.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2019
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Debra, thank you so much for commenting on my story. Your words are very kind.
Jo
