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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Missive to Lady Sarah"Historical Romance - Georgian era
4 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I love historical romance, and I so much loved this chapter. Exceptional writing ... dialog, setting, suspense, mystery, conflict. In just this one chapter, I gained much knowledge about your characters. Love the artwork; perfect for this chapter.
Great story!!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I love historical romance, and I so much loved this chapter. Exceptional writing ... dialog, setting, suspense, mystery, conflict. In just this one chapter, I gained much knowledge about your characters. Love the artwork; perfect for this chapter.
Great story!!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the kind review! I had a lot of fun with those characters.
Comment from Sally Law
This is progressing nicely and showcases your excellent writing skills. Very well done, dear Chris! Your formatting is tripping you up again and we spoke of this in the last chapter. The letter to Lady Sara is not extended to the margin, and it needs to be. This takes away from the look of your fine work. Remember to preview and read your article in "Preview Mode" before you post. That way, you can catch errors more readily.
I hope this helps.
All my best,
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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This is progressing nicely and showcases your excellent writing skills. Very well done, dear Chris! Your formatting is tripping you up again and we spoke of this in the last chapter. The letter to Lady Sara is not extended to the margin, and it needs to be. This takes away from the look of your fine work. Remember to preview and read your article in "Preview Mode" before you post. That way, you can catch errors more readily.
I hope this helps.
All my best,
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Sally, thank you for the nice review. I promise I really tried to keep the right margin normal with an indent on the left, but when I adjusted the left side, it kept throwing the right side off. I still haven't found the answer to formatting in FanStory. I'll find it one of these days :-). I even used italics in Word, but they didn't come across. I'm a bit frustrated with it, too. Hopefully, I don't have any more letters coming.
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Italics never work? only in Advanced Editor. I know that stinks.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Chris,
Thank you for sharing this well-written piece. I love things that are based in history, but I do not have the desire to do the research. (With the exception of the Tudor dynasty, on which I read voraciously.)
Your piece is well-founded with realistic dialogue and a complete story.
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Hi, Chris,
Thank you for sharing this well-written piece. I love things that are based in history, but I do not have the desire to do the research. (With the exception of the Tudor dynasty, on which I read voraciously.)
Your piece is well-founded with realistic dialogue and a complete story.
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Patty. I appreciate your kind review. It's always nice when someone reads your work even when it isn't their 'cup of tea.' I like reading the Tudor era, too. It's an interesting period - lots going on.
Comment from RodG
Chris, I'll be honest. This kind of historical fiction about old aristocracy does not appeal to me, but you hooked me with your slightly sardonic TONE OF VOICE. Sentences like the following are perfectly crafted.
"Sarah lifted her heft from the chaise and pulled the caftan close around her swollen body." Also your opening paragraph is terrific.
It will be interesting to see how Lady Sarah handles her new responsibility. Using a letter was a great way to put the story in motion." Rod
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Chris, I'll be honest. This kind of historical fiction about old aristocracy does not appeal to me, but you hooked me with your slightly sardonic TONE OF VOICE. Sentences like the following are perfectly crafted.
"Sarah lifted her heft from the chaise and pulled the caftan close around her swollen body." Also your opening paragraph is terrific.
It will be interesting to see how Lady Sarah handles her new responsibility. Using a letter was a great way to put the story in motion." Rod
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you, again! I like a humorous villain, and this pair is fun to write.
