Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I wish that I could keep reading this one. I do not like stopping with that intriguing closing. Rhetorical questions--What is the meaning of that light thing? What is the meaning of sepala? Why is the distant storm disappearing?
This is complex, and definitely not your normal story. It is certainly keeping my interest. I have been looking forward to reading it for hours. I waited until my chores were done so that I can enjoy with no distractions. I still have no idea what is going on. I know that is what you intend. I can't wait to start putting the pieces together.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019

So glad you're enjoying the background/set-up and that you're catching things like that light/storm thing ... It'll all eventually fall together, I promise!! ;) ;) Thank you for your wonderful faithfulness, Debbie -- not just this but in everything...to know that you're out there is so appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

Cool beans, Dude. this just keeps getting better as you spoon feed me. don't get me wrong that's the way I like a story I'm reading. not hurried. see you next segment, have a weekend!.....................PD.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019

Thanx so much for your faithfulness to my 'yarn', PD --it truly means a lot to MD! :) :) Y'all take care and keep each other warm! ;) ;) Yvette

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh, I think we are getting closer to finding the connection between this set of people and the set of characters we began with, right? I look forward to finding out more about the niece!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019

So glad you're enjoying the background/set-up and yes, it'll all eventually fall together, I promise!! ;) ;) Thank you for your wonderful faithfulness, Helen -- so appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Yvette,

The scene was certainly very ominous, and your writing enhanced the action. I think the use of light to convey the oncoming darkness of nature was inspired.

I don't know whether I'll be able to sleep tonight, but the chapter works very well.

Thank you for sharing,

~MP~

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019

So glad you're enjoying the background/set-up and that you're catching things like that weather and such ... It'll all eventually fall together, I promise!! ;) ;) Although, I'm not necessarily promising sleep - LOL! ;) ;) Thank you for your faithfulness, MP -- so appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette

Comment from aryr

Excellent

An interesting chapter Yvette, each of the characters that live at the refuge have distinctive characteristics and reasons to be there. With each chapter we learn a little more but the truth is that Marguerite now is in control, even though she doesn't know it. Well done. It is a nice touch to have the weather respond to emotions.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019

So glad you're enjoying the background/set-up and that you're catching things like that weather and such ... It'll all eventually fall together, I promise!! ;) ;) Thank you for your wonderful faithfulness, Alie -- so appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette

reply by aryr on 16-Feb-2019

You are so welcome Yvette

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Yvette,

Intriguing chapter! And very nicely done. You paint pictures well with your words, my friend.

One small offering for your consideration:

"Peadar worked in the kitchen to put away the multitude of food left over from earlier. "

Could be just me, but I think it would flow more easily if you add "containers" after food, or something similar to work with the word myriad.

Thanks for sharing,

Jan

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019

So glad you enjoyed this one, Jan -- and I'm so glad your along for this crazy ride! ;) ;) I looked at the sentence again, and I think you were right that it was a myriad. I took out one of the prepositional phrases so that it's easier to digest now -- thanx for that head up....very appreciated!! ;) ;) Take care up/over there and have a great weekend, my friend! ;) ;) Yvette

Comment from Rhonda Skinner

Excellent

Another interesting and well-written chapter. Just noticed a couple little things.
... noticed that Kato keep (kept) one eye alert at all times
Which (This) was probably what he had intended.


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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019

So glad you enjoyed thisinstallment, Rhonda!! :) ;) And thanx for those catches, ma'am -- have already fixed! ;) ;) So grateful for you! :) Take care out there! ;) Yvette :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the way you've scribingly handled this post Yvette, building in something almost supernatural in the frame of Demetriius, with the vice like grip, and the larger than normal canine. The rumbling sounds associated with weather, with no clouds, very eerie feel to this episode. Good descriptive imagery my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Geoffrey made sure to emphasis(e)

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019

So glad you enjoyed and have started to pick out some of the 'not so normal' things in the story, Roy!! :) ;) And thanx for the catch, sir -- have already fixed! ;) ;) You're awesome! :) Take care over there! ;) Yvette :)

reply by royowen on 15-Feb-2019

Excellent