Aunt Amelia's Den
A child's impression22 total reviews
Comment from CD Richards
I laughed at passing around the offering plate, and to be honest, in the context of this piece, that took my mind to places it's best not to go. Instead, I'll enjoy the innocence of this child (for some reason, I picture her as a small child, although maybe she is older, but just very naive), and perhaps wallow in a bit of self-pity that I can't view the world through the eyes of a child any more. It was a much more fun place then.
A great entry, Debbie. Love the rhyme and meter, as well as the approach to the subject. I'm not sure if the contest has been decided yet, but if not -- best of luck!
Craig
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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I laughed at passing around the offering plate, and to be honest, in the context of this piece, that took my mind to places it's best not to go. Instead, I'll enjoy the innocence of this child (for some reason, I picture her as a small child, although maybe she is older, but just very naive), and perhaps wallow in a bit of self-pity that I can't view the world through the eyes of a child any more. It was a much more fun place then.
A great entry, Debbie. Love the rhyme and meter, as well as the approach to the subject. I'm not sure if the contest has been decided yet, but if not -- best of luck!
Craig
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Craig. Based on your wonderful review, this poem took you exactly where I wanted you to be. I, too, long for the days when all of life was simple and straightforward.
Hope you are doing well and not working too hard. I envision you working around your ranch, taking care of all of those animals. Take care of yourself.
Comment from June Sargent
A very cute and creative poem filled with fun and innocence! Great imagery of a little girl being chatelaine of her very own castle - sipping tea. I love the artwork as well. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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A very cute and creative poem filled with fun and innocence! Great imagery of a little girl being chatelaine of her very own castle - sipping tea. I love the artwork as well. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Such a kind review, June. Thank you for taking my poem seriously. I wanted to use the wallpaper of roses and that took me to my aunt's house, which was not a bordello by the way. I was afraid that I let it get silly, but I entered it anyway.
I sure appreciate your encouraging comments.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL - your imagination and sense of irony was working over time on this lovely creation, MQ -- you made me laugh on a morning when I was pretty sure that would not be possible! :) :) This is just wonderful -- so delightfully 'innocent' yet entertaining and humorous ... and your rhythm is just perfect! :) :) This should do well, ma'am -- look forward to it! :) ;) thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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LOL - your imagination and sense of irony was working over time on this lovely creation, MQ -- you made me laugh on a morning when I was pretty sure that would not be possible! :) :) This is just wonderful -- so delightfully 'innocent' yet entertaining and humorous ... and your rhythm is just perfect! :) :) This should do well, ma'am -- look forward to it! :) ;) thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you for taking my imagination seriously, Yvette. I just wanted to use that wallpaper because it is so pretty. It reminded me of my aunt's house and of bordellos. So I combined them. I appreciate your encouragement. If this one does well, I will be shocked. The Rhyming Poem entries are always so exceptional. It's the toughest contest to me. Kind of you to include me in the good ones.
Will it ever stop raining in Alabama?
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Nope....I think I pissed them off up there with the rhyming poem write and we'll be breaking out the pirogues soon! ;) ;) LOL! ;)
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I like the originality of your rhyming poem. You must be acquiring some jealous reviewers.
As to the pirogues, my daughter is active in the Birmingham Canoe Club. I'll text her to come get me.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Debbie,
I just knew the artwork was wallpaper! You penned a wonderful tribute to Auntie's den. No wonder your mother didn't want you to go there--imagine your Aunt running a brothel!!
The poem flows wonderfully and the meaning was just right.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Hi, Debbie,
I just knew the artwork was wallpaper! You penned a wonderful tribute to Auntie's den. No wonder your mother didn't want you to go there--imagine your Aunt running a brothel!!
The poem flows wonderfully and the meaning was just right.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you for such an encouraging review, Patty. The whole silly idea started with that wallpaper. I wanted to use it in the poem, and then I started thinking where you might see such wallpaper.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. When we are small we don't know the beautiful and artistic aunt Amelia is running a borfello in fact we don't even know what it mean, only when we grown up we will realize what we exposed ourselves to.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem. When we are small we don't know the beautiful and artistic aunt Amelia is running a borfello in fact we don't even know what it mean, only when we grown up we will realize what we exposed ourselves to.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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You got it exactly, Sandra. When I was young, I was very naive. The whole concept of a brothel would not have occurred to me at all.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Aunt Amelia's Den sounds like a veritable smorgasbord of beefcake for your narrator, Debbie.
It's always better to eat at an All You Can Eat buffet. You never go away hungry, and there's much more of a variety to choose from.
Cute poem, well rhymed.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Aunt Amelia's Den sounds like a veritable smorgasbord of beefcake for your narrator, Debbie.
It's always better to eat at an All You Can Eat buffet. You never go away hungry, and there's much more of a variety to choose from.
Cute poem, well rhymed.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Well, that's one way to look at it, Dean. Aunt Amelia offered a smorgasbord for sure. Her momma should keep better tabs on her.
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Yeah, I agree!
Comment from tbacha58
I know I'll meet my Romeo,
With all those men around.
"Bordello, what? You just don't know."
To auntie's den I'm bound.
Wow, amazing so down to earth is your story, our old way of loving, does not exist nowadays. What a pity our past is going away slowly. I enjoyed reading your story. Terry
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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I know I'll meet my Romeo,
With all those men around.
"Bordello, what? You just don't know."
To auntie's den I'm bound.
Wow, amazing so down to earth is your story, our old way of loving, does not exist nowadays. What a pity our past is going away slowly. I enjoyed reading your story. Terry
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Terry. All I wanted in writing this silly thing was for people to enjoy reviewing it. I wanted it to be like a story. Your review says all the right things. It's very gratifying.
Comment from bob cullen
I loved this it flowed delightfully. We used to have a chatter lane, that's where all the mum's hung over the back fence and spread all the village gossip. I think I might have preferred your chatelaine. But don't tell my wife.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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I loved this it flowed delightfully. We used to have a chatter lane, that's where all the mum's hung over the back fence and spread all the village gossip. I think I might have preferred your chatelaine. But don't tell my wife.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review, Bob. I bet my chatelaine would have a lot to tell.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Debbie. Please forgive me but I do not understand this on eline in your poem:
"I'm chatelaine of the estate," (what is that? LOL)
Well, at least I was honest enough to tell you I did not know.
I love your "rhymer" and the artwork is fabulous too. Good luck in the contest, my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Hi, Debbie. Please forgive me but I do not understand this on eline in your poem:
"I'm chatelaine of the estate," (what is that? LOL)
Well, at least I was honest enough to tell you I did not know.
I love your "rhymer" and the artwork is fabulous too. Good luck in the contest, my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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A chatelaine is mistress of a chateau or a very large estate. I appreciate you mentioning it. I will add that word in the notes. It's sort of key to understanding the little girl.
Thanks, Bob. You were very helpful.
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:) Bob
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes Aunt Amelia's place sounds like just the thing to set up some fine imaginations.
Superb rhyme and metre Debbie and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Yes Aunt Amelia's place sounds like just the thing to set up some fine imaginations.
Superb rhyme and metre Debbie and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Gloria, you always give me support when I need it the most. You know how hard I tried with that metre. Thank you for your encouragement.
