Blind Date
150 word flash fiction6 total reviews
Comment from TheStoryMan
I figured her point of view wouldn't be the same as his. He tried too hard to impress her and of course failed. You did a good job telling the evening from Cierra's point of view.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I figured her point of view wouldn't be the same as his. He tried too hard to impress her and of course failed. You did a good job telling the evening from Cierra's point of view.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review. I very much appreciate it.
Comment from Heather Knight
Oh! Poor Jeffrey. I kind of suspected this when I read the other story, but I had to make sure.
Sometimes the same story can be completely different when told from two different perspectives. This is a perfect example.
Thanks.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Oh! Poor Jeffrey. I kind of suspected this when I read the other story, but I had to make sure.
Sometimes the same story can be completely different when told from two different perspectives. This is a perfect example.
Thanks.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. Yes, it shows how a continuation of the story could go in a whole different direction. Writing can be
so much fun!
Comment from JudyE
Oh poor Jeffery. It is really interesting reading the same situation from two different viewpoints. What a difference in how these two perceive what's happening.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Oh poor Jeffery. It is really interesting reading the same situation from two different viewpoints. What a difference in how these two perceive what's happening.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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It was fun trying this and discovering a continuation of it could go in a different direction entirely.
Comment from Mistydawn
He was moving a bit fast. Sitting next to me putting his arm around me, not sure I would've stayed either. This piece of flash fiction is well-written, interesting, start to finish.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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He was moving a bit fast. Sitting next to me putting his arm around me, not sure I would've stayed either. This piece of flash fiction is well-written, interesting, start to finish.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much. I'm happy you enjoyed my writing.
Comment from meeshu
not a great first date. your story I nicely written with very good language. it is easily told within the confines of 150 flash fiction. nice job, Deborah...............meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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not a great first date. your story I nicely written with very good language. it is easily told within the confines of 150 flash fiction. nice job, Deborah...............meeshu
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much for enjoying my story. It's fun to discover how a story can be told in 150 words.
Comment from Douglas Paul
Ahhhh - the old restroom trick LOL. I liked this story - very realistic. I am sure that many dates gained from the internet dating sites turn out similar to this one
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Ahhhh - the old restroom trick LOL. I liked this story - very realistic. I am sure that many dates gained from the internet dating sites turn out similar to this one
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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I'm sure they probably do turn out like this. I made this story up. I wrote it from his point of view and then from hers. I submitted her side. Thank you for reviewing.
