The End of the Edge
Life is what you make of it25 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Unless of course, God casts them into the sea of nothingness, (Psalm 103:12) then they're just an unforgiven grudge. Beautfully written theme, in 8686 in abcb rhyming and smooth, articulate 8686 quatrains, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Unless of course, God casts them into the sea of nothingness, (Psalm 103:12) then they're just an unforgiven grudge. Beautfully written theme, in 8686 in abcb rhyming and smooth, articulate 8686 quatrains, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you Roy for you insightful feedback. I always appreciate your comments.
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Most welcome Roy
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Well done
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about how we perceive life and how we do things different than others but everyone believes his method is the correct method and the others have it all wrong.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem about how we perceive life and how we do things different than others but everyone believes his method is the correct method and the others have it all wrong.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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We can't all be right though. I guess we can only try our best. Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from victor 66
Hello Delahay,
You're poem was fun to read and made sense as well. It had good rhyme, rhythm and it flowed well. And we all hope for that in our creativity. I don't think I fall into the category of your poem, at least I hope not. MY philosophy is, "They're all good days, some are just better than others". It is true, if a person loses focus, they can have a pretty sad life. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Hello Delahay,
You're poem was fun to read and made sense as well. It had good rhyme, rhythm and it flowed well. And we all hope for that in our creativity. I don't think I fall into the category of your poem, at least I hope not. MY philosophy is, "They're all good days, some are just better than others". It is true, if a person loses focus, they can have a pretty sad life. Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your reveiw and good wishes. You have a good philosopyhy.
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You are most welcome, Delahay
Comment from 24chas
This was a good write, Delahay. I think you had a nice flow and the rhyme scheme worked nicely. The message was clear especially at the end. Nice job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This was a good write, Delahay. I think you had a nice flow and the rhyme scheme worked nicely. The message was clear especially at the end. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Del,
Very nicely done! Your excellent verse speaks volumes of truth here, my friend.
My favorite stanza is the last one.
Nothing to suggest improving upon here.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Hi Del,
Very nicely done! Your excellent verse speaks volumes of truth here, my friend.
My favorite stanza is the last one.
Nothing to suggest improving upon here.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Miss Sherry
Great poetry!
"You can build your funeral pyre
Paint it with a brush of fire
The lies you leave never fade
Cut on the edge of Occam's blade"
This is my favorite stanza, though the whole poem is written well and filled with bits that soar. I like the rhyme scheme and your rhyme very well. This is the first of your work that I have read and I am impressed.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Great poetry!
"You can build your funeral pyre
Paint it with a brush of fire
The lies you leave never fade
Cut on the edge of Occam's blade"
This is my favorite stanza, though the whole poem is written well and filled with bits that soar. I like the rhyme scheme and your rhyme very well. This is the first of your work that I have read and I am impressed.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and for your kind comments. I appreciate the feedback and your letting me know your favorite bits.
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You are so welcome!!
Comment from QC Poet
Expressive message for everyday life.
Reminds me of What is was and Will be again. Great captivating read and concept poem, Enjoyable. Thanks for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Expressive message for everyday life.
Reminds me of What is was and Will be again. Great captivating read and concept poem, Enjoyable. Thanks for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comments.
Comment from kiwijenny
You can build your funeral pyre
Paint it with a brush of fire
Oooo thisnis such a good image
Well penned poem...life is what you make it
God bless
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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You can build your funeral pyre
Paint it with a brush of fire
Oooo thisnis such a good image
Well penned poem...life is what you make it
God bless
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your feedback. I always appreciate your comments.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You've done a very commendable job with this poem. You not only wrote rhymes well, you packed into each line and verse a contradiction of life that we've all experienced at one time or another. The only thing I'd disagree with is the last line about our deeds following us until we die. With Google, they'll follow us long past the grave. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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You've done a very commendable job with this poem. You not only wrote rhymes well, you packed into each line and verse a contradiction of life that we've all experienced at one time or another. The only thing I'd disagree with is the last line about our deeds following us until we die. With Google, they'll follow us long past the grave. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and for your insightful comments. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Gloria ....
Yep so true. A lie is a lie is a lie and yet it is always amazing to see people deny they've lied when the evidence is right there. Ignoring it doesn't mean it didn't happen. lol
Excellent sentiment in a clearly stated poem. The simplest solution with the least assumptions is usually the right one.
Most enjoyable.
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Yep so true. A lie is a lie is a lie and yet it is always amazing to see people deny they've lied when the evidence is right there. Ignoring it doesn't mean it didn't happen. lol
Excellent sentiment in a clearly stated poem. The simplest solution with the least assumptions is usually the right one.
Most enjoyable.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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It is amazing, isn't it. Thank you for your feedback and comments.
