Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter Three, Part 3"It was their world long before our existence...
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Comment from susand3022
Wow Yvette... That's one handy trick to have... make them drink the kool-aid without having any kool-aid! Can you send this guy to the Capital? He can stop at the House... and at Congress... and in the Oval! We'll be all set! All for One and One for All!!!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Wow Yvette... That's one handy trick to have... make them drink the kool-aid without having any kool-aid! Can you send this guy to the Capital? He can stop at the House... and at Congress... and in the Oval! We'll be all set! All for One and One for All!!!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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You so funny!! And I'm so glad you made it through this as well -- yeah, I'm pretty sure Demetrius doesn't do invitations...but if he decides to...yeah, I'll just leave it at that! ;) ;) Thanx again, ma'am, and take care! ;) :)
Comment from Ricky1024
This Chapter was well written.
I liked the Theme here.
Adjective Content painted an interesting picture.
Thanks and have a Blessed Evening.
Dr.Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This Chapter was well written.
I liked the Theme here.
Adjective Content painted an interesting picture.
Thanks and have a Blessed Evening.
Dr.Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for stopping in on this chapter -- always enjoy hearing your perspective! ;) :) Have a great week! ;)
Comment from Debbie Pope
Great chapter. You know that I have no suggestions for revisions so I will just give you my impressions. I am guessing that Demetrius has the disappearing (invisibility) talent that we have seen earlier in the book. I am guessing that Demetrius was not involved in an earlier disappearing act since he does not know about Marguerite's abandonment by her dad. Demetrius clearly has other mesmerizing talents. He seems to be able to put people into trances. I would not mind one of those trances with the child like happiness. I wonder if there will be a romantic involvement between the good looking Demetrius and Marguerite. Maybe there will be more hopscotching on goosebumps.
Well those are my thoughts. Good luck with your writing. I'm all in.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Great chapter. You know that I have no suggestions for revisions so I will just give you my impressions. I am guessing that Demetrius has the disappearing (invisibility) talent that we have seen earlier in the book. I am guessing that Demetrius was not involved in an earlier disappearing act since he does not know about Marguerite's abandonment by her dad. Demetrius clearly has other mesmerizing talents. He seems to be able to put people into trances. I would not mind one of those trances with the child like happiness. I wonder if there will be a romantic involvement between the good looking Demetrius and Marguerite. Maybe there will be more hopscotching on goosebumps.
Well those are my thoughts. Good luck with your writing. I'm all in.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This is me with a very sly grin on my face and a twinkle in my eye saying 'I'm so glad you're brain is working in those directions...' :) :) :) And, with that statement, I will gracefully thank for your review....she grins again! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from meeshu
great writing, MD. this Demetrius is a fascinating character, I imagine him as soothing of a Grim Reaper in sunglasses. looking forward to your next................meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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great writing, MD. this Demetrius is a fascinating character, I imagine him as soothing of a Grim Reaper in sunglasses. looking forward to your next................meeshu
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Gotta say, Demetrius is my fav character of all of them even those to come... thanx for the review, dude, and thanx for sticking with it! ;) :) Take care of you and Cyndy! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written part of chapter three. It is strange that a father just drop off his only child at an orphanage and never even visit or question about her for six years or more.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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A very well-written part of chapter three. It is strange that a father just drop off his only child at an orphanage and never even visit or question about her for six years or more.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Lots of strange things going on here, I suppose, Sandra! ;) LOL! ;) Thanx for the read and review! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from kiwijenny
Intriguing and I know I'm missing something a whole lot of somethings actually...
Well I too like Koko's turn of phrase...
Note sometimes you said Charlie and another time it was Charlise
Well penned and I will keep reading.
God bless
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Intriguing and I know I'm missing something a whole lot of somethings actually...
Well I too like Koko's turn of phrase...
Note sometimes you said Charlie and another time it was Charlise
Well penned and I will keep reading.
God bless
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanx for dropping by, kiwi -- and thanx for the note about the name....her name is Charlise with nickname of Charlie. :) ;) Appreciate your read and review!! ;) :) Enjoy the remainder of the weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
You've wove into your story the importance of character creation, whether illusory or not, the individual importance of them, they all fascinate. The two that lay the foundation of your story are Demetrius and Koko, they will play a stronger role as it goes along. Well done Yvette, excellently done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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You've wove into your story the importance of character creation, whether illusory or not, the individual importance of them, they all fascinate. The two that lay the foundation of your story are Demetrius and Koko, they will play a stronger role as it goes along. Well done Yvette, excellently done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Roy, you make me smile with your reviews...thanx for taking the time to read me and to post them! ;) ;) Enjoy the remainder of the weekend! ;) Yvette
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Bless you dear friend
