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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "St. Louis Chapter 1 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Christine C Autry
I enjoyed your work it was very good. I thought it was interesting till the end. I like when I can read a story and it keeps me interested in it in this one did I wanted to see what was going on. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed your work it was very good. I thought it was interesting till the end. I like when I can read a story and it keeps me interested in it in this one did I wanted to see what was going on. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are Welcome.
Comment from JudyE
This is a very interesting story. you have me intrigued. Just two small things I picked up.
You write 'Logan didn't move his glare from the Pub's door.' You don't need a capital for 'Pub'. Logan isn't annoyed or agitated so I don't think he'd 'glare' at the door. I might have used 'gazed' or 'stared'.
And later: Damn, women anyway. I don't think the comma is necessary.
Nice tight writing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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This is a very interesting story. you have me intrigued. Just two small things I picked up.
You write 'Logan didn't move his glare from the Pub's door.' You don't need a capital for 'Pub'. Logan isn't annoyed or agitated so I don't think he'd 'glare' at the door. I might have used 'gazed' or 'stared'.
And later: Damn, women anyway. I don't think the comma is necessary.
Nice tight writing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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I have made the corrections. Thank you.
Comment from Sasha
Great work with this chapter. Even though he has a low opinion of a woman's abilities, I like Logan and it was a good thing he was there to take care of her. This made me wonder if those guys slipped something into her juice.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Great work with this chapter. Even though he has a low opinion of a woman's abilities, I like Logan and it was a good thing he was there to take care of her. This made me wonder if those guys slipped something into her juice.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I think people will find out that Logan is a good guy. He just got off to a bad start. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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That'w good to know.
Comment from Gert sherwood
I must say Barb with you new book
St. Louis Chapter 1 part 2; where Logan comes to MacKenzie's aid from the two unknown men at the bar had in mind after MacKenzie passed out. And Logan asked the bartender-
"How much do I owe you and what's she drinking?" My question why did the bartender answer with this
"Nothing, and water with lemon!
Barb, I liked how you closed this chapter,
it makes me anxious to see what happens next. Gert
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I must say Barb with you new book
St. Louis Chapter 1 part 2; where Logan comes to MacKenzie's aid from the two unknown men at the bar had in mind after MacKenzie passed out. And Logan asked the bartender-
"How much do I owe you and what's she drinking?" My question why did the bartender answer with this
"Nothing, and water with lemon!
Barb, I liked how you closed this chapter,
it makes me anxious to see what happens next. Gert
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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He owes nothing and she was drinking water with lemon. Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh I see, even more to suspect foul play from the two unknown guys at the bar,
Gert
Comment from Miss Sherry
I thought this was a good length. Certainly packed with intrigue and action. Love that car!! I will wait anxiously for the next chapter. I like the way you write. Love a good mystery any day!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I thought this was a good length. Certainly packed with intrigue and action. Love that car!! I will wait anxiously for the next chapter. I like the way you write. Love a good mystery any day!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement!!!
Comment from Chris Davies
That was a nice turn with a good cliffhanger. Dying to know who the two guys were and what they did to her. I liked the 'white knight' going in to rescue her as well. Good setup!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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That was a nice turn with a good cliffhanger. Dying to know who the two guys were and what they did to her. I liked the 'white knight' going in to rescue her as well. Good setup!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from light
I have been off FS for awhile, so I didn't get in on the beginning of the story. I do think this is a good chapter, and I can see the story getting very interesting.
Elaine
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I have been off FS for awhile, so I didn't get in on the beginning of the story. I do think this is a good chapter, and I can see the story getting very interesting.
Elaine
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for dropping by. I am glad you're back. You have only missed one post so you are right in time.
Comment from SLMorrical
I just love the car picture. I love purple so it caught my eye. Why is it a man thinks a woman can't drive a muscle car. Logan is too chauvinistic, I think. I think the line is so she can't hold her liquor, not he. What a gentleman Logan is. I bet she only has the big dog when she isn't home. Very nicely done. A great edition to the last chapter. I was wondering if she asked the wrong questions around the wrong people.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I just love the car picture. I love purple so it caught my eye. Why is it a man thinks a woman can't drive a muscle car. Logan is too chauvinistic, I think. I think the line is so she can't hold her liquor, not he. What a gentleman Logan is. I bet she only has the big dog when she isn't home. Very nicely done. A great edition to the last chapter. I was wondering if she asked the wrong questions around the wrong people.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review. More information will continue to come out.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Soooo...good for Mac that Logan's such a 'nay sayer'....and, of course, bad for Mac that Logan's such a 'nay sayer' - LOL! :) ;) Personally, I'd be fine with the longer, single post, but I leave that to you....you do get more 'readers' with the shorter ones, but those that are already in? They'll read the longer ones, no problem. :) :) Thanx for sharing and I'll be pattin' my foot on the next one! ;) :) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Soooo...good for Mac that Logan's such a 'nay sayer'....and, of course, bad for Mac that Logan's such a 'nay sayer' - LOL! :) ;) Personally, I'd be fine with the longer, single post, but I leave that to you....you do get more 'readers' with the shorter ones, but those that are already in? They'll read the longer ones, no problem. :) :) Thanx for sharing and I'll be pattin' my foot on the next one! ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I will see what the final vote is. I have one vote for the longer ones. That's you!! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TheStoryMan
Okay Mac what in the world did you get into? Thank God Logan followed her and went in after her. No telling what could have happened. I really like your story. One minor mistake...So he can't hold her liquor, I do believe you meant she.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Okay Mac what in the world did you get into? Thank God Logan followed her and went in after her. No telling what could have happened. I really like your story. One minor mistake...So he can't hold her liquor, I do believe you meant she.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the change. It was a typo. I hate it when it happens and it happens often.
