Eyes on You
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Evading the Law"Tommy tries to rescue their family.
10 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Misty, it's not going very well, for Tommy and I'm so sorry for his wife who needs all the help she can get.
I know you will feel this unfair, but I'm not going to review again as I never get a review from you. Sorry, but that's how it it works on this site. We're here to help each other. It's not just a one sided thing. Kind regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Hi Misty, it's not going very well, for Tommy and I'm so sorry for his wife who needs all the help she can get.
I know you will feel this unfair, but I'm not going to review again as I never get a review from you. Sorry, but that's how it it works on this site. We're here to help each other. It's not just a one sided thing. Kind regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your kind review. You're right it is all coming down quick on Tommy.
No, that's not unfair at all. I should read your work, and I will.
Comment from krprice
Great post.
"I can't. . . delete the quotes. He's not talking to anyone.
Tommy is one step away from going to jail. And if Jimmy doesn't watch out, he'll be keeping him company. The ones I feel sorry for are Jen and the kids.
Karlene
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Great post.
"I can't. . . delete the quotes. He's not talking to anyone.
Tommy is one step away from going to jail. And if Jimmy doesn't watch out, he'll be keeping him company. The ones I feel sorry for are Jen and the kids.
Karlene
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter and for catching my mistake. You're right they both may be locked up. Jen and the kids are the ones who will be most hurt by it.
Thank you again for your kind review, all your help, support and friendship, take care.
Comment from country ranch writer
Oh crap he is in the world of hurt now,he is going to jail for sure and Jen is going to be hurting if she don't get care soon. What was he thinking! Poor Jen.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Oh crap he is in the world of hurt now,he is going to jail for sure and Jen is going to be hurting if she don't get care soon. What was he thinking! Poor Jen.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your lovely review, It tickles me to see you're so in tune with the characters. Tommy didn't plan ahead, thought he would never get caught. He might've gotten away with it if it weren't for the medeling neighboor and those dogs too. Scoopy doo came to mind for some reason, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship it means a great deal to me, take cae.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mistydawn
this chapter of you telling us that the The Berryvillle Police Department is closing in
finding Tommy is really good and I liked how you kept all that was taking place keeps me in tension about where and what will Tommy do next.
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Hello Mistydawn
this chapter of you telling us that the The Berryvillle Police Department is closing in
finding Tommy is really good and I liked how you kept all that was taking place keeps me in tension about where and what will Tommy do next.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your great review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Tommy has to figure out how to evade the law while continue to get money for Jen and the boys. Can he pull it off?
Thank you again for your kind review, all your help, support and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
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You are welcome Mistdawn
Just to let you know this chapter is excellent . Gert
Comment from Natali Holden
I haven't read the other chapters, but this one was well done. I wasn't that confused and even though I hadn't met the characters before, I quickly grew to be attached to what was going on. I only saw one mistake, "A recess commercial comes across the screne." (screen). I look forward to seeing what happens next!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I haven't read the other chapters, but this one was well done. I wasn't that confused and even though I hadn't met the characters before, I quickly grew to be attached to what was going on. I only saw one mistake, "A recess commercial comes across the screne." (screen). I look forward to seeing what happens next!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Well, I stranger, long time no hear, hope you're doing good. Thank you so much for reading my chapter, I do hope you enjoyed it. If you have any questions, please let me know.
Thank you again for your great review, and for catching my mistake, take care.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Jimmy is getting himself knee deep in trouble. If he continues with this ruse he will end up in jail for sure.
Tommy is willing to do anything to get Jen the help she needs. The cops are watching Tommy closely. If they find him the deal will be off. No money for Jen's operation. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Jimmy is getting himself knee deep in trouble. If he continues with this ruse he will end up in jail for sure.
Tommy is willing to do anything to get Jen the help she needs. The cops are watching Tommy closely. If they find him the deal will be off. No money for Jen's operation. Nancy:)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your great review. You're right Tommy is heading straight to jail. He's willing to do the time for his beloved wife. That is true love.
Thank you again for all your reviews, your help and friendship. It's truly appreciated, take care.
Comment from Sugarray77
Misty, you have written a very interesting and exciting addition to this story. I really enjoyed reading it and the fast pace you used to keep the tension high. Very well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Misty, you have written a very interesting and exciting addition to this story. I really enjoyed reading it and the fast pace you used to keep the tension high. Very well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your fantastic review, I'm honored you believe it deserves such high marks. You made my week. Thank you for your encouraging words and your friendhip, it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from royowen
Lots and lots of action in this. First the police come seeking after Tommy at Jimmy's place, then Tommy visits Jimmy after seeing the cops there, then takes off, driving Aunt Thelma's car, and because they're listening in on the phone conversation. An excellent episode, blessjngs, Roy
Typo : invasion of (privicy) privacy?
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Lots and lots of action in this. First the police come seeking after Tommy at Jimmy's place, then Tommy visits Jimmy after seeing the cops there, then takes off, driving Aunt Thelma's car, and because they're listening in on the phone conversation. An excellent episode, blessjngs, Roy
Typo : invasion of (privicy) privacy?
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and for catching my mistake. It seems no matter how many times I go over it I always miss something, that's the way it goes I suppose.
Thank you again for all your help, your reviews and your friendship, I truly appreciate it, take care.
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Well done
Comment from KatyM
Maryland huh? lol That was a really good chapter! Wonder where Tommy is really going to go? I have nothing to add or take away. We are on day 3 of the new job. He goes in late today at 2 and stays until 10:30 tonight. He has some weird schedule. Every week it changes while he is in training. Happy Writing! katy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Maryland huh? lol That was a really good chapter! Wonder where Tommy is really going to go? I have nothing to add or take away. We are on day 3 of the new job. He goes in late today at 2 and stays until 10:30 tonight. He has some weird schedule. Every week it changes while he is in training. Happy Writing! katy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review, and your encouraging words. Hopefully, Tommy will find somewhere safe quick.
Day 3 that's good. I assume your sanity is still in tact, lol. I'm sure the hours will become better soon. Although, I liked the 2-10 shift. I'm not a morning person.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship, take care.
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I am more of a morning person than a night person. James isn't much on mornings. lol I come across too chipper in the morning for him. lol ttyl katy
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Chipper morning people grrrr lol
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Yep! I always have to tone it down when I come downstairs. Otherwise, he growls! lol
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very clever to mislead the cops, sending them to Maryland. Good for Jimmy. Tommy wouldn't have to do illegal work if the govt would help by providing what Jen needs. They can give millions in welfare to people with twelve kids who can't afford to work at a minimum wage job, but they can't save a life for forty grand?
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Very clever to mislead the cops, sending them to Maryland. Good for Jimmy. Tommy wouldn't have to do illegal work if the govt would help by providing what Jen needs. They can give millions in welfare to people with twelve kids who can't afford to work at a minimum wage job, but they can't save a life for forty grand?
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your great review. That was smart thinking on Jimmy's part, lol. Take the heat off of Tommy for a bit, until they can find him a safe place to stay. The system is broken, that's for sure. With Trump in office I doubt it'll get better. Between you and me, they need a woman in there to get things in order, show the men how it's done.
Thank you again for your wonderful review all your help, support and friendship, take care.
