The Point of Life
It's not a point so much as a perfect circle.58 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
I totally love your poem; I love the rhythm I carries, the rhymes that flow and that fact that it comes back full circle to where you had started as the point of life. It is indeed a perfect circle.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
I totally love your poem; I love the rhythm I carries, the rhymes that flow and that fact that it comes back full circle to where you had started as the point of life. It is indeed a perfect circle.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thank you, Sandra Elizabeth. It's so nice to receive this kind of helpful feedback - i.e. to know what's "working" for the readers. Plus it also feels good, too! :)
-
You're most welcome!
Comment from jenintorre
Your poem is poignant, beautiful and true. It has excellent rhyme and flows well throughout. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishe jen.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
Your poem is poignant, beautiful and true. It has excellent rhyme and flows well throughout. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishe jen.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thanks, Jen! That was really nice to read from you. I appreciate it a lot.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. Life does indeed seem to come full-circle, doesn't it? The illustration you have chosen is appropriate for the poem's subject matter. I see you have changed the background color; I would consider manipulating the text as well, perhaps making it bigger and bolder. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
Thank you for sharing this poem. Life does indeed seem to come full-circle, doesn't it? The illustration you have chosen is appropriate for the poem's subject matter. I see you have changed the background color; I would consider manipulating the text as well, perhaps making it bigger and bolder. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thanks, KyColonel Randal. I'll play around with the fonts and see how that looks. I appreciate that feedback very much.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Poet,
I used to think a story poem had characters that did something then got into a bit of trouble then got themselves out of it and we all cheered that a happy ending was achieved.
I enjoyed reading your story poem. I agree with you about the point of life. You pretty much summed up my life.
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
Hello Mystery Poet,
I used to think a story poem had characters that did something then got into a bit of trouble then got themselves out of it and we all cheered that a happy ending was achieved.
I enjoyed reading your story poem. I agree with you about the point of life. You pretty much summed up my life.
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thanks, Joy. I'm new to FS, so I hope I stayed within the parameters. (Did I? And if I didn't is it too late to edit?) I appreciate your review and the feedback very much. It felt good to read such encouraging words.
-
You can definitely edit up until the contest deadline. Welcome to the site.
-
Thanks! That's good to know!
But IS this a story poem? The guidelines were sort of vague that way.
-
I have seen a variety of story poems in contests here lately. I'm no expert because I rarely vote for the winner so I must have BAD judgement.
I was taught that a story poem should have a beginning, a middle, and an end. It's my own personal opinion that there should be characters. Maybe a good guy and a villain. Or just some misguided soul that readers cheer for when things turn out good in the end?
I have fond memories of one lady's poem which won first place in a story poem contest quite a while ago. She told a story of how her character had to get her horse (or donkey?) to town. She had characters try to help along the way until the whole town was involved. I'm foggy on all the details so should look it up if her page is still available. Anyway, it was filled with hilarity as they all tried to figure out a solution to the problem. To me, that's a story poem.
-
Hmm. Does it all have to rhyme or have a meter? Is that where the 'poem' part of it comes into play?
-
Well, I happen to love rhymes and meter, but you could use free verse. It doesn't have to be humorous, you could make us cry too.
-
Thanks for all your help and feedback. I'm sorry to be so 'needy' here with this! I just feel a bit out of my realm.
I'm not sure it qualifies, really, as a 'story' since there's no conflict at any point, just change. I've gotten positive reviews so far, but I know in the Voting Booth, that point is moot. I guess I'll just leave it as is.
Again, you've been so helpful. Thanks for all your time and input here.
-
The voting booth is always an adventure. You never know what voters are thinking.
-
This is true, but in a way, that makes it very fun. And it also makes you not take it personally. It's kind of a crap shoot. You should enter only for the fun of it and because you, personally, liked what you wrote.
Comment from 24chas
I liked this read, unknown writer. They are wise words and hopefully everyone will read and take them to heart. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
I liked this read, unknown writer. They are wise words and hopefully everyone will read and take them to heart. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thank you, 24chas. I appreciate those words of encouragement!
Comment from Donka Kristeva
I really enjoyed this write. It's simple and profound. The stages of life pass by and you have defined them clearly and eloquently.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
I really enjoyed this write. It's simple and profound. The stages of life pass by and you have defined them clearly and eloquently.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
This review means the world to me, Donka. Thank you. xo
Comment from kiwijenny
I loved how your poem did a 360* full circle...the point of life is eternity...which is infinity...circles say it like it is...laugh and play with those you love ..indeed
Sweet bliss to be blessed so
God bless for the bliss
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
I loved how your poem did a 360* full circle...the point of life is eternity...which is infinity...circles say it like it is...laugh and play with those you love ..indeed
Sweet bliss to be blessed so
God bless for the bliss
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
Thank you, Kiwijenny. My mentor taught me years ago to "always choose joy." It made ALL the difference in my life!
-
Always choose Joy...oh wow ..perfect advice
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
WOW! This is a terrific poem and a stellar contest entry! You've managed to take us through an entire life cycle in just a few short stanzas. Very nicely done!
The image you've selected complements your verse perfectly!
Thanks so much for sharing this delightful work with us.
Jan - Best of luck in the contest! :-)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
Hi Mystery Author,
WOW! This is a terrific poem and a stellar contest entry! You've managed to take us through an entire life cycle in just a few short stanzas. Very nicely done!
The image you've selected complements your verse perfectly!
Thanks so much for sharing this delightful work with us.
Jan - Best of luck in the contest! :-)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
-
And thank YOU for this really sweet review. I appreciate it very much!
-
You're most welcome. I really enjoyed the read! :-)