The Point of Life
It's not a point so much as a perfect circle.58 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
You've done a great job unfolding the course of life from the carefree days of youth up into the Golden Years. In our youth, we never thought we would grow up fast enough. When we got there, a rude awakening occurred. It wasn't everything that we had hoped it would be. Thanks for sharing this trip back down memory lane. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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You've done a great job unfolding the course of life from the carefree days of youth up into the Golden Years. In our youth, we never thought we would grow up fast enough. When we got there, a rude awakening occurred. It wasn't everything that we had hoped it would be. Thanks for sharing this trip back down memory lane. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Jeffrey; you totally get the gist of what I was trying to convey. Thank you for that. (It's always nice to be understood in this life, right?!) I appreciate this warm and thoughtful review.
Comment from royowen
I guess I too have been through these stages also in my life, growing up, going to work, getting married, raising children, now grandchildren, and enjoying retirement, probably the best tome in my life, a Beautfully written free verse, and excellent post, good luck, I enjoyed it, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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I guess I too have been through these stages also in my life, growing up, going to work, getting married, raising children, now grandchildren, and enjoying retirement, probably the best tome in my life, a Beautfully written free verse, and excellent post, good luck, I enjoyed it, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Roy. Every period of life is delightful for its own sake - and maybe made even sweeter as we look back on those times. I appreciate your warm and encouraging review very much. xo
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It is indeed.
Comment from rspoet
Hello,
This is an excellent prose poem/story of the circle of life.
Each arc of the circle has its great points,
but the it returns to the beginning, just like a circle.
Well done
Good luck in the contest, laugh and play.
Robert
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Hello,
This is an excellent prose poem/story of the circle of life.
Each arc of the circle has its great points,
but the it returns to the beginning, just like a circle.
Well done
Good luck in the contest, laugh and play.
Robert
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Robert! You totally 'get' what I was trying to say here. (And what is the point of being a writer, after all, if not to connect with the readers!) So thank you for the validation and this warm, thoughtful review. I appreciate it very much. xo
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-The imagery, rhyme, and meter
create a smooth flow in your poem.
-I like how it progresses chronologically.
-The image in verse one about
laughing and playing is a good one.
-I also like the verse about the children.
-The conclusion is a good one and
shows how the Golden Years can
be filled with joy, too!
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-The imagery, rhyme, and meter
create a smooth flow in your poem.
-I like how it progresses chronologically.
-The image in verse one about
laughing and playing is a good one.
-I also like the verse about the children.
-The conclusion is a good one and
shows how the Golden Years can
be filled with joy, too!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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I always love how thorough and specific your reviews are, Pam. I learn a lot from them and appreciate all the time and consideration you put into them. xo
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You are very welcome, mystery writer. I seem to be reviewing a lot of your work, and enjoying it!
Comment from victor 66
There is always that "do what's right for you" and hopefully it is the right thing to do. I think you have an outline here for a good life and it would be so nice if all could feel that they have followed your words and that when they reach the end, they can say, "I have known sweet bliss". Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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There is always that "do what's right for you" and hopefully it is the right thing to do. I think you have an outline here for a good life and it would be so nice if all could feel that they have followed your words and that when they reach the end, they can say, "I have known sweet bliss". Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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I love this saying: Live your life well, and that way, when you're old and looking back on it, you can enjoy it all over again.
Thank you for this very sweet and considerate review, Victor. You always have the nicest way of brightening my day with your words. xo
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You are most welcome, gracious Mystery Writer.
Comment from ShyWri
I really like the illustration with the Venn diagram showing overlapping phases of life, and I liked the flow of your poem from youth to old age. I wish you had given concrete examples of each phase that I could relate to.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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I really like the illustration with the Venn diagram showing overlapping phases of life, and I liked the flow of your poem from youth to old age. I wish you had given concrete examples of each phase that I could relate to.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Hi, LRuth, and welcome to FanStory!
I've been a member only since January, so I'm new to the site, too. One thing I learned after my first couple of reviews - Like you, I'd given "average" as the rating on them -- is that the star system is based on accuracy of form and grammar and punctuation, not 'personal preference.' So if a piece you're reviewing is spelled correctly throughout and the words used are correct and it fulfills the parameters of that genre (for example, if it's a Haiku, and stays true to the 5-7-5 syllables-per-lines rule) then, it's not less than a five, even if you didn't particularly like the content. You can give a sixth star when a piece really "speaks" to you - when you find it exceptional.
I'll look forward to reading your creations soon, I hope.
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Beautiful story in a poem, this was something that I could really enjoy as I am on the same journey as the poem and in the final stages of it. So I look back on all the ways I had viewed my purpose. The refocus is hard throughout especially after the kids go. I think I cherish Poet your last lines the most as they are speaking to my soul! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Beautiful story in a poem, this was something that I could really enjoy as I am on the same journey as the poem and in the final stages of it. So I look back on all the ways I had viewed my purpose. The refocus is hard throughout especially after the kids go. I think I cherish Poet your last lines the most as they are speaking to my soul! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Ms. Snyder; I absolutely love this review. You totally 'get' what I was saying, and what is better for a writer than that?xo
Comment from geetha silvaratnam
The various points of life - so nicely and accurately explained in your poem. And you showed how it becomes a circle in the end - interesting! Thanks for sharing and all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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The various points of life - so nicely and accurately explained in your poem. And you showed how it becomes a circle in the end - interesting! Thanks for sharing and all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Geetha. The fussbudget in me loves neat, tidy things like perfect circles. I appreciate your thoughtful words about this poem, and thank you for the well-wishes in the contest, as well. xo
Comment from WildWithWords
An interesting reflective discourse on our changing priorities through life's seasons.
I certainly agree with your analysis.
I feel you almost certainly had to try very hard NOT to title this "The Meaning of Life" and take on personal responsibility for answering the oldest, toughest and most controversial of questions. I don't blame you one bit.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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An interesting reflective discourse on our changing priorities through life's seasons.
I certainly agree with your analysis.
I feel you almost certainly had to try very hard NOT to title this "The Meaning of Life" and take on personal responsibility for answering the oldest, toughest and most controversial of questions. I don't blame you one bit.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Yeah, that would take me into the Dalai Lama's territory, and I thought that might be a bit over my head...
Thank you for this very nice review, Bill. xo
Comment from Christine C Autry
Very well written and so very true. I find this poem to be expressing what I am going through right now. I just seem to want to just enjoy what I want to now and it would be so sweet. I hope it goes on a while longer too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Very well written and so very true. I find this poem to be expressing what I am going through right now. I just seem to want to just enjoy what I want to now and it would be so sweet. I hope it goes on a while longer too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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It's fun, and years from now, you can look back on it with delight, the way my husband and I do. I hope these wishes come true, Christine! xoThan
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You are welcome.
