~ Fowl Play ~
Short Poem - 5/7/517 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello DD,
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest.
A group may be called a murder, but the raucous cries
may be reason enough for murder of crows.
Nice word play here.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Hello DD,
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest.
A group may be called a murder, but the raucous cries
may be reason enough for murder of crows.
Nice word play here.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Thank you Robert for taking the time to review my short poem. I had fun writing this one and your amusing comments got a chuckle out of me :-). ~DD
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation, DD.
-The syllable count is good, and the
use of alliteration is effective, as well
as the imagery.
-The concluding line is a good one
for the play on words.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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-Good artwork and presentation, DD.
-The syllable count is good, and the
use of alliteration is effective, as well
as the imagery.
-The concluding line is a good one
for the play on words.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much Pam for your thoughtful review on my short poem. As always, I appreciate your comments. ~DD
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You are very welcome, DD. Short poems can say a lot!
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem is delightful in its simplicity and clever use of title.
Some people love to hate crows, even murder them. It seems strange to me that 'murder' is an English term for a group of crows. I find them to be cunningly intelligent, but yes, indeed they do have unsociable habits of driving away other birds.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Your poem is delightful in its simplicity and clever use of title.
Some people love to hate crows, even murder them. It seems strange to me that 'murder' is an English term for a group of crows. I find them to be cunningly intelligent, but yes, indeed they do have unsociable habits of driving away other birds.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much LisaMay for taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments made me smile and yes, I do agree, the crow is a very intelligent bird. Nature is a wonderful thing. ~DD
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Nature is a wonderful source of inspiration and teaching.
Comment from Aussie
You write what I feel about blasted crows! They are devious and deadly to our wild birds. They steal eggs from nesting birds and make a terrible noise to boot! Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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You write what I feel about blasted crows! They are devious and deadly to our wild birds. They steal eggs from nesting birds and make a terrible noise to boot! Well done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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K, Thank you, thank you for your wonderful six stars and for your appreciation of my short poem. I do find the crow loud in their cries and very distracting when outside walking or trying to write. They are a bird with their wits about them as they certainly are clever. Warm hugs ~DDx
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
Crows can be pretty loud critters! We even had crows on the news channel a few years back as there were so many in our area taking over! (Alfred Hitchcock's The Birds!) I like your title Foul Play and how you say a murder of crows!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Crows can be pretty loud critters! We even had crows on the news channel a few years back as there were so many in our area taking over! (Alfred Hitchcock's The Birds!) I like your title Foul Play and how you say a murder of crows!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Thank you Kathleen, for taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the crows that seem crowded on the telephone line while the cries out in their loudest voices for everyone to hear from far.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the crows that seem crowded on the telephone line while the cries out in their loudest voices for everyone to hear from far.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Thank you Sandra, for taking the time to review my short poem. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
do like your unusual use for the crows' collective word!
raucous definitely is their attribute sound
black and centered text are good choices to accompany your illustration
I very much like your title as a descriptor of your verse but I would consider modifying your middle line to:
"as evidence of fowl play --" to my incorporate the same play on words
good luck for your contest entry
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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do like your unusual use for the crows' collective word!
raucous definitely is their attribute sound
black and centered text are good choices to accompany your illustration
I very much like your title as a descriptor of your verse but I would consider modifying your middle line to:
"as evidence of fowl play --" to my incorporate the same play on words
good luck for your contest entry
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you Mark. I appreciate your comments and for taking the time to review my short poem. The collective word for crows is 'murder of crows' so I cannot take credit for that. Regards ~DD
Comment from Heather Knight
Foul play indeed! Very funny...
I have always found the expression 'murder of crows' surprising together with 'parliament of owls' and other peculiar ones.
Thanks for sharing your lovely little poem.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Foul play indeed! Very funny...
I have always found the expression 'murder of crows' surprising together with 'parliament of owls' and other peculiar ones.
Thanks for sharing your lovely little poem.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you Maria JG, your comments are much appreciated. It is strange how the collective words for birds have come about. Very interesting is the 'parliament of owls' I think too. Have a great weekend. ~DD
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on this 5-7-5 verse, DD. Your novel approach to crafting this poem is a good choice and carries a murderous message to the reader LOL. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Great job on this 5-7-5 verse, DD. Your novel approach to crafting this poem is a good choice and carries a murderous message to the reader LOL. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Mellissa, thank you kindly for taking the time to review my short poem. Love the comment on it having a murderous message - very funny :-) ~DD
Comment from BeasPeas
This is clever and well worded. Your 5-7-5 looks to be in perfect form to me and I love the image. So many crows on a wire. Amazing how they can do that. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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This is clever and well worded. Your 5-7-5 looks to be in perfect form to me and I love the image. So many crows on a wire. Amazing how they can do that. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you Marilyn for taking the time to review my short piece... even though you should be resting your eyes. I appreciate your support, as always. ~DD
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Easing back into FanStory. :) Hugs, Marilyn
