Desire
Free Verse36 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> What a magnificently profound and prophetical statement and free verse poem that particularly slipped me in the face after throwing ice cold water on and shuttering up this curtains to a new metaphorical wonder.
> Most enjoyable and very entertaining, Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Cheers, Tony;
> What a magnificently profound and prophetical statement and free verse poem that particularly slipped me in the face after throwing ice cold water on and shuttering up this curtains to a new metaphorical wonder.
Alx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Alx. Glad you enjoyed it. A most graphic review! Loved it! All the best, Tony
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You're very welcome, Tony and I'm glad you liked it.
Alx
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO TFAWCUS: I like your posting here in that it reminds me of this Biblical passage: "There is a way which seems right unto a person, but the end thereof...are the ways of death."
PROVERBS chapter 14: and at verse 12. Thank you for posting this. It is good. You are good too. You are appreciated. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
HELLO TFAWCUS: I like your posting here in that it reminds me of this Biblical passage: "There is a way which seems right unto a person, but the end thereof...are the ways of death."
PROVERBS chapter 14: and at verse 12. Thank you for posting this. It is good. You are good too. You are appreciated. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, rhonnie69. Glad you enjoyed it and found meaning in it. All the best, Tony
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent free verse poem Tony. Lovely alliteration and internal rhyme which make for an enjoyable read. Perfect artwork to compliment your work.
The heat and desire metaphor is well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Excellent free verse poem Tony. Lovely alliteration and internal rhyme which make for an enjoyable read. Perfect artwork to compliment your work.
The heat and desire metaphor is well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Janet. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your comments on some of the technical aspects. All the best, Tony
Comment from estory
Nice job with this. I liked all the echoing effects of all those 'eye' sounds. And they were pretty dense. Nice image of the individual being caught up in that fire, burned by the desire, ending up in ashes and dust. Good progression there. estory
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Nice job with this. I liked all the echoing effects of all those 'eye' sounds. And they were pretty dense. Nice image of the individual being caught up in that fire, burned by the desire, ending up in ashes and dust. Good progression there. estory
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, estory. Glad you found it interesting. I enjoyed reading your comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from geetha silvaratnam
Very well done! I enjoyed reading this, it explained so well about desire and lust. And the artwork you chose is mindblowing, simply perfect for this. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Very well done! I enjoyed reading this, it explained so well about desire and lust. And the artwork you chose is mindblowing, simply perfect for this. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Geetha. Glad you enjoyed it. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Some great hints of cross rhyme hidden in here along with alliteration both serve to liven this free verse cautionary tale that warns against following the first heat of passion. I liked this relatively short piece a lot. It works.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Some great hints of cross rhyme hidden in here along with alliteration both serve to liven this free verse cautionary tale that warns against following the first heat of passion. I liked this relatively short piece a lot. It works.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Jim. Glad you enjoyed it. Some of these poetic devices that we're looking at in class seem to me to be particularly important in free verse, to differentiate it from prose split arbitrarily into lines. All the best, Tony
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The final group of three sessions in our class are going to centre on rhyme in free verse. So you may find this poem actually meets the requirements of some of the assignments. I thought so when I first saw it. While it is great to have ones beliefs confirmed I hope you don't end up thinking that you have wasted your money.
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It?s interesting to review these techniques. It?s also been good to get to know more about Philip Larkin. I?m currently reading a collection of his prose works ?Required Writing? which has some fascinating perspectives on poetry.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem. The fire and desire stay alive as long as we feed them when we allowed the flames to burn out and die we only have a handful of ash.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
A very well-written free verse poem. The fire and desire stay alive as long as we feed them when we allowed the flames to burn out and die we only have a handful of ash.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. Glad you enjoyed it. All the best, Tony
Comment from ciliverde
This makes me think of crimes committed in the name of...I hate to say it, but recently all the news of the crimes of Catholic priests. "Each hot flame licked what he mistook for sighs. Those flames are lies." And through such lies we all convince ourselves that our misdeeds are just. The ash and dust hold the truth...
Well done, Tony, as always,
Carol
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
This makes me think of crimes committed in the name of...I hate to say it, but recently all the news of the crimes of Catholic priests. "Each hot flame licked what he mistook for sighs. Those flames are lies." And through such lies we all convince ourselves that our misdeeds are just. The ash and dust hold the truth...
Well done, Tony, as always,
Carol
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Carol. I appreciate your very kind review and six accompanying stars. Your interpretation of the poem is most topical at the moment. It seems that many of the bishops around the world are still in a state of denial. All the best, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Really well done! I liked how you fit in internal rhymes and even visual rhymes. Great use of assonance and repetition to get across the increasing power of the fire of desire which eventually burns out to ash.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
Really well done! I liked how you fit in internal rhymes and even visual rhymes. Great use of assonance and repetition to get across the increasing power of the fire of desire which eventually burns out to ash.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Helen. Glad you enjoyed this one. Heavy use being made here of some of the rhyming techniques we've been discussing in Jim's class. All the best, Tony
Comment from rama devi
Powerful imagery and closing line, my friend. Quite impacting. Good meditation on the transience and illusory nature of lust. Excellent word craft, especially the subtle shifting assonance of hard and soft I and U throughout. Fine presentation too.
I especially applaud the finesse and subtlety of your internal near rhymes in this line:
At first, when warm, it did no harm,
and the near rhyme assonance here too:
which craftily transmute his chosen truth,
with lust consuming all he thought.
Good flow. No nits or suggestions.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
Powerful imagery and closing line, my friend. Quite impacting. Good meditation on the transience and illusory nature of lust. Excellent word craft, especially the subtle shifting assonance of hard and soft I and U throughout. Fine presentation too.
I especially applaud the finesse and subtlety of your internal near rhymes in this line:
At first, when warm, it did no harm,
and the near rhyme assonance here too:
which craftily transmute his chosen truth,
with lust consuming all he thought.
Good flow. No nits or suggestions.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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Very many thanks for the affirming words of your review, RD. Much appreciated, as always. Tony
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