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I Just Want To Play

Stuck indoors and no one to play with.

9 total reviews 
Comment from HealingMuse
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Hi Gram,

What a fun, bouncy, platful poem. This piece is a great contest entry. Best of luck in the voting booth. You should do well with this entry.

Nothing I can see to suggest you consider revising.

Thanks for sharing,

Jan

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2019

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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. It is hard for children to stay indoors when it snows and they are not happy until they find they can play inside tehe house warm and comfy with daddy who could not go to work.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2019

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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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These days are precious, impromptu time with family given to us by circumstances, your poem is endearing, warm and loving, much enjoyed . . . . love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2019

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Comment from LisaMay
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What a delightfully written little story in a poem (I would say that, because it reminds me so much of poems I have written myself from a child's viewpoint!)
Your choice of topic shows the pleasure a child gets from being able to play with a parent... they are so often absent, tired, distracted, grumpy, and the poor kid just plays alone with some device or computer game. Yours is a nice message entertainingly put.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2019

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Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Such a fun and delightful offering for the rhyming contest...and all from the eyes of the littlest in the house!! ;) ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) :)

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

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Comment from 24chas
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This was a good read, Gramalot8. I love the way this one flowed and the ending was really terrific. It's great to read about a happy child with their father. Good job.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

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Comment from QC Poet
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Very expressive descriptive sentence structures and paragraphs flowing through out the poem. Thank you for sharing this poem, children will love it as much as us not so grown-ups. LOL !

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

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Comment from meeshu
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This is an excellent piece. A creative message and technically sound. a joyful message, the best reason for snow that I can thing of. well done, Gramalot.........................meeshu

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

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Comment from kiwijenny
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I love snow days that wrap us together in a wonderful white gift wrap of happiness
Because there's no snow or work on those days when it would be most unwise to venture out when black ice is about
God bless. Loved it

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2019

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