Desire
Free Verse36 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
The desire of lust can indeed ignites a flame that at first feels okay, but in time it will destroy the one who cannot control his lustful desires. Good work with this poem Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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The desire of lust can indeed ignites a flame that at first feels okay, but in time it will destroy the one who cannot control his lustful desires. Good work with this poem Patricia
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Patcelaw. A nice summation of the intended meaning. All the best, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
Wow! This was hot! Well done a great poem and so true in many ways. I loved the picture you chose to go with it as well. Absolutely no spags and looking forward to more of your novel.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Wow! This was hot! Well done a great poem and so true in many ways. I loved the picture you chose to go with it as well. Absolutely no spags and looking forward to more of your novel.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Tootsie. I appreciate your kind words. All the best, Tony
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this Tfawcus! I think that this is exactly how it happens. We initially stir it and then we're stirred by it. We don't see any ill effects from it initially. Then, as you've so eloquently stated, the flame grew and deceived, bringing forth ash, dust, and death. I enjoyed the powerful message conveyed here. Very well done!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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I like this Tfawcus! I think that this is exactly how it happens. We initially stir it and then we're stirred by it. We don't see any ill effects from it initially. Then, as you've so eloquently stated, the flame grew and deceived, bringing forth ash, dust, and death. I enjoyed the powerful message conveyed here. Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Jeffrey. I appreciate your kind words and your comments about the meaning of my poem. All the best, Tony
Comment from Debra White
Hi Tony :)
This is so good.
The likeness between fire and desire is glaring - your words brilliantly describe the effect of both. A very well written free verse using poetic devices that I recognise but don't know the name of! I enjoyed the almost rhyme of warm/harm and internal rhyme of sighs/lies. Nice touch of alliteration in does/desire. The presentation of your poem is also really effective.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Hi Tony :)
This is so good.
The likeness between fire and desire is glaring - your words brilliantly describe the effect of both. A very well written free verse using poetic devices that I recognise but don't know the name of! I enjoyed the almost rhyme of warm/harm and internal rhyme of sighs/lies. Nice touch of alliteration in does/desire. The presentation of your poem is also really effective.
Excellent!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Debra. I very appreciate and value your kind words. All the best, Tony
Comment from royowen
Yes indeed, fire is symbolic, or indeed can be literal, depending on interpretation for the burning of impurities out of all sorts of substances, including gold, and if human, the whole lot, unless of course, redemption occurs. Then it burns up the unredeemable. Beautifully written, lots of interpretation will be placed on this one Tony. Beautifully written my friend, in the fine ambiguous tradition of poetry, blessings, Roy
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Yes indeed, fire is symbolic, or indeed can be literal, depending on interpretation for the burning of impurities out of all sorts of substances, including gold, and if human, the whole lot, unless of course, redemption occurs. Then it burns up the unredeemable. Beautifully written, lots of interpretation will be placed on this one Tony. Beautifully written my friend, in the fine ambiguous tradition of poetry, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Roy. I very appreciate and value your kind words. You are right about different interpretations. They ranged from bushfire to paedophilia to carnal lust. All the best, Tony
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Well done
Comment from Marjorie Burghdoff-Banks
"the fire subsides" brings to mind a love gone wrong. Mistaken lust for love or vice versa, easily done at times. Truly love this verse,very beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
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"the fire subsides" brings to mind a love gone wrong. Mistaken lust for love or vice versa, easily done at times. Truly love this verse,very beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Many thanks, Marjorie. I very much appreciate and value your kind words. All the best, Tony
